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Rutter knows best 
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 Topic: [WD#2] "Know Ya Role's"Posted: 08 March 2016 at 11:21pm |
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Om's went under regulation, the whole thing got a bit wank,
Chain's respect for Dizz, hit worse deficits than Kanye's think tank Shits mad, how u bitches natter, but u ain't coming near me, Man your all practically women, at least try to debunk the theory While I stay Debonair...my scriptures the richest, fuck losers Wordplay's interwoven, in the sickest opens no stitches could suture Ill in the present.. sick in the future, Ebola darts when i write Sylvan mind; I wish ya'll would, i'm tired of all this bark n no bite No heart for the fight, battlefields emaciate cos of our bitch fleet Shit's deep, just unmitigated responses off those not qualified to diss me
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Posted: 08 March 2016 at 11:27pm |
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Buttered Toast, Yes?
this was pretty raw dude the sylvan mind was very well crafted and probably the best of the whole writing exercise so far. bravo man. I loved the opening. I thought you were going to keep the LA politicstheme going, that woulda been awesome as fuck. but overall was a dope addition. one of my personal favorites. |
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Rutter knows best
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Posted: 08 March 2016 at 11:39pm |
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Thank neek, Had a day off so thought let's get some writing done.
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Posted: 09 March 2016 at 2:06am |
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I really liked this one. Incorporating the given vocabulary into such a short length of lines is definitely not an easy thing to do, but you made it look effortless. The beginning bars with the references were quite nice. I wasn't really feeling the debonair line, though, it seemed to be slightly "random" compared to your other lines, it still had a nice and "representative" effect. The second half of the piece was great, I really liked the sick in the future line. And as Neek already stated, the sylvan line was one of the highlights of this work. Great execution of the concept.
Overall, a very enjoyable and smooth read.
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Posted: 09 March 2016 at 4:19am |
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This was hard.
I like how you flipped the concept into a flex piece. More impressively is the way in which all you lines where "interwoven". Like legos everything either fits or snaps in place. Sick wordplay as well. Strong contender... |
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Posted: 09 March 2016 at 7:34am |
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^ To add to that, it's impressive how you manage to flex everything up. Those muscles have got to hurt!
This stood out to me, because it's funny as hell.
Dat wordplay, doe! So, I was wondering. You got insane battle stats... Manc got insane battle stats... I think that would be a highly enjoyable battle. Make it happen!
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Posted: 09 March 2016 at 5:20pm |
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Thanks guys, this weeks words where a bit easier than last weeks lol.
Me n manc though? Maybe one day we'll see...any things possible. |
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Posted: 24 March 2016 at 7:20pm |
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Yes!! That shit was flames back to back...genuinely didn't think there was a bad part to this. I loved the idea of taking battle verse approach, and I really loved how you kept it consistently on the same topic as well...so it wasn't like, 5 disconnected random punchlines (which having 10 random words could do for you!), it felt cohesive, didn't feel forced, all came together really well.
I think someone is going to have to write something very strong to beat you on both drop & line of the month to be honest. Dope drop.
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Posted: 24 March 2016 at 8:55pm |
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Very dope drop Rutter I loved the line "Sylvan mind; I wish ya'll would, i'm tired of all this bark n no bite" nice word play!
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THE Multinator ..I'll be back...but you won't
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Posted: 24 March 2016 at 11:58pm |
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yo this was fiyahhhh!
love how some of yall are taking a battle/punchline approach with these WD. Word, this was sick as hell! While I stay Debonair...my scriptures the richest, fuck losers Wordplay's interwoven, in the sickest opens no stitches could suture ^^dope! |
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