Open Mic: WD#3 10 Lines

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   Word drop more like world drop desalination of the flow purify my craft...
Herbs stop! reparations for my desolation of the whole text scene certifies yer trash!
Brash I'm Intransigent to you fools connect the dots I'm on another level Goku...
Flow through repercussions, the left and right boxing up my numbers, Sudoku.
Who told you your speech was Brevity? I bend words to slay nerds we have nothing in common,
Covered in these degenerates blood slurping Raman eyes rolled back like an aztec shaman...
Situations Volatile get blown to smithereens is too cliche so i hire six witches...
Then Hex-a-gon(er) these sick bitches git mix stitches when this wrist twitches...

(i got all ten in 8 lines so heres a free bar!)

My mules broke can't carry the shame set fire to rage just to fuel smoke...
Are we chained to fate who knows if we are free or part of life's cruel joke?

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JBrenn Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3778 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote JBrenn Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: WD#3 10 Lines Posted: 06 April 2016 at 3:48am
	Word drop more like world drop desalination of the flow purify my craft... Herbs stop! reparations for my desolation of the whole text scene certifies yer trash! Brash I'm Intransigent to you fools connect the dots I'm on another level Goku... Flow through repercussions, the left and right boxing up my numbers, Sudoku. Who told you your speech was Brevity? I bend words to slay nerds we have nothing in common, Covered in these degenerates blood slurping Raman eyes rolled back like an aztec shaman... Situations Volatile get blown to smithereens is too cliche so i hire six witches... Then Hex-a-gon(er) these sick bitches git mix stitches when this wrist twitches... (i got all ten in 8 lines so heres a free bar!) My mules broke can't carry the shame set fire to rage just to fuel smoke... Are we chained to fate who knows if we are free or part of life's cruel joke?


JBrenn Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3778 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote JBrenn Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 11 April 2016 at 10:22pm
	Is this still a thing?


JBrenn Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3778 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote JBrenn Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 April 2016 at 4:11am
	How does this work? do the mods pick their fav? or do they all get voted on?


Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3263 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 02 May 2016 at 9:43am
	I think ppl nominate it..but I do believe.all get read at some point.. shit man Overal I thought this was good,it had the key words within it, plus the tempo was good,i also liked the contents added to rhe keywords, this untill tried isn't easy to do,so well done for giving it a go,all in all I liked it,your vocab.was.also good I thought,good effort.peace.
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

JBrenn Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3778 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote JBrenn Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 03 May 2016 at 9:17pm
	Ty sir!


Sykonaut Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 25 April 2016 Status: Offline Points: 33	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sykonaut Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 04 May 2016 at 12:28am
	Pretty dope, read. Flow was fluid, the rhyme scheme very solid. You had some cool punches like (box my numbers, Sudoku) that was dope. Some of the multis felt forced, sick bitches, mix stitches, like I didn't think the mix stitches made much sense, I thought you could have added in a different word, like ripped stitches, not as tight a multi but makes more sense and doesn't hurt the flow. Just a thought. But overall it was a fun read, I think it was was constructed and worded. I look forward to seeing more from you.