The Forest
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Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:02am
Topic: The Forest
Posted By: U.N.L.M.
Subject: The Forest
Date Posted: 10 July 2008 at 11:45pm
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A story of two soldiers, thinking they knew their fate Told surely they get the glory as long as they follow the bait Little did they know of the burden that hollow tips create And they were only left to just swallow their debate One was Serbian the other was Croatian In the forest at their countries border with frustration Both pissed as they were stuck in a deep dug trap Guns not in sight so they were in a heap of crap Soon they found out there was no use sluggin it out When it came to teamwork both were shruggin in doubt Wouldn't swallow their pride even for this one time But got to talking and realized at the break of sunshine That they were both similar people living similar lives Both had a woman who was a keeper and childhood lies Both their mothers had died and they came to the impression That they were pawns for men with the lust for aggression This war doesn't affect them why are they there they question They're uniformed robots out to fill the leader's obsession Of power to prosper while they don't care about the freedom Since it's really about the forest and the border nothing to be free from One side claims the forest as does the other causing a problem So the only way to solve it is whoever survives from the bombing At the topic of the forest the debate becomes more heated Whatever reason they give the other feels cheated Blubbering and blabbing they then start calling each other dumb Until they both shut up and they hear something come Excitement builds and they then start yelling like fools Until they realize it's not reinforcements but rather the snarling of wolves They get the point but it was not taken very bluntly Cause they now know the forest belongs to neither of the countries |
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Posted By: DressToKill
Date Posted: 11 July 2008 at 12:06am
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Lmfao @ The ending..I was really liking this peice man the story was pretty dope..The flow was good and mostly the content never really let up
my fav bit was
That they were both similar people living similar lives
Both had a woman who was a keeper and childhood lies Both their mothers had died and they came to the impression That they were pawns for men with the lust for aggression This war doesn't affect them why are they there they question They're uniformed robots out to fill the leader's obsession Of power to prosper while they don't care about the freedom Since it's really about the forest and the border nothing to be free from I was really feelin that..the last 2 bars was some immortal tech shit haha
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Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 11 July 2008 at 6:48am
Yea this was dope. The ending was nice, especially the last line. Well written too. Your still a herb tho 
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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 11 July 2008 at 11:57am
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Point Blank wrote:Posted By: Madeye
Date Posted: 11 July 2008 at 8:02pm
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Fuckin'... ill! flow and imagery, Kris... I jus' watched an Epic-Unfolding... Tight! Fav~ segment: Both their mothers had died and they came to the impression That they were pawns for men with the lust for aggression Deep, deep, deep. Was captivated. Dope Ish, Fam... One ['1] ------------- <font color=darkgray>I'm only offended by those I respect... and I don't respect you[/COLOR] |
Posted By: U.N.L.M.
Date Posted: 15 July 2008 at 12:07am
| Thanks for the feed guys(except Point of course)...just giving this one last boost |
Posted By: Swift Styles
Date Posted: 18 July 2008 at 11:40pm
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lmao... cool read you handled the story quite well. easy to follow. rhymes were simple yet used in a scheme that made em tight. ending was funny dude.. also liked One side claims the forest as does the other causing a problem So the only way to solve it is whoever survives from the bombing enjoyable no doubt, keep up also i got a friend from serbia and one from croasia. just thought that was pretty cool. -------------  |