Open Mic: Blonde & Bondage - Auschwitz

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    Posted: 24 August 2016 at 8:13pm



The Shoah began, 1941 with astounding profit
We were on a train Heading to Auschwitz
Promised food, new outfits with pockets
Deshi about to get bank off his surroundings
Train stops off the frosty mountain nd'
We get out surrounded with kids pouting
Pompous Officers howling nd shouting
"You, get on the ground nd give me a thousand"
I lost count nd got an atrocious pounding
The entrance is godless, "take off ya watches"
My gold wrists pocketed, silk woven clothes robbed nd
They promised us Chocolate nd our freedom as options
Gossip is, once we enter... Woman so hot nd topless
Colossus men looking like Sasquatch watching us
My mom was brainwashed nd feeling nauseous
My round was up, I sit on top of this box with kids
It was an auction, monsters bidding on us as if we were oxen
Not even in our board and room and I’m feeling plotted
Their mocking us, "after the war, You’ll regain your calling”
"Till then, were just lodging ya like a flock of fish"
"Oh and that fence? Touch it, you’ll find it shocking"
First night had me jaw dropped nd frothing




3 months later....

Bruised with enough abuse to cause acute puking
In a state of confusion and I’m starting to lose it
Shootings moving closer to my tarnished roof nd'
Every shot is death looming closer with amusement
I’m reduced to a polluted Kosher cuz I’m Jewish
Bulldozing humans into a ditch after experiments
My room is next, you can’t compare to the fair i get
This arrogant gent, "Resist and ill severe yer limbs"
"Excrement covered flesh won’t save you the embarrassment"
After their finished, I’m gonna need a fucking therapist
I’m scared as shit, Next stop is the gas chambers
They chain your hands to your neighbor and fill it with vapor
I pray to a savior, give me the strength of a reindeer
entered the cage with eight strangers with hate nd anger
They close the gates but we are enraged monsters
We have the strength to cut the chains like lobsters
The vape begins to mix with the water
We bust open and stage a Slaughter
At this stage, bullets gaze and conjure
I take one to the face and i ponder
Who can enslave and sponsor hate to prosper?
Deshi, A man of pure waste but has created honor



Nightmares

I survived the revolt, though it was thwarted
I’m getting older yet i only weigh 104 nd'
My mortality is distorted
Exhausted nd they record my every moment
I’m soaking in a disproportionate set of Importance
Guards reward me cuz death is what I’m supporting
Rid me of this torture, the general is morbid
I rather die nd be torpid
Instead I’m tied to assorted electrical cords nd'
Electrified for four minutes 
I can afford to die and have my limbs contort from rigor mortis
My life is small yet the gore is enormous
Made me watch my wife have an unsupported abortion
My brain is fried and shortened
Suicide compared to this life seems euphoric
I no longer cry, my mind is dormant
Foreign thoughts of a life filled with orchids
a torrent of memories before i became mordant
My life is like a forest, my screams remain foreign
there is no restoring light, there’s fire in my core nd'
Its 1989, i woke up this morning crying in the mirror
Wipe my tears, I’m eighty four and been mourning my wife for years
i survived horrible things but every night at 4:00, im fighting this terror







Edited by daydizzle89 - 24 August 2016 at 8:29pm
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im torn, on one hand you are scientific as fuck with how you write your bars, and you are technically proficient for sure, on the other hand....dude what the fuck.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Slip Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 August 2016 at 1:15am
this was intense , a brutal point view , a horrible story told well , im not to fond of some the topics you write about but i have to admit you got some talent the way your able to mind fuck people and get underneath there skin inside there brains and stirr emotion with your lyrics,
its awful ,,,awfully good,,,,,i think  ,,, fuck you dizz  fuck you lol your fucked
keep it up tho
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thanks gents for the lovely feed
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote SELF ACTIVATE Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 28 August 2016 at 11:56pm
Ahhh

Back at it again. It's nice to see you keeping the B&B series alive. This was definitely another nice edition. Surprisingly the thought of writing a piece about the Nazi death camps never entered my mind. However, after reading your drop it kinda seems like a no brainer. It actually fits the theme of the entire series completely. Also, the legend of Deshi continues, huh? Nice touch bro.

I think you did a great job with The story progression here. You gave us a complete experience from beginning to end, to post traumatic stress disorder after the fact. I think this drop was a little less gruesome and visceral in content, But no less colorful and vivid in detail. Mechanically you checked all the boxes as you always do. Dope shit Dizz. I dug it.
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I legitimately got chills from the last line. This was a beautiful read. It flowed perfectly from start to finish. I wasn't sure if it was branching out into some sci-fi/fantasy stuff in the middle but I realized it was just your wording and imagery lol.
This was sick man. You don't see this topic used very often but I like your spin on it. Good work
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Thanks for the feed my peeps. Im not happy with some of the wording but i must live with it now lol.

Self, nice to see you active again brothaman

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This was graphic but then genocide is graphic,and I agree with SELF
it is good to read your still doing the series B n B,Deshi's has no
morality as he see us as part of the food chain,so really him being
at Auschwitz is no surprise,where there is suffering to be had or
done,rest assured Delhi isn't to far from it,this piece was written
and displayed well,you know when you get that feeling of coldness
on your neck,and then the tingling feeling,that's what I got here
on reading this,you gave via details a real vivid account that in
essence lifted this piece up and out at the reader,a kind of in your
face scenario,your imagery is 2nd to none and you certainly have a
creative flair with your OM's,you think outside the box with your
subject matter,by using your gray matter,funny thing is,i find my
self looking out for your work in this section,as I know that you
give a different verse or perspective for ppl to ponder,you are in
my top ten pool of writers here on this board,and rising,good work
here Dizzle,real good,props on letting me take a genuine feeling
away from this ripe piece...peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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