I need to do practice but I need some1 to watch it
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Topic: I need to do practice but I need some1 to watch it
Posted By: Rameez
Subject: I need to do practice but I need some1 to watch it
Date Posted: 08 August 2007 at 10:50pm
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I delete my rap.. I'll put once I hv good flow |
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Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 09 August 2007 at 6:01am
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LMMFAO!!!
Rhymer.com
Man, You'll Get Nowhere Usin Sites Like That.. Jeez.... This Was Terrible, Read The Tutorial Orion Made |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 09 August 2007 at 11:44am
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Ok I'll use rhyme scheme that I look up in the guide... I always fight the best to make my lyrics to test/ if I lose in text battle, its probably My pc got "fatal errors"/ |
Posted By: D.king
Date Posted: 10 August 2007 at 1:03pm
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.................. ------------- I resemble the tooth fairy by the way i am taking your crown!! |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 28 August 2007 at 7:43pm
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My Rap making �L.A� Knockdown, beatin
there flow of �Circus clown� |
Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 28 August 2007 at 9:52pm
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no man, ya second line doesnt even rhyme to the first.... -------------  |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 28 August 2007 at 11:44pm
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I thought Knockdown rhyme with circus clown and pathetic with hattrick So I still have to rhyme with first line? Is this ok Esl my ass, I�ll still rip ur fur like chicken and make into �McChicken� I bet my dogs won�t eat that, cuz its like no meat or fat, its only a skeleton |
Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 12:53am
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Wtf...skeleton doesnt rhyme with mcchicken....heres an example: This Nov Is Pathetic, His Rhymes Are So Wack He Struggles Wit Flow, Reminds Me Of Mack...(mackie lol) Ok See how Mack and Wack rhyme? Now look how i match up syllables to assist the flow: "His Rhymes Are So Wack" and "Reminds Me Of Mack?"...Count up the syllables...theres 5 in each....i know that was a real basic bar but it was jus an example...also a nice jab at mackie...cuz he has shitty flow too...blaap blaap... ------------- |
Posted By: Smart Allikk
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 12:57am
| dont worry you'll get the hang of it man.. Fatal knows what he's doin.. |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 8:57am
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ok |
Posted By: Lyrical Mind
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 8:57am
ON THE FLOOOR IS FUCKING STICHES !!!!!! HAHAHAH ------------- Dominance beyond your grasp That life you talk, I walk the path/ I rip lames, give cause for casts I spit flames, like rocket packs |
Fatal wrote:Posted By: Lyrical Mind
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 8:57am
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i can imagine at home ..wtf u mean mcchicken doesnt rhyme with skeleton ------------- Dominance beyond your grasp That life you talk, I walk the path/ I rip lames, give cause for casts I spit flames, like rocket packs |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 11:18am
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I think mcChicken/Skeleton are
Assonant rhyme or
Consonant rhyme Now I'm confused  |
Posted By: Lyrical Mind
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 11:45am
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they dont rhyme end of dont use it :-)...
just use the basic example fatal given you ..just put in world if u wanna try wordplay talk 2 woods he'll give u a spare a-4sheet of paper full of them ( lol ) so so basic ......im reading you asif you wear a book... your daughters virginity isnt only thing i took... book took rhymes obv...u just gota mix it up ...like my name signature Dominance beyond your grasp That life you talk, I walk the path/ I rip lames, give cause for casts i rip lames ( lame people ) give cause for casts..now i turned into to rhyme buy thinking of what goes with casts and turn it into a nice line ....which it is ... I spit flames, like rocket packs - spit as rap terms...and also same as rockets packs spitting out flamse.... ------------- Dominance beyond your grasp That life you talk, I walk the path/ I rip lames, give cause for casts I spit flames, like rocket packs |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 12:03pm
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ok sounds cool.. how about long lines.. I got the basic from small line.. Example: These goons retarded level
gone wild, there anger cause them blind
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Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 2:30pm
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Ok I also made a Multi... is this ok! This rat is fat, smell worse than my hat I'm a cat, I'll smash him with metal bat |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 2:52pm
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that aint a multi. a multi is rhyming more than one sylabble. for example:
i'm the SLICK-BITCH-HITT-ING ya PIN-DICK-LICK-ING ass to the grave ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Lyrical Mind
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 3:19pm
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rameez u being serious bro ... ? them lines are wack lol ......dont start getting above your self adding stuff...u need tostart basic by just drop bars and getting a structure and a flow first..bro... my life been passing away behind bars.. me n my homies been robbing too many cars.. i cannot wait to see the sun shine.. doing it straight no more coke lines.. very very basic lol but it does rhyme ...just try that.. for now and you'll progress with time .. dont expect to be 2pac on the first day lol crawl before u walk ------------- Dominance beyond your grasp That life you talk, I walk the path/ I rip lames, give cause for casts I spit flames, like rocket packs |
Posted By: Lyrical Mind
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 3:29pm
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and rameez dont battle no 1 yet ..wait until your goood...otherwise you'll end up with a score like myn u dont want 3-wins and 23 loses do u lol ------------- Dominance beyond your grasp That life you talk, I walk the path/ I rip lames, give cause for casts I spit flames, like rocket packs |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 5:51pm
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For real... lol thats sucks man.. ya thats why I postin crazy on this tutorial OK here it goes I'm shooting my gun on the block breaking through the door thats lock Then murdering ppl and robing them got everyone upset at funeral anthem click'clock that's my killing rhythm |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 5:53pm
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there's just no structure to it man. try and keep an even number of bars and make something that makes general sense and rhymes well at the end of each line. Plan out what u are gonna do before you do it, it's the best way to start. Take a look at the rhyme scheme based guide I started, it may help you. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 6:20pm
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ok man nice guide I'll spit similar to first part.. I'm shooting my gun jus for sake of fun To improve my skills while I'm taking pills |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 6:23pm
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haha yeah that's your structure sorted...kinda. now make the bars a little bit longer, and make them mean something REAL. Hiphop, TRUE HIPHOP, isn't a style of music, it's a culture. It started with 4 elements (in order of introduction to the culture) DJAYING, BBOYING, WRITING (graffitti) and EMCEEING. It's about expression man. People will like your shit more, if it's TRUE EXPRESSION of who YOU ARE. not cliched bullshit ya know? Try writing 16 lines of something with a basic scheme like you just did. but make the lines about half as long again. And make it mean somethin! ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 6:25pm
| Props For Doin All This S.S....Serious... |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 6:47pm
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Nah man, i aint need any props for any of this shit man. It's a cycle, when i started, plenty of heads sorted my shit out and worked like fuck to get me good, knowledgeable and skill. it's only right that I do the same. That's Hiphop bruv. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 6:50pm
| I Was Gonna Ask You To Join Venomous...But You Could Help Profound Start A New Crew...Upto You Lol. |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 6:51pm
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To be honest man, i'm lookin at my options crew wise. there's a chance my real life crew might join up, in which case we wouldn't need a forum coz we rep that crew anyway, so it'd be a straightforward deal. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 8:08pm
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PART 2 I'm shooting my GUN, to get some JEWELS I learn rap for FUN while I'm learning RULES This kid is stupid DUMB, lets bitch slap HIM he' a retarded scum, lets stick his ass in RIM ___A_____B ___A_____B ___B_____C ___B_____C |
Posted By: Mackie
Date Posted: 29 August 2007 at 8:59pm
| can tell your from canada |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 30 August 2007 at 10:57am
| yep |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 30 August 2007 at 11:55am
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Rameez, you're gettin it man. the structure and flow are drastically improving already. do me a favour and write a 16 line verse about something real though. somethin you feel, somethin you want, somethin you've seen, somethin you ACTUALLY DO. any of those things will do. You'll find the words come easier when it's something you actually know, rather than jhust cliche gangster words. do a 16 line verse well, and i'll add u to my msn and teach you more complex shit. :P ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 30 August 2007 at 11:58am
| Thanks bro for the help.. I'll make 16 lines.. |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 30 August 2007 at 5:42pm
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ok I made this one quick, I'll make a 16 lines latter.. but check this out if it sounds ok.. this more like from hitman video game..LOL I was born to kill, train with hitman skills My boss gives me drug pills, so I can fight ill Thought me to murder on alive person in prison So I�m like a reaper stab on alive person with precision My first project to eliminate a lil street thug So I find this suspect who sell illegal drugs Silently from back I wired his neck He couldn�t attack cuz his bone got wreck Mission complete, thousand bucks in my pocket Experience gained, official member with sliver locket A year later, I�m like mass murder getting well paid I hear news each day but still stayed cruel with my blade |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 30 August 2007 at 6:22pm
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nah man. it's not personal enough, so it seems just nuts to be honest. lmfao, listen to me now......WRITE ABOUT YOURSELF. SOMETHING REAL ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 30 August 2007 at 8:00pm
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I�ll talk
about my story, right to the point Where I
struggle days & night, almost break my joint I got
hard life with out a wife But I can
make food with chief knife Currently
I go in college, which is technologically hype Stare cleavage, and learn lab practical skills of different type The
teachers are little strict with their rules But when
there is a test I always trick these fools I make jokes with my friend, about all of my teacher Like she stroke pencil in her chubby ass, during lecture When teacher fucks with me, I complain on there face And I�m always lucky cuz I make them feel disgrace I always attack verbally when these bitches say shit to me They can�t talk back cuz I got fake disability letter with
me� The way I got into disability cuz I need more time during
test Now I get double hour its reality, so with more time,
bring rest So fuck this, now I got addicted to this rap But I suck, reading from top to bottom it�s all crap I got to this hip-hop when I met a unknown guy on facebook He Ask me if I can hip� but I say I can beef and not even
a rook So I join his group �lyrical battlefield� spit some mothafucker
rap Got lots of criticism, like losing my shield, feeling
emotionally sap Now I�m here on lyrical assault, improving
and gaining new skills And I have hard time understanding
basic like I need brain pills probably not good.. :/ |
Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 31 August 2007 at 3:49am
This one was hands down better than all ya other shit...finally structured well and had a flow that was ten times better than ya other shit...a couple uneven matched syllable rhymes but stilll improving...keep up man
...1 ------------- |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 31 August 2007 at 8:47am
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thanks man I used Rhyme scheme like __A__B, __A__A from Swordedsytle guide.. thx to his guide.. |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 31 August 2007 at 12:13pm
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Yeah rameez, your last 2 drops were fuckin LOADS better than the other shit you did. I'll holla at u on msn, teach u how to get even better. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 01 September 2007 at 10:17pm
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Ok now I'll make aggressive attack... let me now, if it is ok I�m pissed to Throw u from pits; get dip-die in my poison spit You bitch-witch, get torn when my sound get higher pitch If u end up in hospital, I�ll cause glitch
to turn off My rhyme is causing crime It�s a way I pass time U slime mouth causin grime, its You cannot face me, as if I would disgrace I�m symbolize ace, u won�t live in |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 22 May 2008 at 12:17pm
lol just looking back at this shit.. how I started to rap from a scratch... SS really helped me here.. thanks again SS this was the starting point where I started to get better.  ------------- 
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