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Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=40315
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 6:27am
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Posted By: emcee squared
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Date Posted: 08 August 2015 at 1:59am
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i'm an american. possibly,selfish,fat- an embarrassment. well. what do YOU Say? being that there's a dot U.K. i suppose i could warp my accent- and play the games that You play. you Brits "got it easy". this Shit's not that easy. i Bend Rhymes ten times over. i Can Drive Sober but i kinda wanna die,and take along with me?,my Chevy Nova. so i chug alcohol and drive on the wrong side'a the road,or on the shoulder. i'm a lyrical soldier.. my American friends callme a robot. my rhymes. are so hot, my circuitry is overloading got some plane tickets- the circus show- is coming over.. it's Partially Magic how my text-styles can cross the Atlantic and after i leave Britain?- i'll visit the Baltics- per haps Africa. have u heard enough Self aggrandizing? why didju Come this far? Close That Web Site Thing.. i guess that's Hip-Hop. lemme search my calendar for when this Shit Stops!! uh, yeah..there's a lot a topics. i usually just pick one and drop it. politics. Gun Rhymes. drug crimes. &love lives. pop culture- young rappers- "stunting"- Flaunting Ice. ..if i had money I would Too- i'm "something nice". ..anyway, This-is-how i Write.. ..i red some things Here alotta good shit- but alotta shite. all in all: i Like The Site. cuz i like ta type. |
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Posted By: Geddis
Date Posted: 08 August 2015 at 2:14am
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Keep the shit going, if you want to check out my first rap compilation https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zjC1reJVO20 |
Posted By: MVC Kid KO
Date Posted: 08 August 2015 at 2:45am
| Though I see some potential, you need a lot of improvement. The structure and grammar's all over the place, and I couldn't tell if you were boasting about America or your rap skills. For example, the first stanza's just you taking a couple shots at the UK. This verse would've been more aggressive if you used that theme all the way through. The second stanza's more along the lines of brag swag than you taking shots at the UK. While the third stanza was completely off-topic, it had more substance over the first few bars. I say keep practicing and you could get very far. |
Posted By: emcee squared
Date Posted: 08 August 2015 at 4:02am
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Thanks MVC. I am used to this kind of feedback. But I understand where you're coming from and I appreciate the read, and the comment. I'm working on how I display the text. |
Posted By: emcee squared
Date Posted: 08 August 2015 at 4:07am
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thanks as well Geddis. mvc, I kind of whipped this up focusing on the rhymes over the content. I think Brits have an "easier go" at bending rhymes. Not so much taking pot-shots lol. I wrote this in a British accent, which I'm not bad at tbh. Not great, but not bad. will try to feed some here next weekend. |
Posted By: JBrenn
Date Posted: 09 September 2015 at 6:07am
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wow the ignorance in this is so over whelming..... -------------  |
Posted By: emcee squared
Date Posted: 09 September 2015 at 8:06am
Please elaborate. I guess I assumed that most people here were from UK, but as I look at ppl's locations it seems to be quite a healthy mix. Is that the ignorance you refer to? Or something else? Thanks |
JBrenn wrote:Posted By: emcee squared
Date Posted: 22 April 2023 at 11:26am
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Found it. Idiots. Check my rough unmixed tracks on pharaohsarmy52 'cloud -Serg ------------- o baby d0nt h8 me |