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 Topic: Bad Cop/Bad Cop (Law & 5-0)Posted: 22 December 2013 at 3:51am |
 J504 Fueled by Bavarian Cremes and caffeine, I arrive at the scene Bounced quick in the Crown Vic and I'm drivin' it mean I just dashed but I must ask, do you see the mustache? An the shaved military fade? so you know that I bust caps Got a gun and a badge but still run into vaj She can get off with a warnin' takin' one in the ass Do I take bribes? Hell naw! this is community service I frisk the pussy for contraband, no immunity cervix I'm a drughead Judge Dredd, won't let a dime drop Got Robocop's sidearm and a mullet like Time Cop YOUR MOVE, CREEP, DEAD OR ALIVE YOU'RE COMING WITH ME Criminals peep my subliminals- I'm sittin down runnin these streets I block shots, SWAT team- can no villains stop me I'm seizin' alla ya shit like Vic Mackey at swap meets Nightstick to drop beats-embroidered windbreaker makes me cold I'm lightin' the first fucker up that's like: DON'T TAZE ME BRO I'm crazy, yo. LAW New badge, New uniform, looking for crack powder Running through these streets quicker than Jack Bauer GET ON YOUR HANDS AND KNEE'S BLACK COWARD You thought selling your heroin, gave you smack power Killing my time, when I'm getting laid in a half hour.. Shit.. I'll send my trainee in.. Grab his sac, and rip the sack out em.. My cop persona got this bitch screaming "OH, Mr. Officer" I've been "counting on your dick" like I'm the pussy Auditor So I handcuffed her up, my tactics are to bend her frame While she blowing my cartridge more than nintendo games Smacking that ass, using my baton as a mean whip Looking like Dirty Harry wit a clean dick I mean shit, after I get dressed, I have to get back to the streets Playing with peoples minds and packing my piece Pulling people over, "You know how fast you was going" Fuck it.. I'll let you off if you "Pass me that donut" |
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 1:33am |
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 1:38am |
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J504 - Good flow, although you could've executed your lines better. You could've added more wordplay or metaphors to your verse. This was well written, just trying to give good feedback and contribute. I like your approach simple yet effect, good story telling, imagery could use more work. I think you'll shine in audio imo. This has a nice rhythm when read outloud.
The Law - cool littler punch in the opener haha, like your emotional imagery. Good delivery, this was a solid verse, wording in spots such as the sack out em line came off as ehh. going/doughnut doesn't rhyme not even in slant fashion at least not to me. You'll make a helluva topical writer, once you get your wording cleaned up a bit. your detail and imagery is nice, good shit...been a while hasn't it haha been a busy man as of late, i will be more active tbh
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 2:18am |
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Very entertaining verses here. I feel like you guys could have definitely brought stronger lines than you did, however. I've seen a higher level of creativity from you both so I don't feel like this was up to par with your skills. Nonetheless, I still enjoyed reading both verses because they were quite humorous and not sure if you both wrote it on your own separate times or shared ideas off each other but you fed off each other really well here. It was very consistent and similar in ideas but still different in style which made for a better read. Nice job.
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 2:46am |
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Preciate the looks, me and Law are both big fans of Super Troopers and felt like throwing something together in reference playing on our screen names. I really had fun with this, you had me rolling on this, Law.
And yo, INK- that last bar of Law's verse reads perfect for me. It's a near rhyme multi, I thought it was the perfect way to end it. |
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 12:27pm |
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Haha yeah same for me with your verse j.
"I'm a drughead Judge Dredd, won't let a dime dro Got Robocop's sidearm and a mullet like Time Cop" That was killer haha.. verse was written smooth as hell too. Thanks for those that left the feedback and INK, if I were to spit that on audio, they would rhyme.
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 6:45pm |
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very impressive work,
dope concept. J5,i think ive already mentioned. i dont like too much complexity. it should be on that fine line between simple and complex... and it was just on that. it was not too much complex and it actually enhanced its beauty... your flow was butter smooth. some decent concepts and good imagery. law, bro your concepts were sick and good executions throughout imo.. i meant it was really an enjoyable read through out. pussy Auditor concept had me lmao... and nice ending... good drop,bros.
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 8:31pm |
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Haha, the donut jokes had me tripping. J's judgedread/robocop rhyme scheme really shined. As did Law's audit concept, I've never thought about or seen anyone use that concept, might have to jack it, lol.
Good drop fellas, smooth stuff.
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J504
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 9:04pm |
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Much respects on the feed, fam. Thanks for taking the time.
Props to Law. |
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Posted: 23 December 2013 at 9:45pm |
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Dude this snuck me in goat ass! A dope collab. Felt more polished than most collabs. Dead at pick. Law held it down to match jeromes multis!
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Receiving backhanded compliments from Orion since 11-28-13.
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Posted: 24 December 2013 at 12:36am |
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I've been waiting for this collab, 2 of my favourite writers. Well done lads, and a funny ass concept!!
J, you were plain clowning, you had to hit this shit with pure comical genius from the get go.. And you achieved it- I'm a drughead Judge Dredd, won't let a dime drop Got Robocop's sidearm and a mullet like Time Cop ^ Fucking loved the references and flow of this shit my man. Law, I love how you changed the style, kept the humour, but relaxed the structure and flow, and chopped the references for bemused directness. It was a great contrast, and kept it interesting- Smacking that ass, using my baton as a mean whip Looking like Dirty Harry wit a clean dick ^ Liked this man. Ruthless. Yes fellas. |
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Posted: 24 December 2013 at 1:03am |
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This is really refreshing at the moment. Two people I thought would never collab finally did. I'm just wondering why I havent been able to collab with you motherfuckers for so long...especially J what the fuck my dude?
J: haha just clowing.. Fueled by Bavarian Cremes and caffeine, I arrive at the scene Bounced quick in the Crown Vic and I'm drivin' it mean I just dashed but I must ask, do you see the mustache? An the shaved military fade? so you know that I bust caps----the barvarian cremes shit killed me
o I take bribes? Hell naw! this is community service I frisk the pussy for contraband, no immunity cervix I'm a drughead Judge Dredd, won't let a dime drop Got Robocop's sidearm and a mullet like Time Cop---dude just brought up Time Cop..nuff said Law: New badge, New uniform, looking for crack powder Running through these streets quicker than Jack Bauer GET ON YOUR HANDS AND KNEE'S BLACK COWARD You thought selling your heroin, gave you smack power Killing my time, when I'm getting laid in a half hour..---really nice section here..flow was crazy Grab his sac, and rip the sack out em.. My cop persona got this bitch screaming "OH, Mr. Officer" I've been "counting on your dick" like I'm the pussy Auditor So I handcuffed her up, my tactics are to bend her frame While she blowing my cartridge more than nintendo games----dope nintendo reference dope collab fella's let me know next time i want to get in it |
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Posted: 24 December 2013 at 12:41pm |
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Thanks guys
and propz to you also J
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Posted: 24 December 2013 at 1:35pm |
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The title straight off is dope lol Very clever
J - Opening bars were fire!! Lol @ Bavarian Cremes. And your internals in the opening 4 and throughout were spotless! Community service/immunity cervix ... very nice!  That was dope. haha @ that closer. And this below was my fave bar I'm a drughead Judge Dredd, won't let a dime drop Got Robocop's sidearm and a mullet like Time Cop Law - Opening 4 lines were nice as fuck. Loved the scheme and multis were inch perfect. Very well done. Counting on your dick/pussy auditor = WTF!!! hahaha, that was fuckin monstrous, and a perfect fit. Lol @ the nintendo games line. And that closer was tough. Very nice near rhyme there bro. Not a lot of people use them but this was used very well. Not forced whatsoever. All in all this was a great drop. Massive props to both of you on this. Loved it!!!
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Posted: 25 December 2013 at 4:47am |
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Good on the looks, fam. Super Troopers is like my favorite movie ever lol.
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Posted: 25 December 2013 at 6:19pm |
Funniest OM I read in a while. Very dope. Wasn't expecting this collab either. |
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Posted: 26 December 2013 at 10:23pm |
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Haha appreciate all of the feedback .
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