[WMD1] Impending...
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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 6:06am
Topic: [WMD1] Impending...
Posted By: HallowJack
Subject: [WMD1] Impending...
Date Posted: 13 February 2016 at 6:02am
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shut up and listen. i didn't travel here to be ludic i came to warn of a vociferous plot that's now in collusion chemtrails spread by man-made weather storms up in orbit soon death'll come as an inhalant or some form of absorbent a Pharaoh's advisor can mimic Moses' miracles, can't he? Black Science is used to mock God, but they just call it 'Aeromancy' they sit back gorging on gorgonzola, worshipping the Gorgon, Lola brainwashing the masses every time they pick the dictaphone up refinery ready rickshaws awaitin' runners to subjugate ain't got much time till shit goes kerflooey; that's the point that i wanna punctuate. |
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Posted By: Venomonology
Date Posted: 13 February 2016 at 1:08pm
| this was pretty cool man, first thing I've seen you do and it was decent. Gorgon, Lola / dictaphone up doesn't quite work as a rhyme for me but I don't know what your accent is or if you're manipulating the pronunciation there. aside from that I like the fact you were able to use all the words with relative ease and bring something with a message behind it as opposed to a verse where it's obvious it was written just to get those words in. |
Posted By: Rutter knows best
Date Posted: 13 February 2016 at 2:09pm
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I thought this was cool. I'm with ven in the gorgon, lola doesnt really work as rhyme to me. Although its does carry a similiar rhythem if i try. You blended most of it in nicely. I like what you did with aeromancy, for me that words creating some pretty cool idea's for this challenge. Flow was good for the majority and it had a little bit of a narrative to carry it along. Good effort here. ------------- #bananas 
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