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King Jehu
Veteran Joined: 23 January 2004 Status: Offline Points: 6088 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: #4 Stats: 54-18-1 Form: WLWWWL |
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Posted: 15 November 2004 at 11:14pm |
I have a beat for this... I won't have time to do anything with this for a long time, so I'll post it here...
This ain't just talkin on beats; my words are stalking your peeps My stories are stuck in your head when you're walking the streets But you don't seem to get it, alone cause your team is deaded And you still want to belong, though all your dreams are shredded Heat to your dome, this game will kill you, leave it alone Leaders, and drones, fuck that shit, you can succeed on your own Learn the facts, and chances are you'll burn the flag Leave a crew, but you can start anew when they turn their backs Find your way but don't just ask questions, demand answers You'll win with your mind over those who command gangsters A new war, there will be two more, what would you do for Your freedom? Even in not leaving your job, you're too poor Can't strike or protest, your voice is a silent gun You can't pull it off with no bullets as the violent one Knowledge is key, but you don't have the full Piano Keys open doors and music can give your voice the ammo But you don't seem to understand
Why... And we don't understand why... This life is strong enough to make the strongest man cry Why is it so hard? It is impossible to leave this world with no scars She's always so afraid of getting up and showing her face Highly gifted but shy and sad, feeling low and disgraced She's been a victim but afraid to speak of it, she can't be free or quit And she'll explode if something doesn't change from the way she sees this shit Doesn't know why she's abused through it Cries and she's used to it... tears for years, told lies like she's too stupid Love tries to fix her life but then... who's cupid? Lows and highs, trouble moves two kids, she can't be saved and dies to the Smooth music... Her lover's sad and he hates living, feeling bad, every day’s prison Alone now, never shown how what he had will remain giving It's true that he couldn’t save her, she was too far gone Life cut short like a song that's only a few bars long They fought hard against their issues, but now the bout's done But he'd work to help others avoid the same outcome "But how come it had to be her?" he says, "What did it prove?" It shows that sometimes some must die for others' lives to improve But he don't seem to understand
Why... And we don't understand why...
This life is strong enough to make the strongest man cry Why is it so hard? It is impossible to leave this world with no scars I wish I could make you see... hope I can teach you Without sounding like you're the sinner I'm approaching to preach to I'm trying to reach through the darkness of your ways Show you the light without religion on the hardest of your days Take my hand, I'll give you my heart, don't live through the dark There's so much shit in the shadows waiting to rip you apart But I flow for those who carry heavy loads... Those who feel like they're still falling although they're already low And from the day I met you I've been the most perfect of gentlemen But you have your walls and habits; it's me versus your medicines Gimme a chance, let the pills just go, it kills you slow None of that poison you're inhaling's gonna fill your soul Walk with me and I can take you to a better place Never face that bullshit again and you can finally get it straight And what I have no one can give, understand the truth Gimme your hand and choose, but you can't see that I'm the man for you And I'm the one who can't understand...
Why... And we don't understand why... This life is strong enough to make the strongest man cry Why is it so hard? It is impossible to leave this world with no scars You don't seem to understand Why... |
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Cuba
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Sick, was feelin the multis and flow...but most importantly tha content was real - dope drop |
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DaVeSaNiTy
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Although your an ass hole, and you hate on me cos I voted against you in your battle against ILLA, I'll still give positive feed back on this peice anyway, cos I'ma nice guy... Very creative multies. Flow was nice. I liked the hook. My favorite verse was the 1st, cos it's so true...nice topic as well. Good work... 9.5/10 1
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King Jehu
Veteran Joined: 23 January 2004 Status: Offline Points: 6088 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: #4 Stats: 54-18-1 Form: WLWWWL |
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Uppin for feedback
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LaWleSs
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nice, got a good blend of expressionistic and personal styles here.
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dreams*gell
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i like the way it builds up, best i heard yet, it makes you think, it is one of them rhymes put there on purpose to change your way of thinking, at least after you read it 4 a while, like persuasive language sorta thing, this i have been trying to acheive throughout all my lyrics, by relating it to real expiriences which i or someone i know has gone throgh, but i think you beat me on this one well done .xxx xx keep at it cos you inspire other ppl,
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Demonic
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very nice flow multis were good through out and the creativity was really somethink man cant wait till its audio dope drop pure sickness
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Senor Perfecto
Veteran 1st Battle Winner! AM I 'ECK Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: Manchester Status: Offline Points: 3272 Crew: XFade: Phoenix Text Rank: #6 Stats: 66-36-2 Form: WLWLWL |
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Good lyrics... Nice flow, rhymes, etc... As simple as it had to be... but real... This is Hip-Hop... Adios... |
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Momentum... The key to this piece... IMO... Momentum was so heavy it almost smashed like fat chicks on ice... Rhythmically it seems to build up constantly then breaks with the "...don't seem to understand, why..." bit, then a more subdued sorta chorus... Not to say you like concentrated on the momentum in the build up but ratherthan it jus' came naturally which is always a good sign. Hook was nice, I like the short/long line idea, the "strong enough to make the strongest man cry" line was cool, but the last line I dunno about, could possibly be "Is it..." and structured as a question...? Or "It's"... I dunno, "it is" is two unstressed syllables in a row, and reading it it's a minor flaw in what is a fundamentally dope piece. All three verses were good, iambic flow was on point for pretty much the entire verse, rhymes were good, they weren't so much a stylistic point in this drop, more a rhythmic one, which is cool, it's cool either way, the message was strong in this one which I guess makes it harder to throw in huge amounts of style. It's pretty faultless nonetheless like I say, you give recording enough dedicated time and this should come out dope. 1 |
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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King Jehu
Veteran Joined: 23 January 2004 Status: Offline Points: 6088 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: #4 Stats: 54-18-1 Form: WLWWWL |
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Thank You ALL
ARL Have One More Piece I'll Post It Later This Week I Been Busy Peace 1 |
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I-kontinue
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hot ish man. keep this shiz comin
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Bolo
Standard Member ¡Ke Viva La Fuckin' Revolución! Joined: 11 November 2004 Status: Offline Points: 1397 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-4 Form: NWLNNN |
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definitely hot...the build up and flow is amazing reminds of nas-one mic (build up)... can' t wait for the beat... this shit's gonna be ill. Tight work.
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