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The Law 
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God of the Minions
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 Topic: CFC Prelim: Rapper T vs Flossaurus
Posted: 02 January 2014 at 1:22am |
Clash For The Cash Prelims
Battle Rules
- 8 lines per battler
-Due by January 4th, 2014 (11:59pm EST)
- 3-0KO, First to 5
-Verses must be pm'd to me and I will post them in the battle
-No free posting, or talking in battle thread that is for the CFC threads (Only VERSES and VOTES should be in battle thread I will disqualify you myself if you do not obey that rule) *If the battle needs a bump, I will take care of it or pm other members online to give it a look. .
Edited by The Law - 02 January 2014 at 12:30pm
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The Law
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God of the Minions
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Posted: 03 January 2014 at 12:53am |
Rapper T
Seems Floss doesnt know what's good for him is shitty as to me
Keep flossin, you're just showing off cavities to Rapper T
Floss' flows shit and he anally takes blows by ball bags
Than a ho he gets mo dick so his poo FLOw iS SAUR ASs
You Mussaurus, I'm Tyrranosaurus, flossing my teeth with ya
Hola señora, I give ya fourth degree burns with a menorah
To a crisp for being soft, smooth violence with oxymora
Better DIe NOw SAUR fore your aortae stops in trauma
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The Law
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God of the Minions
Joined: 15 June 2013
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Points: 5504
Text Rank: Unranked
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Posted: 03 January 2014 at 12:54am |
Flossaurus
Fuck this cracker, I'm STOMPin this white T like my new Nike's smashin a wife beat,
I'm from the States T, where hip hop might be? Bitch it started here! New Zealand just a light feat,
I'm fuckin RIFLING on noobs, not talkin hyphy but he goin too dumb in this booth,
Must be all the drugs he consumed, fuck sky limits he been on "a trip to the moon!",
Watch me chip his TOOTH wit a pound! Mr. T bitch, look who's fuckin pitiful now,
Even dental Floss be real wit a crown, no one counting on T, they just COUNT DOWN, (T-minus)
You sad coward! He thinkin "damn this dude really beefin me, I need like two of me..."
I'll still beat two Ts on a cell wit four bars easily, he still can't blow up like a TNT. (AT&T)
◇Did I go too hard on em?◇
Expos
1 - he from new zealand, white tee
2 - he had an OM 'trip to the moon'
3 - mr. T always said I pity the fool, nasa counts down wit tminus
4 - a T and T,, cell company/explosives/two of him,, Triple meaning.
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Titu
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Posted: 03 January 2014 at 1:34am |
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Rapper T:
Seems Floss doesnt know what's good for him is shitty as to me
Keep flossin, you're just showing off cavities to Rapper T
This could be a really nice bar... Set up ruined it a bit. But still its aight.
Floss' flows shit and he anally takes blows by ball bags
Than a ho he gets mo dick so his poo FLOw iS SAUR ASs
Eeh- Felt a bit forced. It didnt work for me.
You Mussaurus, I'm Tyrranosaurus, flossing my teeth with ya
Hola señora, I give ya fourth degree burns with a menorah
No. No. Generic.
To a crisp for being soft, smooth violence with oxymora
Better DIe NOw SAUR fore your aortae stops in trauma
Again, it felt off.
- im not bound to give any feed but i want to see ya elevate. As for constructive criticism, work on yo concepts. Put in more creativity. Study yo opponent first... And always try to think outside the box while forming punchlines.
Floss:
Fuck this cracker, I'm STOMPin this white T like my new Nike's smashin a wife beat,
I'm from the States T, where hip hop might be? Bitch it started here! New Zealand just a light feat,
Decent concept. Aight to set the tone.
I'm fuckin RIFLING on noobs, not talkin hyphy but he goin too dumb in this booth,
Must be all the drugs he consumed, fuck sky limits he been on "a trip to the moon!",
I liked it.good shit.
Watch me chip his TOOTH wit a pound! Mr. T bitch, look who's fuckin pitiful now,
Even dental Floss be real wit a crown, no one counting on T, they just COUNT DOWN, (T-minus)
Liked the concept...
You sad coward! He thinkin "damn this dude really beefin me, I need like two of me..."
I'll still beat two Ts on a cell wit four bars easily, he still can't blow up like a TNT. (AT&T)
Lol. Best bar imo. Dope concepts and good execution.
You know what ya doin...keep doin it!!
MVGT Foss -on the basis of better/more punches.
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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The Butcher
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Joined: 26 December 2013
Location: Pittsburgh PA.
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Posted: 03 January 2014 at 6:33am |
Rapper T-
Seems Floss doesnt know what's good for him is shitty as to me
Keep flossin, you're just showing off cavities to Rapper T
if this would have been worded different it would have been a killer line but as it sets its not that great and isn't really a punch the way that it sits. but did peak my interest some.
Floss' flows shit and he anally takes blows by ball bags
Than a ho he gets mo dick so his poo FLOw iS SAUR ASs
yet again if this one would have been worded a little different then it would have been a lot better but it is still a decent line.
You Mussaurus, I'm Tyrranosaurus, flossing my teeth with ya
Hola señora, I give ya fourth degree burns with a menorah
not to much to say about this one. word transitions were pretty smooth and it was a decent line
To a crisp for being soft, smooth violence with oxymora
Better DIe NOw SAUR fore your aortae stops in trauma
ehhh not a great closer or wordplay.
overall your flow was good but you didnt land hardly any punches but your structure stayed decent.
Floss-
Fuck this cracker, I'm STOMPin this white T like my new Nike's smashin a wife beat, I'm from the States T, where hip hop might be? Bitch it started here! New Zealand just a light feat,
decent opener. got my attention and was decent wordplay
I'm fuckin RIFLING on noobs, not talkin hyphy but he goin too dumb in this booth,
Must be all the drugs he consumed, fuck sky limits he been on "a trip to the moon!",
loved this bar. smooth as hell
Watch me chip his TOOTH wit a pound! Mr. T bitch, look who's fuckin pitiful now,
Even dental Floss be real wit a crown, no one counting on T, they just COUNT DOWN, (T-minus)
loved this bar. good wordplay and decent punch
You sad coward! He thinkin "damn this dude really beefin me, I need like two of me..."
I'll still beat two Ts on a cell wit four bars easily, he still can't blow up like a TNT. (AT&T)
this is my favorite bar as well. great way to end ya drop.
MVGT- Floss for better punches/multies and good shit though to both of you
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Adrenalyn
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Joined: 28 December 2013
Location: Toronto
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Posted: 04 January 2014 at 10:19am |
@Rapper T
Seems Floss doesnt know what's good for him is shitty as to meKeep flossin, you're just showing off cavities to Rapper Ti kinda got a bit thrown off by the grammar of the first line, floss, cavities, decent.. Floss' flows shit and he anally takes blows by ball bagsThan a ho he gets mo dick so his poo FLOw iS SAUR ASsthat was pretty lame. i ain gon' lie. good attempt on the nameplay tho.You Mussaurus, I'm Tyrranosaurus, flossing my teeth with yaHola señora, I give ya fourth degree burns with a menorahsorry, not mexican enough to get this. it's sexual innuendo that i know.To a crisp for being soft, smooth violence with oxymoraBetter DIe NOw SAUR fore your aortae stops in trauma
i like that u continued the flow from the last bar but you sure u ain a paleontologist? not much of a punch here yo..
@Flossaurus
Fuck this cracker, I'm STOMPin this white T like my new Nike's smashin a wife beat,
I'm from the States T, where hip hop might be? Bitch it started here! New Zealand just a light feat,
first line was promising but then self hype followed.
I'm fuckin RIFLING on noobs, not talkin hyphy but he goin too dumb in this booth,
Must be all the drugs he consumed, fuck sky limits he been on "a trip to the moon!",
okay, u said he's high n retarded. now that that's been established, where's the punch?
Watch me chip his TOOTH wit a pound! Mr. T bitch, look who's fuckin pitiful now,
Even dental Floss be real wit a crown, no one counting on T, they just COUNT DOWN, (T-minus)
nice set up, good punch, i get the reference ofcoarse bit self hypish tho.
You sad coward! He thinkin "damn this dude really beefin me, I need like two of me..."
I'll still beat two Ts on a cell wit four bars easily, he still can't blow up like a TNT. (AT&T)
that last part killed the momentum of this bar, good attempt at wordplay but it wasn't all there yet, u needed to get that second part of that last line right, given more time and thought u probably would have.
MVGT: Flossaurus Ripper T, some of your bars seemed kinda forced in the way where u were trying to be too complex that it took away from writing effective punches. clear your mind a little more. don't get all educational on us, i need to understand what your get'n at meng. mind your wording, you've got concept now work on multies and punches. Floss, u built up a good momentum near the end, next time try writing passed the bar limit and see if what u wrote after is better and try to make where the momentum started your opener if possible till you get your groove.
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The Law
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Posted: 04 January 2014 at 12:22pm |
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