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[WD#2] "Know Ya Role's"

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Topic: [WD#2] "Know Ya Role's"
Posted By: Rutter knows best
Subject: [WD#2] "Know Ya Role's"
Date Posted: 08 March 2016 at 11:21pm
Om's went under regulation, the whole thing got a bit wank,
Chain's respect for Dizz, hit worse deficits than Kanye's think tank
Shits mad, how u bitches natter, but u ain't coming near me,
Man your all practically women, at least try to debunk the theory
While I stay Debonair...my scriptures the richest, fuck losers
Wordplay's interwoven, in the sickest opens no stitches could suture
Ill in the present.. sick in the future, Ebola darts when i write
Sylvan mind; I wish ya'll would, i'm tired of all this bark n no bite
No heart for the fight, battlefields emaciate cos of our bitch fleet
Shit's deep, just unmitigated responses off those not qualified to diss me


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#bananas



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Posted By: Neek
Date Posted: 08 March 2016 at 11:27pm
Buttered Toast, Yes?

this was pretty raw dude

the sylvan mind was very well crafted and probably the best of the whole writing exercise so far.

bravo man. I loved the opening. I thought you were going to keep the LA politicstheme going, that woulda been awesome as fuck.

but overall was a dope addition. one of my personal favorites.

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#Bananas


Posted By: Rutter knows best
Date Posted: 08 March 2016 at 11:39pm
Thank neek, Had a day off so thought let's get some writing done.

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#bananas


Posted By: alicewonder
Date Posted: 09 March 2016 at 2:06am
I really liked this one. Incorporating the given vocabulary into such a short length of lines is definitely not an easy thing to do, but you made it look effortless. The beginning bars with the references were quite nice. I wasn't really feeling the debonair line, though, it seemed to be slightly "random" compared to your other lines, it still had a nice and "representative" effect. The second half of the piece was great, I really liked the sick in the future line. And as Neek already stated, the sylvan line was one of the highlights of this work. Great execution of the concept. 
Overall, a very enjoyable and smooth read. 


Posted By: SELF ACTIVATE
Date Posted: 09 March 2016 at 4:19am
This was hard.

I like how you flipped the concept into a flex piece. More impressively is the way in which all you lines where "interwoven". Like legos everything either fits or snaps in place. Sick wordplay as well.

Strong contender...


Posted By: Endeavor
Date Posted: 09 March 2016 at 7:34am
^ To add to that, it's impressive how you manage to flex everything up. Those muscles have got to hurt!

Quote Shits mad, how u bitches natter, but u ain't coming near me,
Man your all practically women, at least try to debunk the theory

This stood out to me, because it's funny as hell.

Quote Sylvan mind; I wish ya'll would, i'm tired of all this bark n no bite

Dat wordplay, doe!

So, I was wondering. You got insane battle stats... Manc got insane battle stats... I think that would be a highly enjoyable battle. Make it happen!


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#Bananas



Posted By: Rutter knows best
Date Posted: 09 March 2016 at 5:20pm
Thanks guys, this weeks words where a bit easier than last weeks lol.

Me n manc though? Maybe one day we'll see...any things possible.



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#bananas


Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 24 March 2016 at 7:20pm
Yes!! That shit was flames back to back...genuinely didn't think there was a bad part to this. I loved the idea of taking battle verse approach, and I really loved how you kept it consistently on the same topic as well...so it wasn't like, 5 disconnected random punchlines (which having 10 random words could do for you!), it felt cohesive, didn't feel forced, all came together really well. 

I think someone is going to have to write something very strong to beat you on both drop & line of the month to be honest. Dope drop.


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Posted By: Jet Swade
Date Posted: 24 March 2016 at 8:55pm
Very dope drop Rutter I loved the line "Sylvan mind; I wish ya'll would, i'm tired of all this bark n no bite" nice word play!

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THE Multinator ..I'll be back...but you won't


Posted By: Sammy
Date Posted: 24 March 2016 at 11:58pm
yo this was fiyahhhh! 


love how some of yall are taking a battle/punchline approach with these WD. Word, this was sick as hell!

While I stay Debonair...my scriptures the richest, fuck losers
Wordplay's interwoven, in the sickest opens no stitches could suture

^^dope!


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