Open Mic: [WD 4] psychological warfare

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    Posted: 12 May 2016 at 7:27am
It's an identity crisis, like I just had a lobotomy
so much shit running in my head like a popped colostomy

I'm ready to plague this generation 'til the cycle arrives at rebirth
but what's it worth when the thirst for vengeance can't be reversed?

it can't be rehearsed, this is warfare - I'm fighting the tyranny of suffocation
like an urban warrior in the jungle thriving despite a tough vocation

but my fucked up mind writhes like a Siamese cat hissing on the sly
my thoughts clump like so much litter, boxed in and pissing on the dry

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Nice work here,I thought you done well to use the key words
and make it come together cohesively,and I liked the opening
bar which contained that cheeky little play,(shit running/
colostomy),your text flow was also present which is a plus
also,im liking this verse as a whole,your showing some sprite
here to interesting,a good contender for the drop challenge
me thinks...good work...peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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