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Beans 
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Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6720 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
 Topic: Beans vs The Rap DaemonPosted: 18 September 2018 at 2:10pm |
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5 bars
Reg battle Due Friday by night by 11:59 est |
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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The Rap Daemon
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Joined: 05 August 2015 Location: Purgatory Status: Offline Points: 1108 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-14-0 Form: LWLWWL |
Posted: 21 September 2018 at 11:59pm |
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Once we're done, resemblances to your avatar be wider
Tough image less prevalent 'coz you'll be just a dead fighter! You can try and come with 'dope bars to impress the scene' But you're wack n 'depressing', something we have to 'swallow heavily'... Means 'Beans' fails to live up to his name and can't supply that 'ecstasy'! You could 'aggregate your points' and still wouldn't have a 'leg on me'! I'd diss his 'last drop', but it's been years since he filled in a written piece No research required, need look no further than his skill 'n' activity! But what's funnier, is that this faggot sucks so much He only returns when 'rut' does, just 'coz he's completely stuck in one. |
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Beans
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Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6720 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 22 September 2018 at 4:00pm |
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Posting shortly sorry for the delay rap
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Beans
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Joined: 12 October 2013 Location: MA Status: Offline Points: 6720 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 95-24-5 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 23 September 2018 at 8:23pm |
Crimson's ILL diss Fuckin Clown... Beans Champed leagues & Tourneys, everything bout this kids queer U'll never get Site recognition Bitch, even if U wrote bars on a sheet covered in Zins tears Plus Ur FAT WIFE calls you pussy! that whore is wreckless Bitch always callin you Chicken, Rap.. Right after she eats 4 of those for breakfast SMH Tellin Rosen U'll go down on him! Hes under age, thats gay shit Two bullets in the head give this Ped a Cure, After I'm done kickin his face in On SCRIPTZ I've already bodied U! Nuthin to make this dude choke Every bar U write Falls hard before ILL like disses Crimson Juice Post I'm too Nice W/This Bully shit! Ur fukin dead guy I Champed the 1-2 League...S'why 1 bar from me kills Ur 10 lines
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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Hyperactive
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Joined: 03 August 2015 Status: Offline Points: 113 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-0 Form: WWW |
Posted: 25 September 2018 at 5:13am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. The Rap Daemon: Tough image less prevalent 'coz you'll be just a dead fighter! *This was ok. Flow was off for me and the way it was worded caused it to feel forced, but the setup tied directly into the punch enough that it lands as a soft jab. You can try and come with 'dope bars to impress the scene' But you're wack n 'depressing', something we have to 'swallow heavily'... *Wasn't feeling this at all. Means 'Beans' fails to live up to his name and can't supply that 'ecstasy'! You could 'aggregate your points' and still wouldn't have a 'leg on me'! *Another miss here. The setup was irrelevant to the aggregate points/ leg play, and that play itself carried no relevant punch regardless. I'd diss his 'last drop', but it's been years since he filled in a written piece No research required, need look no further than his skill 'n' activity! *This was better - straight forward attempt to hit at his inactivity, aided by better flow and mostly matching rhyme makes for another soft jab. But what's funnier, is that this faggot sucks so much He only returns when 'rut' does, just 'coz he's completely stuck in one. *The 2nd line was decent. That being said, the setup seemed irrelevant again, and the fact that the rhyme wasn't matched well took away from the idea. Decent attempt, poor execution. Beans: Beans Champed leagues & Tourneys, everything bout this kids queer U'll never get Site recognition Bitch, even if U wrote bars on a sheet covered in Zins tears *Wasn't feeling this opener at all. The setup rhyme in the 1st bar was completely forced, which is even worse considering you only chose to match 2 syllables at the end of the 2nd. I see how you tried to work the play but there wasn't any punch to it the way this was worded. Plus Ur FAT WIFE calls you pussy! that whore is wreckless Bitch always callin you Chicken, Rap.. Right after she eats 4 of those for breakfast *This bar was better simply due to the humor of it - I don't know any of the background here, but without any explanation of this bar it's simply an "insert name here" type, so even with the humorous punch it only lands as a soft jab at most. (If there's any proof of this as a personal that I'm missing, feel free to let me know) SMH Tellin Rosen U'll go down on him! Hes under age, thats gay shit Two bullets in the head give this Ped a Cure, After I'm done kickin his face in *This was similar to your opener, in the fact that you forced a 2 syllable rhyme to try to make a play work that was underdeveloped and poorly executed. Trying to make Ped a Cure a double play here actually took away from the bar to me. Wasn't feeling it. On SCRIPTZ I've already bodied U! Nuthin to make this dude choke Every bar U write Falls hard before ILL like disses Crimson Juice Post *This was much better. The play wasn't necessarily anything special, but it tied in well enough throughout. My main problem was that when you're saying you're ILL, it could also almost be read as if you're saying you're actually him (Ill Scriptz), you know? Though with that being said, the play worked well enough and flow was solid so this landed. I'm too Nice W/This Bully shit! Ur fukin dead guy I Champed the 1-2 League...S'why 1 bar from me kills Ur 10 lines *Nope, not a good closer. Setup was forced again, the whole bar was basic and statement-ish, and lacked creativity. Wasn't feeling this man. Ok, there... broke every bar down in more detail. As for the vote, it is actually almost too close to call. Maybe that's why people haven't voted yet. The Rap Daemon had 2.5 jabs land and 2.5 misses, where as Beans had 3 bad misses but landed a jab and the only real shot of the battle... I'm going to have to VOTE: BEANS I hope my breakdown wasn't too harsh, no hate, just my opinion. I really can seeing this go either way based on personal preference, good luck to you both. |
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Smoothtung
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Joined: 09 December 2012 Status: Offline Points: 2222 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 25-8-3 Form: WWWLWN |
Posted: 28 September 2018 at 5:32pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Man.. The last bar in beans verse killed him. The battle was completely even in my book til it came down to the closer. Rap's didn't have the punch that beans did. Mfvgt beans Sorry sorry for the shitty break down. Busy right now. |
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Dntplywelwitothers
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Joined: 30 November 2013 Status: Offline Points: 172 |
Posted: 29 September 2018 at 4:25pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. RD Your opening comes of clean as far flow, but somehow too " wordy" on the second line. It's not the big choke hold I expect from an opening bar, I'm gonna say it was fair at most.* Your follow up, didn't really hit hard...rhyming and flow are all on par tho, but by the second bar, you should have a full kidney punch, this was still a jab...fair * Your next line, the attempt on a name play fell a bit short, and wasn't a heavy follow up from the previous line, you're three bars in now...there should either be jab after jab...or at least a pretty decent set up for a combination... fair * Next line, seems like it could be a good set up, but I don't really think his activity level is a good angle to go after, when hitting on a personal...even if it's not a fact... there should be a few factors included...imagery being one...the image of him sitting there NOT posting an OM... doesn't floor me in any kinda way. I'd say this was a weak sell. Closer.... there is no tyme for filler in your last bar! You should be throwing shit at him like a angry house wife. Your wordplay was good, but at this point you should have decent set up, and punch... this came off as fair. But it was your sharpest bar. * BEANS Your opener, starts off flexing...and that's good, gotta flex a bit ...its what I expect in a battle, so although you didn't really hit with a devastating blow, but flexing adds character. Flow is there, but you also get a little "wordy" on the second line. This was a good start.** Follow up, yes... set up and punch fall in order, personal or nah... it delivers imagery, and gives a chuckle...flow suffers a bit, again you're "wordy" at the end of your second line... I think you could have omitted "of those" and still sold the bar...regardless this was nice.*** Next line, unlike your opponent you did take the tyme to look at his last drop, and got yourself an advantage on a personal shot, again adding depth and character to your bars, giving more relevance to the objective. The personal, imagery, rhyming , flow and wordplay brings it together...nice *** Follow up, it started as a decent set up, but it developed into filler...the reference to Crims diss, was chuckles... but where I think it had potential...it fell short for me in the delivery...because it was so indirect... it was good.** Closer, unfortunately you started of pretty strong , but then you slowed your momentum, last bar is the wrong place to do that. It seemed like you were just trying to wrap it up rather that wrap HIM up. You add a little bit more flexing, again...not a bad thing, but your closer should be more focused on knocking him the fuck out...this was fair.* All in all this was a decent battle, I don't think either hit with anything devastating, but one most definitely landed more jabs than the other. Vote Beans, for a more direct verse. Thanks fellas, |
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Crimson Juice
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Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3263 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
Posted: 29 September 2018 at 4:45pm |
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3-0 and KO win for Beans.
Smooth i type this with respect,get your votes in order pls,they seriously lack,and because votes are hard to come by these days I'm going to let it stand,but i will disallow the next if no improvement has been reached.. |
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