I was enticed from the first roll of the dice

ignorin’ all advice, never thinkin’ about the price

all eyes on the prize, no sign of demise

lucks in full supplies, life risin to the skies

Can't describe the rush when ya hit the jackpot

always got my lucky dime as a mascot

on an all time high, no longer a small fry

I was that guy, catchin’ the eye, of hotties nearby

Really, you can’t go vegas without hittin’ the casino

lookin like Al Pacino with my arm round a latino

stackin chips, while I’m thinkin bout her hips

with my witty quips, everyone else I eclipse

an unstoppable force, from this dark horse

a king's ransom I’ll source, if i just stick the course

success is embedded, of this I can’t be mislead

without a sign of dread I put a thousand on red

but as the saying goes, 'The house always wins'

an this is where the story of my demise begins

lucky streak at an end and bank balances descend

ladies you befriend no longer pretend to attend

loss after loss, I'm no longer a boss

my heart I cross, as with the dice it’s one last toss

Lucks gotta turn around, lost to much to back down

my pants turn brown, its time to skip town

now my lifes in the gutter

all because i couldn’t resist a lil flutter

beggin on the street as I recollect the defeat

lies and deceit, just to earn something to eat

Barely survivin’ I’m forced to go dumpster divin’

with ma belly cryin I find a briefcase hidin

discoverin’ the trash is stuffed fulla cash

in flash, im in the bookies bettin the whole stash

tho it provided a turn of event, unfortunately the most suprising in 2 last bars was how downright s imple and plain way it ended. Overall a decent little read that sticked to the topic.

Exo, right from the bat I noticed you utilise more the advanced schemes. The story was pretty cold, especially since you delivered such an intense build up. You conveyed some pretty strong emotions to the character; the resentment, bitterness and following narcissism was portrayed in a smooth way. 

Exo, more complex bars and narrative, also flowed well. His verse ended kinda sudden too, but as a whole it was way more cohesive.

Vote Exo, except for the intepretation that was about even, I feel he was more sharp at all aspects of writing.     

Exo - Great technical writing and flow. The descriptive work was well done and I liked the references to the books. As well as the sail/waves reference relating to the smart and stupid. Storywise I felt it started off okay and just stayed at the middle the whole. I didn't feel this drop had a real storylike closure. The ending line was good closing line, but the story itself still felt to open to me. Wish there was more conflict, more going on within his greed. Some sort of real big downfall that was his destruction or his moral resolution. 

MVGT: Exo - I was actually surprised at how close this was because I went back and forth. Even though Scotty took the obvious approach to the topic, he was direct and had great story progression and closure. Neither battlers had very many mistakes either. I gave to exo because of the technical writing and description. Some of the metaphors and writing techniques he used pushed his verse into getting my vote. I think Scotty has proven to the site that he can write well and compete with all of us though.

 Only problem I had with this was I thought it was too safe and simplistic

Obviously you have over achieved in this tourney and the cracks are beginning to show...

Would have liked to have seen a stronger story line here, but I am impressed with the way you did manage to create a convincing scenario just wish you had of fleshed it out a bit more

Rhyming was very simple but decent at least...Breaking the verse into small sets was an amateur mistake............Try using transitional rhymes in future to help you tie it together

Overall it was kind of enjoyable but falling short of the mark on the regular

Well done

Exo

Twist on the concept was good...but I felt overall delivery of the piece was scrappy

I think concentrating on that early rhyme pattern cost you valuable time to establish the vibe you wanted

Honestly I just don't think this connects to the topic properly.....Much of the rhyming is solid but I felt the dialogue lent more towards ...brag/weaker race/smartest man alive...defense/ listen to fags etc

You are a great writer bro but you should edit more ...jmo

i never thought I would say this.........but my honest opinion is Exo threw this away

Vote Scott for bringing the most relevant drop considering the topic 

Scotty... good verse...  Multies were simple and wording was a little off as you matched rhymes... but you used the topic well with a non-complex verse...

Exoduzt... good verse... but you tried to be too clever with the topic which would have been better if it was about knowledge and not greed or even a generic Open Mic piece...  Rhymes and rhyme-scheme were more complex but you had three odd-line rhymes resulting in 31 lines for your verse...

Though Exoduzt had the more complex and better overall verse... Scotty stuck to the topic well with a simple but entertaining verse...

Vote: Sombrero...

¿Do people still vote sombrero...?

Adios...