Open Mic: Rhyme Of Kiki Spirez "5th Year"

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   Puns spirited, go 'n rhyme the mental,
Only thing unlimited, is my potential.. 

Multi's.

What else but Hip Hop for Ki?
Cottoned on to the criss cross of slick shots 'n slipped on Rick Ross hypocrisy, 
Kid lost in a low cost property, 
Flow clocked from those drops of 'known not's', alone 'n grown not properly, 
'Know not's' possibly pushed him, 
Gotta be loved in the monotony of drugs, touched the flushed gutter with kush sin, 
Munchkin getting punched in,
Lunch bring the dunce bin i'd be dumped in, dunked 'til I literally stuck of punk win, 
Something, nothing, seek elevation, 
Meeks revelation, Ki smashes each piece like he's eating at a Greek celebration, 
Preach meditation, but go mad, 
So lad, go zone on your throne 'til drabs can only see the glow of your go-nads, 
No fads, glad the call found ya, 
Ball rounds 'n stall clowns but i'm soundly renowned as a sound all-rounder, 
Pound all downers 'n found my pinnacle, 
Ground and miserable, but now more crowned with resounding sound 'n syllable.. 

Battler.

 Crazy brain, comma, brute,
This daisy CHAIN's on a loop, 
Refrain from cute, i'm on my spit, 
Can only 'link CHAIN' to con-man shit, 
One mans wit, is another's grit,
Mr gutter, feat on another brothers hit, 
Shoulda bit, bitch i'll embarrass this,
You're more bitch than chicks on your narratives.. 
Let's be 100, say you're merging rank, 
But sank without Sass, like a gay conversion camp, 
Your versions wank, short lines riled it, 
Yours gets wild flips, mines just a style switch,  
It's childish, so just tattoo my bars,
Mad dude? Said I had you on all 'our' 5 stars, 
 I'll fire hard, you won't stop to respond too,
You do drug broods not feuds, then we'll view and snooze, like we popped too.. 

Truth. 

CHAINS my man, understand he's no blind buster, 
Have him on rhyme structure, but fuck, I tried touch the- 
Vocab this old lad has, lines he types on a new topic, 
You got it like he got it? Phewwwww.. Dude stop it, 
Newb/Novice, drop the group gossip.. It's all love, 
We're ok, and go OJ, blurting murder with a mauled glove, 
Hauled up to balled struts, jerks hurting while- 
I'm perking and perching behind the word 'versatile'.  

Finish. 

Thanks to all those that called bro an almost, 
Then called toast to those that were stall posts, 
Cal 'n Nep who somehow saw a Vet, 
To CHAIN 'n Manc, who I came to thank- 
For who I am today, 
Mans could take banter, 'n when i'd rant away-
They'd say, 'calm your shit, you'll be a beast', 
Now when peeps 'harm my spit', I see a feast. 
Free's are weak without a point to halt the repentance.. 
My point'll make your life's shorter than a Rolf Harris sentence.. 

The Sworded Stylez Breakdown.

Ok for this challenge KiKi is in a "rhyme off" with Chain. In order to give this challenge it's due credit, I'll be providing statistical breakdowns and also personal opinions on the various elements of the verse.  I'll leave it up to y'all who won.

Statistics

Kiki rhymed 477 of a total 618 syllables.  This means that approximately 77% of the words in KiKi's drop rhyme. Over 52 bars (lines) KiKi averages approximately 9 rhyming syllables per line.

Breakdown

Flow - From start to finish KiKi has a top-notch perfect flow.  Not only is the flow fluid and smooth, but it's also incredibly interesting.  Clever use of tempo switches and a wide variety of schemes means that syncopation is intense, this is a rhythm lover's dream and I enjoyed this drop immensely.

Rhymes - Those statistics are pretty impressive all by themselves. From an artistic standpoint KiKi is a virtuoso, internals, transitionals, drop-schemes, the kid does it all and the use of various licks, riffs and patterns with the different styles displayed in each stanza show I high level of understanding in both language and technique. Multi-syllabics are ridiculous, there are only a few writers on LA who can do it this way, and we all love to read a fellow craftsman in his element.

Content - This was a true "showcase" of ability. It's like a textbook of "this is the range of a solid artist."  The technical verse was close to my heart and I think you executed well, you could maybe have switched your schemes to highlight certain passages more but your technique itself was flawless.  The battler verse was nice, swagger style with a switch in flow that highlighted the punchiness of the attack. Truth stanza was again a beautiful change of pace and my favourite stanza overall, I love the new/novice/group/gossip internal scheme. Then you finished with class.

Final Verdict

This is a phenomenal piece of work, you came hard in both technique and content. Statistically you're good, not quite a "technical marvel" yet, but certainly an incredible writer. Fantastic work and a pleasure to read. I look forward to drawing the art for this.

Props.