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Cee-Jay Outlaw 
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 Topic: The Big One - Kay vs DTKPosted: 28 May 2013 at 5:15pm |
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Due Monday 10th June Midnight BST
Same as before 16 Lines 8Bars Blind Drops to me Good Luck Lads
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Kay B
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 5:29pm |
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Let's do this..
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DressToKill
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 6:17pm |
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Game on..
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 8:16pm |
You're missing LEEEEERROOOOYYYYYY! Jenkins!
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Kay B
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Posted: 08 June 2013 at 6:47pm |
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I'm almost done, will have mine in tonight or after work tomorrow
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DressToKill
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Posted: 08 June 2013 at 7:20pm |
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My verse is completed, ill send tomorrow
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 4:10pm |
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Kay
* In the past people laughed at dress's size when he posted a pic in his football uniform * Eddie Izzard/Is hard is a comedian DTK = The initials of the dvd * Cross dress/Take him out/Piss him off - Alex reids a cross dressin' cage fighter * Dolphins sleep with one eye open, echo is a dolpin...I used to always beat dress when we was going back n forth in the past Josh reached the final, this is how this fools classed.. ..Remember the day DTK said he iz-'ard n we ALL laughed Boardin' the boat with Kay, ya gettin' abused n punched 'DTK', once a gang tag, now coincidentally used by punks? Kay's under no stress now, no pressure time to impress clown Like haggling with shop assistants, I'm knocking the dress down Still up there, u ain't lost YET, you've NEVER dropped vets An' like Alex Reid, the strength's been sent to cross-dress Confidence'll be your weakness, this tough-guys broken Like a dolphin, echo's of the past, left him sleepin' with an eye open His prides broken, Reminiscent of our past meetings All three from before i even improved with my writing DESPERATE FOR A CHEAP WIN, this kid even accused me of BITING (ha) Don't worry for the loss, mum still thinks ur best in her heart But Ima let the voters pull on the thread n watch dress fall apart.. I'm Done |
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 4:12pm |
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DTK
(Nas voice) Who's tourney is this? The tourney is yours..the tourney is yours It's mine, it's mine, it's mine... Expos : *Works at ASDA/Walmart, bagging groceries/have in the bag * Manc has the topical title, not Kay though he did at one time *K + LI + L = KILL, get the play? You're like a bitch with big lips, it ain't hard to spot that you suck! The only time you come close-in battles is when you're locking em up! (closing) Kay can't compete! This aint a fucking battle for 1st place.. He couldn't have this tourney in the bag if it was stocked at his work place! * I'm crushing this herbs face! He's a topicalist so his battles are lacking heat Even he admitted that every punch he tries to rap is WEAK! I'll leave this cat deceased, A good Kay battle verse is a rare find! Your rhyming skills have deteriorated worse than your fucking hair line! Want me to prove he's out dated? Kay, we all know that your raps flop! LI only hired ya for topical expertise, now you're useless in that spot!* I've been hungry for a title, so i'll start by consuming his bars Kay coudn't manage to find a way to Drop D if he was tuning guitars!! Key in the bomb coordinates, Your Dynasties over..Ikon ensured that I'll toss K and LI around with an L to KILL him with pure rap! No one thinks this cats hot! Just a poetry head that drops boredom.. The only people moved by your posts dropped in the wrong forum! fixed typo for DTK
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DressToKill
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 4:25pm |
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Ill toss K and LI around with an L*
Btw, great battle Kay! Good luck! |
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 4:44pm |
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typo rectified josh :)
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Kay B
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 6:05pm |
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nice verse dress, though ima baker an not a bag packer haha...Nah nice verse i liked it
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Manc
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:00pm |
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Ok - I read this over once and thought it was even so wasnt initially gonna vote - but Im gonna break it down bar for bar and see if it turns up a winner.
Kay:-
Josh reached the final, this is how this fools classed..
..Remember the day DTK said he iz-'ard n we ALL laughed
I see the Eddy play ere - it was nice but I felt like it didnt hit hard like an opener should
7/10
Boardin' the boat with Kay, ya gettin' abused n punched
'DTK', once a gang tag, now coincidentally used by punks?
Wasnt too keen on this one. I see the idea, and it was worked well,
but to me, it wasnt really much of a 'diss'
6/10
Kay's under no stress now, no pressure time to impress clown
Like haggling with shop assistants, I'm knocking the dress down
this was a killer hit!! no doubt about that. People ave used a lot of DRESS
plays against him - and this was original. Really impressed with this one
10/10
Still up there, u ain't lost YET, you've NEVER dropped vets
An' like Alex Reid, the strength's been sent to cross-dress
Wasnt sure about this one on the first read - but after a second and third time round,
I thought it was pretty decent. Gonna mark ya down though for the fact it didnt hit
me first time round
8/10
Confidence'll be your weakness, this tough-guys broken
Like a dolphin, echo's of the past, left him sleepin' with an eye open
hahaha - nice!! Like this one a lot
9/10
His prides broken, Reminiscent of our past meetings
lol liked this one too. Nice way to transition. Coulda had more of a sting
in the punch, but it was decent nonetheless
8/10
All three from before i even improved with my writing
DESPERATE FOR A CHEAP WIN, this kid even accused me of BITING (ha)
lol Nice personal.
8/10
Don't worry for the loss, mum still thinks ur best in her heart
But Ima let the voters pull on the thread n watch dress fall apart..
Wasnt much of a hard hitter this one. And closers gota leave a lasting
impression. Not too bad tho
7/10
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Dress:-
You're like a bitch with big lips, it ain't hard to spot that you suck!
The only time you come close-in battles is when you're locking em up! (closing) Really liked this opener. There was a decent sting in both the set-up
and the punch - and the punch was a nice relevant personal. Im giving full marks for this
cuz I felt like it hit twice where it shoulda hit once.
10/10
Kay can't compete! This aint a fucking battle for 1st place..
He couldn't have this tourney in the bag if it was stocked at his work place! *
Even though this was a bit of a mix-up with the personal, it was still a decent
hit IMO. Nobody wanst to be a bag packer lol - so I seen the humour
in this and liked it
8/10
I'm crushing this herbs face! He's a topicalist so his battles are lacking heat
Even he admitted that every punch he tries to rap is WEAK! Wasnt too keen on this one. I see the hit, but it wasnt really a hard one IMO
6/10
I'll leave this cat deceased, A good Kay battle verse is a rare find!
Your rhyming skills have deteriorated worse than your fucking hair line!
Hmmm, I used this one on a bald guy before but it was obviously worded differently.
Ive just seen this kinda bald hair/hairline hit too many times bro. Still kinda funny
though lol
7/10
Want me to prove he's out dated? Kay, we all know that your raps flop!
LI only hired ya for topical expertise, now you're useless in that spot!*
haha NOT TRUE - but funny that you would turn it around like that lol.
8/10
I've been hungry for a title, so i'll start by consuming his bars
Kay coudn't manage to find a way to Drop D if he was tuning guitars!!
Like Kays sales punch - this was a killer punch. Defo the best in your verse. Nice fuckin work
10/10
Key in the bomb coordinates, Your Dynasties over..Ikon ensured that
I'll toss K and LI around with an L to KILL him with pure rap!
wasnt keen on this one the first time I read it. Cuz I was like - KLIL isnt KILL lol - what
the fuck does he mean?? But then I realised the TOSS IT AROUND part - and that pertains to mixing up the letters etc etc yada yada yada. Gotta mark it down for it not being clear enough to hit me
the first time.
8/10
No one thinks this cats hot! Just a poetry head that drops boredom..
The only people moved by your posts dropped in the wrong forum! Again - closers gotta be your killer line along with your opener - and I felt like this was
a bit of a miss
6/10
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I spoke to Kay about this and said I felt like it was a pretty even battle and that I wasnt gonna vote cuz there'd be no point - but I said I was gonna give it a bar for bar breakdown (which I NEVER do) and see how it turns out and see if theres a clear winner at the end of it (whcih I didnt think there was gonna be, cuz it was so close IMO. After I voted your verse DTK - I felt like Kay had this cuz I didnt think the scores were gonna be so close - but without realising it until afterwards - it turns out TOTALLY EVEN by my vote. Im still gonna post this even though it doesnt change anything, cuz Ive just spent 20 mins breaking it down lol. Sorry lads - but Ive been as honest is is possible with this one and your scores are bang on even. Great battle lads. Felt like both your verses were hit and miss - but respect for doin your thing.
Again my appologies.
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Point Blank
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:05pm |
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Kay
The link in the opener didn't work for me, but I read the explanation and it seemed a bit of a stretch anyway. You gotta come out of the blocks swinging and you didn't really do that. Second bar could have been worded better, you didn't really make a punch out of it, it was more of a statement. Third bar was much better, decent punch but your age-old habit of forcing the multis in the set-up reared it's head again haha. Alex Reid bar was a decent hit. Echo bar was good. Last beatings bar was good and I like the way it was delivered. Accused me of biting was a good dig, and the closer was nicely worded. I think your verse started off tamely but it gradually got better and peaked around the middle. DTK Opening two bars were dope haha, nicely delivered. Rhyming place with place was a bit weak but I'll overlook that given the quality of the punch.Next 2 bars were alright, although the hair line thing is a bit played out now. Title line was cool. Guitars line was nice. I wasn't feeling the next bar, I don't like bars like that cos they seem overcomplicated and a bit of a stretch. Punches should flow nicely and get straight to the point, you shouldn't have to re-read them to get it. Plus K+LI+L = KLIL so that took the sting out of it even moreso lol. Closer was dope. Overall I think this was a decent verse, pretty much the opposite to Kay's in that your best bars were at the start and at the end. This is extremely close but I think I gotta go with DTK in this. I've read both verses a couple of times and I think you had an equal amount of hits and misses, but I think DTK just edges it as his punches that did land hit a lot harder than Kay's IMO, particularly the first 2 bars and the closer. Props on this though, was a decent final, congrats for reaching this stage. MVGT DressToKill
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Kay B
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:16pm |
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thanks for the vote and and breakdown appreciated
1-0 Dress |
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DressToKill
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:18pm |
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Thanks, Manc and PB! I appreciate both of your time! 1-0 me
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Manc
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:26pm |
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Sorry I couldnt pick a winner lads. N in that last bit, I meant to say although I felt it was a great battle - it was a bit hit and miss on both sides. Some killer lines in there though. Good luck and congratz on making it to the final
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Jay Homicide
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:45pm |
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Josh reached the final, this is
how this fools classed..
..Remember the day DTK said he iz-'ard n we ALL laughed
(Couldn’t open the link) Not a bad
opener though, decent flow to it. 5/10
Boardin' the boat with Kay, ya
gettin' abused n punched
'DTK', once a gang tag,
now coincidentally used by punks?
Alright flow to this again, the
punch is a bit weak in the way it’s worded. It’s just like ‘Yeah he’s a punk’
and whilst clever in set up, isn’t the most hard hitting of insults, especially
with how you had it worded here. 5/10
Kay's under no stress now, no
pressure time to impress clown
Like haggling with shop
assistants, I'm knocking the dress down
Few grammar errors which fucked
with the flow, but I worked it out in my head to make sense so wont mark you
down for it, just be aware of how things look when written in the future. It’s
a unique play, and had some intelligence behind it. 8/10
Still up there, u ain't lost YET,
you've NEVER dropped vets
An' like Alex Reid, the strength's been sent to cross-dress
Good flow, wasn’t feeling the
punch though. 5/10
Confidence'll be your weakness,
this tough-guys broken
Like a dolphin, echo's of
the past, left him sleepin'
with an eye open
Ehhhh I get what you were doing,
it just didn’t come off as stinging though. 4/10
His prides broken, Reminiscent of
our past meetings
I think your wording undoes you
again here, you’re trying to poke fun at him by saying he hasn’t improved much.
But the way you’ve done it doesn’t really do that, it’s more like you’re just
saying it to say it like ‘Yeah, he’s only gotten a little better’ it doesn’t
really come off as attacking. 5/10
All three from before i even
improved with my writing
DESPERATE FOR A CHEAP WIN,
this kid even accused
me of BITING (ha)
Yeah, not bad. 7/10
Don't worry for the loss, mum
still thinks ur
best in her heart
But Ima let the voters pull
on the thread n watch dress fall apart..
People use too many ‘dress’ plays
on DTK, to the point they get boring to see in battles. It’s annoying because
you did it once in a good way, but you’ve come at it again in a weaker way.
Shame to see that, it really killed the end of your verse. 4/10
Kay B total: 43/80
You're like a bitch with big lips,
it ain't hard to spot that you suck!
The only time you come close-in battles is when you're
locking em up! (closing)
Good idea, bad wording. Shoulda
been ‘Only time you’re close-in’ and then it’d have been good. 4/10
Kay can't compete! This aint a
fucking battle for 1st place..
He couldn't have this tourney in
the bag if it was
stocked at his work place! *
This was so-so, the flow was good
but it’s not the hardest of punches. 6/10
I'm crushing this herbs face! He's
a topicalist so his battles are lacking heat
Even he admitted that every punch
he tries
to rap is WEAK!
You’ve got good ammo, but you used
it poorly. If someone admits they can’t put together a good punch, you need to
do so much more with it than you did. It’s the kind of info that’s a 1 bar body
bag if done right, and you just didn’t pull it off at all. 4/10
I'll leave this cat deceased, A
good Kay battle verse is a rare find!
Your rhyming skills have
deteriorated worse than your fucking hair line!
Christ, a hairline punch line?
Wow. I can’t believe you’d use something like that in a final. Look at the
picture man, he’s sitting on a dudes lap lol. That’s so easy to clown him on,
yet you focus on the hair for God knows what reason. 4/10
Want me to prove he's out dated?
Kay, we all know that your raps flop!
LI only hired ya for topical
expertise, now you're useless in that spot!*
Heh, again you’re not coming at
the angle hard enough. (also what is with this simple rhyme schemes you’ve got
going on? Raps flop/that spot…smh my dude) 4/10.
I've been hungry for a title, so
i'll start by consuming his bars
Kay coudn't manage to find a way
to Drop D if he was tuning guitars!!
It’s an alright idea I guess,
nothing too amazing though. 5/10
Key in the bomb coordinates, Your
Dynasties over..Ikon ensured that
I'll toss K and LI around with an L to KILL him with pure rap!
Yes, if you take the letters K L I
and L and mix them you can spell Kill. Let’s see if I can achieve something
similar here ‘P A I S P O D I T N D E’. 4/10
No one thinks this cats hot! Just
a poetry head that drops boredom..
The only people moved by your posts dropped
in the wrong forum!
Heh. 5/10
DTK total: 36/80
MVGT Kay B
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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Posted: 10 June 2013 at 9:51pm |
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that makes it 1-1
Good voting Guys!
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DressToKill
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Posted: 11 June 2013 at 11:25am |
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Uppin folks! 1-1 thanks to all the voters, it's appreciated!
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Trizzy Tre
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Posted: 11 June 2013 at 2:52pm |
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dope battle...great finals....here is the breakdown!
Kay:
Josh reached the final, this is how this fools classed..
..Remember the day DTK said he iz-'ard n we ALL laughed
7/10-nice opener
Boardin' the boat with Kay, ya gettin' abused n punched
'DTK', once a gang tag, now coincidentally used by punks?
5/10-not much of a punchline
Kay's under no stress now, no pressure time to impress clown
Like haggling with shop assistants, I'm knocking the dress down
9/10-now this was dope! sick play here
Still up there, u ain't lost YET, you've NEVER dropped vets
An' like Alex Reid, the strength's been sent to cross-dress
6/10-wasnt as much of a fan of this dress punch
Confidence'll be your weakness, this tough-guys broken
Like a dolphin, echo's of the past, left him sleepin' with an eye open
7/10-cool concept, punch ok
His prides broken, Reminiscent of our past meetings
6/10-I think with this concept it could have hit harder
All three from before i even improved with my writing
DESPERATE FOR A CHEAP WIN, this kid even accused me of BITING (ha)
8/10-this was a solid punch and personal
Don't worry for the loss, mum still thinks ur best in her heart
But Ima let the voters pull on the thread n watch dress fall apart..
6/10-didnt like this closer to much, just another dress punchline
Total-54 DTK:
You're like a bitch with big lips, it ain't hard to spot that you suck!
The only time you come close-in battles is when you're locking em up! (closing)
10/10-BANG! Dope ass opener man, ill set up n haymaker personal
Kay can't compete! This aint a fucking battle for 1st place..
He couldn't have this tourney in the bag if it was stocked at his work place! *
7/10-nice personal here again
I'm crushing this herbs face! He's a topicalist so his battles are lacking heat
Even he admitted that every punch he tries to rap is WEAK!
6/10
I'll leave this cat deceased, A good Kay battle verse is a rare find!
Your rhyming skills have deteriorated worse than your fucking hair line!
6/10-i thought you could have went a different angle with this picture but it was a little funny
Want me to prove he's out dated? Kay, we all know that your raps flop!
LI only hired ya for topical expertise, now you're useless in that spot!*
7/10-nice punch
I've been hungry for a title, so i'll start by consuming his bars
Kay coudn't manage to find a way to Drop D if he was tuning guitars!!
9/10-LOL this was a tight concept and you turned it really nice into a hard punchline
Key in the bomb coordinates, Your Dynasties over..Ikon ensured that
I'll toss K and LI around with an L to KILL him with pure rap!
7/10-this was a freash idea, a little of a reach but IMO it worked out
No one thinks this cats hot! Just a poetry head that drops boredom..
The only people moved by your posts dropped in the wrong forum!
6/10 funny but nothing to outlandish here to close out the show
Total-58 Overall this was a solid battle and both ya'll did your thang no doubt. As you can see it was def a close battle and respect both ya'll for a solid finals and torney run.
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