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The last night before your final day

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Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=16034
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:11am


Topic: The last night before your final day
Posted By: Kay B
Subject: The last night before your final day
Date Posted: 21 August 2008 at 7:55pm



Muscles are tight, eye's desperate for some closure
Sat looking back on your life not accepting that its over
Flicking through photo's of the group partying wild
Simply hating the fact that we aint parting with smiles
Desperate to see the positives, believe it's a blessing
But after awhile, too much thought leads to me stressing
Regretting, angry feelings progressing taking my mind
Realizing im still alive, so the mistakes im making are fine
Discuss your life but see at the end there's no question
This angel already saved my best friend from depression..
Kept a smile on for others as we all sat by your side
Though i still sit hear proud enough to admit alone that i cried
Stuck on what to say, as words can't express how i feel
Can't convince myself, yet gotta convince the rest that it's real
Making it clear that your forever hear in my chest
As we prepare to release a dove for each year we was blessed
Lay flowers as the curtains slowly jus draw to a close
Regretting missing feelings, you left before we could show
And tell how we truly felt, always stayed true to your own
You were an angel, perfect and yourself through to the bone

*Wipes Away the tears*

Keep your eye on all of us, save us from makin mistakes
And remember no matter what, no-ones taking ya place
See a smiles grown on my face, leave me explaining why
Your in a better place, safe..and i aint gotta say Good Bye

...True story...





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Replies:
Posted By: lyricalprincess
Date Posted: 22 August 2008 at 8:19am
this really hit me i've felt like this before you couldn't have said it better

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Tani Baby


Posted By: Rhymez
Date Posted: 22 August 2008 at 9:28am
I didnt even read the whole thing yet and im giving you feed this shit is sick. even if your next 4 bars suck, this piece is great. I thought 5th and chain were the only ones spitting crazy shit, glad to see theres another person i can listen to. props.


Posted By: Rhymez
Date Posted: 22 August 2008 at 9:31am
11/10 off the scale. keep it up fam


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 22 August 2008 at 6:48pm
props, thanks

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Posted By: LYRIKAL GOD
Date Posted: 22 August 2008 at 9:07pm

1000000/10 LMAO



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BROOKLYN BITCHES


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 25 August 2008 at 7:55pm
Thanks

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Posted By: Bolo
Date Posted: 29 August 2008 at 5:58pm
this was nice bro...my one complaint would be the lack of consistency...it was a very solid piece, but some lines just seemed to overshadow the rest, making the rest of the piece seem mediocre...that's a good thing in a way obviously, since that basically means some of your lines were so good that they made the other good lines seem weak, haha...but anyway, solid piece...favorite line was

Flicking through photo's of the group partying wild
Simply hating the fact that we aint parting with smiles

emotion was dope and on-point (i kno the feeling of losing somone close, and u portrayed it almost to a tee)


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I am the one that knocks...


Posted By: Quintessential
Date Posted: 01 September 2008 at 12:08pm
Shit. This almost brought a tear to my eye. Hats off to you my brother. The fact that its a true story was what made it all the more dope. Even though I dunno who you were talking about, Imma pray that her soul finds peace. Excellent piece.

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Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of...


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 03 September 2008 at 10:19am
props thanks man

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Posted By: Viper
Date Posted: 05 September 2008 at 12:02pm
This is what you've become known for to me.  Taking personal introspection and experience and putting them to words that you can nod your head with.

You're a story teller and your best stories come straight out of the pages of your own history book.

Keep writing.   It keeps those alive and those that have passed smiling.



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