Text Battle Archive: [Text] Name of Fear vs eye five (3-0)

Christian Bale? what a wack ass "avatar"… been on this forum for 2 hours longer than you and I already know what a "faggot you are!" /

Look out everyone, "Bruce Wayne is here", he goes by "Name of Fear",  but he lost from the start /

you trying to spit hype verses, stuttering like, " i…i…i…i…i" / 

cuz with five eyes, I can see! … your rhymes are generic and lack anything I fear... especially "n"a"m"e" /

Can't wait till you decide to abbreviate your name… NOF?... No Other Future cuz you will Never Own Fame /

your spit is old, it's "tearin- a - muscle",  this shit is gold, bitch… I'm the "American Hustle" / 

                 

Fear my name with your illiterate thoughts / 

all you gonna see are "L's" next to your "Form" and the dots /

Eye - Slightly better structure and pretty basic rhyme (only if there were) which I can't even see in most of the bars. Well, As it looks newbies can't anymore battle, better check out other battles to see how its done here. Fine punches better call it jabs. Credit given for some nameplays too.

NOF
You need to check the rules fam
Too much bumpy get yo banned

Eye: first bar was the best of your verse, you had some decent attempts at multies and came very close to a punch. However, th rest of your your verse barely makes sense. second bar is worthless, bt the 'tearing a muscle' 'american hustle' bar in your third could have worked with a better frame around it. your coser is weak but could easialy be made better with a bit of simple wordplay. Check tutorials.

NOF: a lot of the same problems but the difference is you managed to form a few punches. i dont fuly understand the wordplay in your first bar but it probably makes sense.the beginning of your second bar is strong but it falls off the moment you use the phrase 'porcupine propel'. it doesnt make sense. again, your third isnt good but at least it forms a punch. your closer sounds ok as an attempt at breaking him down, but its badly put together. you have the subject matter, just focus on the craft.

MVGT-Name Of Fear for better and more punches