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Kay B
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Topic: The last night before your final dayPosted: 21 August 2008 at 7:55pm |
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Muscles are tight, eye's desperate for some closure Sat looking back on your life not accepting that its over Flicking through photo's of the group partying wild Simply hating the fact that we aint parting with smiles Desperate to see the positives, believe it's a blessing But after awhile, too much thought leads to me stressing Regretting, angry feelings progressing taking my mind Realizing im still alive, so the mistakes im making are fine Discuss your life but see at the end there's no question This angel already saved my best friend from depression.. Kept a smile on for others as we all sat by your side Though i still sit hear proud enough to admit alone that i cried Stuck on what to say, as words can't express how i feel Can't convince myself, yet gotta convince the rest that it's real Making it clear that your forever hear in my chest As we prepare to release a dove for each year we was blessed Lay flowers as the curtains slowly jus draw to a close Regretting missing feelings, you left before we could show And tell how we truly felt, always stayed true to your own You were an angel, perfect and yourself through to the bone *Wipes Away the tears* Keep your eye on all of us, save us from makin mistakes And remember no matter what, no-ones taking ya place See a smiles grown on my face, leave me explaining why Your in a better place, safe..and i aint gotta say Good Bye ...True story... |
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lyricalprincess
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Posted: 22 August 2008 at 8:19am |
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this really hit me i've felt like this before you couldn't have said it better
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Tani Baby
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Rhymez
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Posted: 22 August 2008 at 9:28am |
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I didnt even read the whole thing yet and im giving you feed this shit is sick. even if your next 4 bars suck, this piece is great. I thought 5th and chain were the only ones spitting crazy shit, glad to see theres another person i can listen to. props.
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Rhymez
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Posted: 22 August 2008 at 9:31am |
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11/10 off the scale. keep it up fam
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Kay B
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Posted: 22 August 2008 at 6:48pm |
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props, thanks
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LYRIKAL GOD
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Posted: 22 August 2008 at 9:07pm |
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1000000/10 LMAO |
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BROOKLYN BITCHES
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Kay B
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Posted: 25 August 2008 at 7:55pm |
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Thanks
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Bolo
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Posted: 29 August 2008 at 5:58pm |
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this was nice bro...my one complaint would be the lack of consistency...it was a very solid piece, but some lines just seemed to overshadow the rest, making the rest of the piece seem mediocre...that's a good thing in a way obviously, since that basically means some of your lines were so good that they made the other good lines seem weak, haha...but anyway, solid piece...favorite line was
Flicking through photo's of the group partying wild Simply hating the fact that we aint parting with smiles emotion was dope and on-point (i kno the feeling of losing somone close, and u portrayed it almost to a tee) |
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I am the one that knocks...
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Posted: 01 September 2008 at 12:08pm |
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Shit. This almost brought a tear to my eye. Hats off to you my brother. The fact that its a true story was what made it all the more dope. Even though I dunno who you were talking about, Imma pray that her soul finds peace. Excellent piece.
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Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of...
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Kay B
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Posted: 03 September 2008 at 10:19am |
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props thanks man
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Posted: 05 September 2008 at 12:02pm |
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This is what you've become known for to me. Taking personal introspection and experience and putting them to words that you can nod your head with.
You're a story teller and your best stories come straight out of the pages of your own history book. Keep writing. It keeps those alive and those that have passed smiling. |
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