REPRESENTING SYNDICATE JBRENN
Feverishly he peaked early the sleepish geek... Either he's freaked or he sheepish to speak... -got a few multies in there, punctuation and grammar would help the reader follow along easier. Neither he's geeked B's Bad meanest to teach... Mouth breathers impede the cleanest of speech... -B's Bad a bit of a stretch but it made enough sense to me to work The fiercest to breech the sites weirdest emcees... Speared spirits mirrors tiers best mean nothing to me... -End rhymes off too much for my liking, the first half of the second line had potential but you needed to rhyme more of the syllables for it to have been as effective as it could have been. Vets fear B steer clear I'm armstrong stretch with the reach... Lets hear jeers tears flow like liquor when deaths in the street... -this was dope Now he's like meeting Meth blessed by a deaf psychotic priest... Iconic feasts test his chest breath filled with microscopic beasts... -second line was a bit wordy but decent closer.
- Could have been tidied up to have been even better but still a solid opening piece from the Brennster
TRIZZY TRE
A lurking wordsmith wit Murderous fists puts yall on a witness stand... I'll kill myself just to spit in a Notorious face cuz i aint a Biggie fan! -solid opener, i enjoy your setup/punch battle style, its refreshing when pulled off as effectively as you often do. Wicked hands land heavy shots, battle me? let's go bitch... blessed flow shit, no Tamfa but you'll still be a dead Poet! -another quality bar if my memory is correct and the Poet or w/e got banned for being Tamfas multi account Gotta smooth toung yet I wrote it, Tre prone to some violence... Some of yall been quiet like you're having your own moment of silence! -lol @ us both saying we have smooth tongues in the same cypher Hoe in disgust shit, u got some bitchy mood centered hate.... Never drop Gold, just old Olympians wit Bruce Jenner traits! -this was close to something i heard before, i think it was Bruce Jenners waist or something, cool twist on it tho Who's real or fake? ...jock hoppin? Damn that boy swallowin... LA's like Peyton, due to poor management u lost that 'cult' following! -was this at someone? It's ongoing legends that feel threatened ..worry u wack bitch... So if I say I apologize, it's between ur shoulders I bury-the-hachette! -dope closer. quality verse man, you brought the heat.
CHAIN
I’ll baptize my flow in Baltimorean flames ‘fore it gets out of hand like Scorpion’s chain. -lol fuck you More than deranged, I played Corleone games Strong, and calmly I could chloroform Bane [Dang!] Bars, I be fighting them the Cormier way Puns push the point like corkscrews through brains. Hammers gon’ bring order like courtroom debates Turning long nosed liars into swordfish soufflé. A morbid display of a force on L.A The foreign exchange student formally named [CHAIN] From the aught school so unusually dope… That dudes in the know think he’s Jordan on base [HEY!] I’m different like autopsies on corpses of greys Deliver like my timing has stork DNA. Laying down the law in ‘bout 48 ways -I bought that book ^ a few months ago, haven't started reading it yet For grown ass men calling shorties their ‘bae’. Effortless, YES, I’m the source of dismay It’s "none of the work with all the glory" they say. Fuck it, the rich will let the poor ones donate Business over bitch shit, ORG’s the domain. The ordained preacher with assorted arrays… Of truths which he drops just like a porcelain vase. A porcelain vase from the Victorian age I’m the reason the folks at the morgue need a raise. - k yeah, its like every one of your lines are the setup and punch combined and you use the same flow (in a good way) to deliver the entire verse. you're really good at what you do. Delicious verse
BEANS
I FUCKIN SAID!.... My spits provoke a sickening cult that been killin since ya text game birth'd My fist's a grope & grip ya throat till u choke worse than ME in my Ch3kkgame verse -LOL Yet I'm a test when scoped, y'all vets take notes as my verbal machete sway & I protect n hope that u left dead & smoked till there's no background check like Freddie Gray - not bad, bit of a stretch toward a flavor of the month topic but executed decently. AAAH FUCK IT!.. I start my DAY wit MISSION BONDS that'll shoot into ya heart wit a fist ....Facts those trolls^^ got more pillar strength for an Empire than DOOM, BARKER & BLISS Start wit a quit! Before thinking U can dance wit Beans in text, bitch Cos like nervous prom chicks who been on dick? U'll be found in a dumpster ...dead kid! -DOPE My textual tactics crack ribs, u faggits get bodied yo Ya bangin crew? I'll hang them dudes, so stop the jokes The 2's blast, go Boom Bap! Cos "text gotta go"... I'll scar child of Sharp Styles as this text head beat 1 of yours in audio Hoe run! I'll cut u ya fuck dude & you'll prolly elope one Faggot "BBoy" think u Poet S'Why you'll get a bo-son Loading songs the only harm u seem tough & Buffer So from America to you, Fuck you Cunt & Go fuck your mother! -your persona and angle at this is really dope man haha loving it
***deep breath***
My hyper stance be lighting hand speed, so faggots quit Y'all dandy diapers & diaper dandy cos y'all bags of shit -yes Attack'm quick, a drug addict who Smackin wrist till my head gets lift Or in chats killin cats gettin drunk wit Elite, EX & Tits -why havent we got drunk in chat before This hot skill like pepper seed to the nostril & you'll drop light My punches put a hit on more dudes than Amber Rose in the spotlight -i didnt catch the reference but this seemed like a dope bar What I makes great, ya only flames grate so die for hates sake Cos u know I'm harder than EX when he reading articles on deflate gate! -BAM. sick verse man, good job putting this together Peace
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