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Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=8033
Printed Date: 18 April 2024 at 11:28am
Topic: No Fitting Title...
Posted By: King Jehu
Subject: No Fitting Title...
Date Posted: 24 February 2006 at 4:35pm
Met you through my girl at the time, 6 years ago Back when I first let my beard just grow Before my rhymes and beats ever steered the show about 4 years before foes feared my flow I used to always play guitar back when days where hard, your ways were dark, life rated R I used to joke like "when will you have sex with me?" Bugged out, cause my girl was standing next to me Wifey was bi so we had a little wager it was just a game and you were the middle player it was an oral sex test, and you'd be the judge But she cheated on me and I held a grudge On the way home from school, one of those days wasted Till you flashed me on the train, gotta say, they were great tits... My ex moved away, but we never got closer new girl in the picture, I quickly approached her Me and you sat together in class talking bout me and the ex never could last We joked about it and felt better with laughs "You're so short, if we had sex, I'd sever that ass" but you were the study buddy, you were making me work We complained about our lives but they can be worse We both used to shamelessly flirt but we would never give in to the game and be hurt I always hoped we'd stay the same as we were We were supposed to be friends till they made us leave earth Was it luck that I saw you in November? gotta be so You worked in Times Square selling tickets to comedy shows Told me your mom kicked you out the apartment "Living at your friend's house must be pretty hard then" You said "I'll be ok, I'm good" I woulda taken you into my house if I could But I still wasn't famous, I was still broke We chatted up like old times and still joked I had a new girl, you still smoked and I bought a couple tickets to a really ill show
I said goodbye, you had no number to call at Said I hoped I saw you again and all that Never thought it'd be like this, it's so strange to see you on the train homeless, asking for change...
Now, http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=4932 - seeing homeless people breaks my heart but bringing it this close to home rapes my heart you see, I was afraid you'd go astray somewhere Your past trials were nothing, the way these days compare 116th street women's shelter in harlem? You have stories behid this, but don't know where to start'em I know, but first, I will tell you mine I make money producing beats, and I now rhyme I have my own place and that doesn't suck and for you to find me here, your ass is in luck Hey, don't walk away, don't be embarrased Don't be silent, little lamb, this is not Thomas Harris I got mad love for you, I'm willing to help It's fate you found me here before killing yourself I'll take you to my house, you can sleep with my shirt By next week you coulda been deep in the dirt At my place, you can relax and you can shower I'll let you sleep on my bed for a couple of hours Now this must've made you stronger, cause it didn't kill you Let's talk, you always had a way with words, hope you still do Tomorrow we'll talk some more, you'll eat something Can't believe old classmates saw you like this and did nothing Tomorrow, I'll get you some clothes and look for jobs you can live here a bit, share whatever I got I'll let my girl know but she should understand cause in this life, I know i will do good as a man...
2 days after that, i get home and she's gone I know she stole nothing, she'd never be that wrong I see a note saying "Thanks, I love you for this too I have your number, I'll call you sometime, I'll miss you I'll have a phone and a place cause you got me on my way but I'm a rolling stone, and you'll see me again someday... What you have done for me goes farther than friends One day I will pay you back when I see you again"
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Posted By: ILLSTARRR
Date Posted: 24 February 2006 at 4:48pm
Just wow man.. Wow
Sick shit man... Ur story tellin' skills are dope man.
Just make me keep reading an reading.. an I loved every bit of it.
Cant wait for the next piece
1.
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Posted By: -Orion-
Date Posted: 24 February 2006 at 4:57pm
Yeah... this was nice... in the first part you rhymed a lot which sometimes took away from the way u phrased what u were sayin'... Story's told real nicely tho... Can't say I knew you had your own place or made money from beats but hey, hot shit...
------------- . . . Now who said they fuckin' with me? They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . .
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Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 24 February 2006 at 5:22pm
Damnnn the ending just damnnn.. Imaginary is unreal i felt every single line & the ending just wow sent a tingle down my spine.. Realness, it felt like you actually put me there i could feel everything you said..
Mad props duke..
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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 24 February 2006 at 8:11pm
haaa, the story was interestin as fudge. i was def. feelin this. read like a book. to be honest while readin i didnt een concentrate on flow but more on what was goin on in the story. stay up.
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 24 February 2006 at 8:16pm
Bloody Renegades and novels, ur stealin my gimmick dammit?!?!?!
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Posted By: NepentheZ
Date Posted: 25 February 2006 at 9:55am
^ lol
"You're so short, if we had sex, I'd sever that ass"
^ lmao!
Man ... i dont even know what to say, i hactually had goosepimples by the end of this, fucking moving.. deep deep deep ... not a bad word to say about it. %100 first class.
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I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying...
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 25 February 2006 at 10:13am
Thats the shit right there....Jehu impressin me more and more with every drop, Orion and Jehu on some next level shit, inspirin...wudda been crazy if you two were back on WB in the good old days, make a brother reminisce
peace
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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 27 February 2006 at 10:30am
THis shit was sick as fuck. J reminds me of sum fuckin Nas storytellin shit. Hot drop J.
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