The Warrior
Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=44164
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:09am
Topic: The Warrior
Posted By: Sammy
Subject: The Warrior
Date Posted: 10 December 2016 at 4:59pm
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The Warrior Two warriors on a field... In the distance, the sun shone; lapsing into weathered expanse The calm cerulean recall a moment - lost in a trance... *1 year ago* It was a journey, a rite all warriors embraced From land to land, Kwok Chang carve his niche with sharp focus and blades Objective? Discerning “Do’s” and “Don’ts”; Techniques of the trade Parlaying three kingdoms. He seeked wisdom; Piquing interest and change... “Choose your weapon, son” on many a days, such haste precedes suicide But Kwok Chang observed as Rev Knot began to move and glide… Eastern Kingdom: Rapbattles It was all a blur! A land of giants. Pillars of warriors past littered as time pilfered the science History rooted, to form a blossoming canopy Murals of legends stood contending; barrages of savage schemes He engaged and observed their intricate ways; it was certain The arrangements; a focus on rhythm and pace; it was urgent! A storm of swordplay. Morphed and maim; coursing his veins concisely rendering a swordsman fate or blade of a surgeon He was craving more. As one path ends, another begin On his bamboo raft he set-sailed for a crashing descent It's a battle of attrition. Chess and checker. Feining. Pacing. Aiming. Spacing as metal presses.... Western Kingdom: Rap-Royalty Armed but not ready, though persistent, he traced The atmosphere; it was unique. Not just the system per se but every art tells a story; it's the picture u paint In the western Kingdom, practitioners engage the inner senses through metaphors and similes, manipulating the essence Poetic sensibility grew until he knew of its presence Wordplays and Metaphors were “Chi” affecting inner ravines an idea within an idea - if one don't skim through the message: Summer sun, appearing through the wind. Those eyes... Some are sons; peering through the window. Sighs... He'd studied Ghosts in the ether of heartened past An Idealizt, he knew imitation was Key to Walking the path Yet...all path must continue. Against the cool autumn foliage Kwok Chang, with his liquid sword, journeyed another fantastic voyage. Southern Kingdom: Lyrical Assault Behind the confine of the southern shore, Chang reside in a shanty high up on Lover’s Gorge rocky exterior coursing the orifice Echos of swords and sticks was but a warning. “Follow the law or split.” The kingdom consisted of houses where rival warlords sits House of Elision. House Empire and House of Syndicates. A treaty exists between territories A thin Versailles as none would shy from Spinning kicks It was an inner glimpse of a macrocosm of order that exists Not by way of swinging fists But, rather, “give and get” It is there that he cultivated the martial ways Harnessing shades of logics. As days concocts arrays of optimal layers He’d often embrace the awesome intangible features Organization and diplomacy A skilled warrior wins through techniques A master wins without moving his feet. As two warriors collide, the sun bathe the field There's a psychology to battles Just as the sunlight bends and crimp to fit a crevice In the end, winners are made NOT from techniques, but by upholding a message. As the dust settles, only one warrior stood. The spoil goes to he who gave all...all that he could.  -------------  |
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Posted By: Nigma
Date Posted: 10 December 2016 at 8:08pm
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The was the coolest OM I've read in a really really long time. Years. Conceptually out of this world, 3 sites into 3 nations, then you wrote in a style general to each those sites while describing them before going fucking off in the LA portion. I don't think the scheme you used in the intro did a good job to engage. It wasn't 'fun' enough or something I dunno. But as soon as the meat of the verse kicked in I was hooked. Really impressive work -------------  |
Posted By: Sammy
Date Posted: 10 December 2016 at 10:15pm
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Thank you, boss. Appreciate the words. ------------- |
Posted By: Nigma
Date Posted: 10 December 2016 at 10:45pm
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No doubt. Peep crew form ------------- |
Posted By: Sammy
Date Posted: 10 December 2016 at 11:47pm
Ah I tried doing this by phone and during editing I might've moved the paragraphs from its original order. After the two warriors on a field line, the next couplet should be the "choose your weapon" couplet. Dammit! Cuba if U can make the change for me, it would be highly appreciated, sir! ------------- |
Nigma wrote:Posted By: alicewonder
Date Posted: 10 December 2016 at 11:52pm
| You already know how I feel about this - it's a truly original approach combined with the right balance of consistency and imagery. I also thoroughly enjoyed the last segment about the 'Southern Kingdom' you included now. And I actually just spotted the Idealizt reference in the RR segment, very intriguingly and elegantly incorporated. Glad you shared this. |
Posted By: Lord Puente
Date Posted: 11 December 2016 at 2:48am
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this was a very interesting open mic, different from anything ive read before. I like the progression of focus in flow as the story grows as does the knowledge/skill/technique of the warrior (you in your journey of knowledge). im not familiar with any other sites but I just assue they are sub par lol. solid job on this, solid imagery, solid story telling. how you tied it all together was nice. I haven't really read much from you, but this was very solid ddrop. keep writing and I look forward to reading more of your drps. -------------  |
Posted By: SELF ACTIVATE
Date Posted: 11 December 2016 at 8:01pm
The imagery is there -- I can see it. However, the rhythm ... it's kind of lacking. Also, I don't like the word "cerulean". Why? No reason in particular, I just don't like it.
Okay, nice little exposition. “Choose your weapon, son” on many a days, such haste precedes suicide But Kwok Chang observed as Rev Knot began to move and glide… Love it! I can vividly picture the scenery as well as the movement. Also, as simple as it may seem the word "glide" was used exceptionally here. To me it conjures up the graceful image of a skilled warrior practicing his technique with superb balance and grace.
Bro... in a word -- flawless. Literally everything about this section was exceptional. For starters your flow was as slipper as the midnight floor at Wal-Mart. Your rhythm was incredible. And your depiction of the actual site was not only accurate down to the molecular, but it was one of the most creative things I've ever read on any board I've ever been on. How you described the writing style and historical significance of RB ... and at the same time morphed it into the fighting style and cityscape of the Eastern Kingdom is nothing short of brilliant. It works on every level, Sam. And on top of that it's just entertaining asf.
Being an active member on both RB & RR I can't stress enough how incredibly accurate your depictions of both sites are. Like at this point it's beyond creative, bro. RR writing preference is exactly like that. It's more high brow than RB, but tends to lack the rhythm and flow you I'll find on the latter site. OAN -- your imagery was HD, your word choice was great, and the overall energy was just electric. Not to mention your wordplay. For instances, the Idea and WK name flips were dope.
I love how you transitioned from bar-to-bar. Not a stumble or a hiccup. Just clean and clear wording through and through. Also, the incorporation of LA's crews into the narrative was sick. And I loved how you described the atmosphere of the site and the culture it exudes. On LA it's less about beef and more about helping each other grow. In any case, this was one of the dopest OMs I've ever read. In my opinion it's Classic level writing. Even without knowledge of the sites mentioned or awareness of the wordplay included this piece still reads like an incredible verse just on the surface alone. You've out done yourself with this one, fam. Props! |
Posted By: Sammy
Date Posted: 12 December 2016 at 12:20am
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self, my dude, u are truly a legend. Thanks a million for always giving writers the proper respect they deserve. i look to seeing new piece from u soon that i may return the courtesy. thanks everyone for the kind words ------------- |
Posted By: SELF ACTIVATE
Date Posted: 18 November 2025 at 9:21pm
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Man Sammy, this was definitely one of the ones. I don’t even know what made me go back and reread it, but something about it was lingering in the back of my mind. And yeah, like I’ve told you before, this piece was exceptional. The whole concept was crazy original. Taking the three sites we used to post on and turning them into ancient kingdoms—each with its own discipline, its own philosophy, and then treating the writer as this warrior-artist moving through them to sharpen his craft? That’s brilliant. And you didn’t just name drop, you really captured the dominant style of each place, the vibe, the unspoken rules… all of it. But even beyond the idea itself, the writing just hit. It was poetic, mythic, almost serene, but still had that epic “journey scroll” feel to it. You had lines in there that were legit profound... the whole bit about the skilled warrior winning through technique but the master winning without moving his feet? That’s some straight Sun Tzu/Confucius type energy. Honestly, I miss reading your stuff, bro. This was definitely classic verse material and a legit reread. |