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Swift Styles 
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 Topic: Swift Styles vs TekenPosted: 28 September 2007 at 11:38pm |
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use of a public restroom unlimited lines deadline 2 days. |
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Swift Styles
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Joined: 24 September 2007 Location: East Coast, US Status: Offline Points: 2014 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 9-4-1 Form: WWLWNL |
Posted: 29 September 2007 at 12:41am |
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its late night im on a double date with my honey
A shabby club scene, loud music, foods funny But before the club we got a bite to eat at rocco's I happen to engorge myself, in unlimited numbers of tacos Sure they were good, spiciest in all of the state but a word of advice, never ever eat tacos on a date Out on the dance floor grindin my girl, whos shakin her booty It was no doubt ill get more, at night when i take her home to me But something happend, A Diaster, I first felt it in gut god no.. it not happening, it CANT BE ... mud-butt I stopped dancing, my eyes dart, i look for the restroom It was an emergency! If she smelled it its relationship DOOM! "please excuse me a moment" and i do the penguin walk Push my way to the bathroom, my hommie stops me to talk "dude catch up with me later" I had a serious matter If'in I crapped more in my pants, he'd have my ass on a platter 10 yards to the bathroom to a line, theres no waiting Warmness starts down my leg Oh shit its degrading "I simply MUST go" I exclamed, "Right here and now!" I push to the front, inside another wait, wipe sweat from my brow. one person before me In the wait for the stall squeeze me butt cheeks together to keep from run fall.. Man opens the door, the other steps to go in, I push him out of the way, Intense battle to win But the doors open In, Leaving an inch and a half to get thru Slammed my wrist, think i broke it, dont care the times due Pulled down my drawers what a mess, sat down and relaxed My bowels were screaming, "Daaamn what you eat by a guy asked Couldn't answer I was focused, noise Blew, gas passed, a soupy concoxion. exits my anus With a slight painful blast I sit back and just think, the worst of its over now door swings open, hinge was broke? and i kicked it POW! ricochet changes my focus to graffiti on walls, : good time call up cindy!, I doubt anyone calls this is the worst fuckin bathroom Ive ever been into cockroach crosses my feet, toilet papers like glue times up and Im done, dropped that shit like a caper Oh lord please dont tell me..NO TP PAPER?!?? ahahhaa this was a fun but sick topic.. lord please forgive my foulness.. lmao |
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 29 September 2007 at 12:45am |
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by toilet papers like glue i mean a spare piece stuck to your feet. just thought I'd fix that..
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 30 September 2007 at 10:35am |
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Change, No time limit drop whenever
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teken8996
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Posted: 02 October 2007 at 9:19pm |
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The use of a restroom can be considered complicated
Ppl using it right it would be like Kanye said � if magic made it� Yellow pieces of shit stuck to the corner of the toilet seats Bent plastic floors cuz of ppl wearing their metal cleats Over flowing toilet bowl seats guys spoilen those freaks.. In there ppl just sttin down to create their own beats Used for many occations mabe for some ppl it�s a vactaion Its located everywhere from the skools to the train station PPl change their dress and they never clean their mess So its kept ugly hanging of the wall are some ripped dress Feel like something wants to come out of you go here You might want to be next to one if you had too many beers* If you eva need a quick release of white liquid at anytime ** If eva need to run from the law come here to escape the crime If evan need to break up wit your girl u can do it inside You can make out in here even if ur other bitch Died Now here is a lil story of wat happened one nite Lil kim and his bros were hangin at club Fight Lil kim here had some burritos for lunch that day So he felt lil rush in his tummy and if felt really gay So he went to the toilet to take a few minutes off He pulled his pants down and sat and let a lil drop Afta a while he felt some creep up his ass and reach the crack So he got scared and got up pulled some paper towel of the rack Then wiped it down the middle and found a lil tac dead The sight was dirty so he threw up and almost lost his head Cuz of the rust on side walls and the brokin glasses dangling Then he saw the worst sight of his life there were croaches hanging Of this pants and his shoe was nowhere to be seen so he yelled� And ran out half naked and fell I feel sry for the hand he was dealt *You throw up if you have too many beers ** sperm if u didnt figure that out if anything else needs explaining just ask |
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 02 October 2007 at 9:23pm |
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nice drop voter vote up!!
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 3:31pm |
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zooooop! UP f0 v0teZ
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dalinquent
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 6:28pm |
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vote tekken
swift probably had the better story but the grammer was horrid...You fucked up sentence structure to make shit rhyme...Which is never acceptable, but especially not in a topical...on a good note, the humor was there, nothing made me die laugh, or even chuckle slightly, but i would have wrote lol so it was there... tekken, i liked how you began by listed all the different uses, very original concept...The story at the end was okay, wasnt great but the beginning basically won this for ya... |
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teken8996
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 6:31pm |
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Thanks Dal 1-0 me
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Fatal
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 7:46pm |
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I totally disagree wit dal...
SS's verse was funny as fuck...
a soupy concoxion. exits my anus With a slight painful blast
^lmfao...
I felt that SS had a funny story wit good ending...was descriptive and had a nice flow...some fucked up syllable rhymes but still wasnt horrible...
Tekken i thought had a boring verse IMO...the story was not original at all and was like a knock off of SS's verse but not nearly as good...had horrible grammer...and LOTS of forced rhymes...because of the forced rhymes, the content was sacrificied...
one way battle...Vote: Swift Styles...
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 7:52pm |
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its because Dal doesnt understand the sofistication of Mudd butt. lmao. thanks for the vote
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U.N.L.M.
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 9:02pm |
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Swift- I thought your story was cool and funny..Some forced rhymes though not that many that made me dislike the verse..I thought you did a good job with the topic given and some funny lines and funny scenarios you put the character through made it a interesting read especially compared to Teken's...Decent job, work on the rhymes and making sure the lines are worded correctly...
Teken- I agree with Fatal that yours was a little boring, nothing special happening i mean the story was decent but i thought the beginning was nothing that great..Your topical contrasted greatly with the up beat and funny topical SS put up..and you had about as many or even more forced rhymes than SS which turned me off from the topical..
Simply put, i enjoyed Swift's topical more sooooo...
V/Swift Styles...
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 9:04pm |
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2-1 Swift
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teken8996
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Posted: 03 October 2007 at 9:05pm |
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oooo has to be a good battle
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teken8996
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Posted: 04 October 2007 at 11:55am |
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uppin
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teken8996
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Posted: 05 October 2007 at 2:05pm |
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uppin this fo votes
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Point Blank
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Posted: 05 October 2007 at 3:24pm |
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Firstly, This Was A Wack Topic. Secondly, I Agree With Fatal. This Seemed One Sided To Me. SS Had A Funny Verse. Mud-butt lmao. You Had a Much Better Story In My Opinion. Teken Seemed To Be Going Nowhere, Hardly Any Of The Lines Were Linked To Eachother, And For A Topical Battle Overall This Was Pretty Weak. But SS Had A Pretty Cool Story, So He Gets Tis Easy For Me.
SS GMV |
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teken8996
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Posted: 08 October 2007 at 6:12pm |
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3-1 swift uppin
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teken8996
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Posted: 09 October 2007 at 2:30pm |
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votes pls and does this go up to 4 or 5??
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 15 October 2007 at 3:19pm |
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uppin again
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