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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 ![]() Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Topic: CFC Round 1: Point Blank vs FlossaurusPosted: 06 January 2014 at 11:14am |
![]() Round One - 16 Emcees 6 Bars/12 lines per battler Due Jan 11, 2014 by 11:59 Est Time 3-0KO or First to 5 Crew Votes Allowed Participant Votes Allowed Verses are to be sent to me No Free-posting or talking in your battle thread (Verses and Votes ONLY!!) If there is a problem, pm myself or a mod Failure to abide by the rules will result in warning and disqualification! Good luck everyone. - Graphics made by J-Brenn.
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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 ![]() Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 10 January 2014 at 12:25pm |
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Point Blank -He stated here that he's had training in wrestling -He's the leader of High Caliber and they have a member called 'The Butcher' -P/Pee I'm going hard in the first bringing harm to this jerk As my 'bars are at work' putting 'Floss on the shelf' like a pharmacy clerk! He had to tag with Law cos everyone in his own crew is a sucker He couldn't even teach em to handle beef so he recruited a Butcher! Watch my punches diminish his as I'm coming with viciousness You suck as a lyricist so "you ain't seeing that cash, Flo" like struggling businesses! It won't be a close shave when I introduce his face to a blade Cos this lames getting slayed, as PB's 'erasing F' like kids ashamed of their grades! I bring danger and flames, and this faggots my newest victim Half my crew have ripped him, now "P's putting Flo underground" like a sewage system! With nukes I'll hit him! F ain't ready for this hell that I'm raisin' He'll be on the deck and in pain when I make him 'hit the Rock Bottom' like in his wrestling trainin'! |
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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 ![]() Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 10 January 2014 at 12:26pm |
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Flossaurus You askin why avoid em? Cause if you beat his ass you already know he Point'in! (Snitch) Hit PB and destroy em! I'm bustin lead like chemists snap pencils for enjoyment. (PB=Lead) Point proven that you ain't on topic! Last post I read you was fuckin watchin The Hobbit, Fill in the Blank is taggin wit gin and tonic, Sparta left cuz P wanted him in his cockpit, Flows got you stuffed up stop, it ain't Congestion, execution so on point! He left wit a Blank Expression! Just staring into his own reflection, he tryin to get a 'brownie Point' ended up smoked like resin! PinPoint em like a session of Call of Duty GHOST, He got a Blanket obsession so I put em to sleep wit scopes! P tryin to say he shoot and throw 'bows, bitch you only shootin Blanks on cheap hoes. Dude overexposed like the Harlem Shake, Ask him his real name and he 'drawin a Blank', (?????) You sayin 'mate' like a wannabe Manc, how you 'pose to make a comeback battlin Shank? How's he third rank if this Point spread over and under, I'll be bettin high that P lookin for lovers, Flossaurus already eatin your mother! Too me PB is just Peanut and Butter, easily defeated by HUNGER. Expos: 1-PB is lead on the periodic table 2-he put on a post he was watchin the hobbit, he always tagged up with Sparta 5-his real name listed as ????, his first battle in awhile was vs shank |
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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 ![]() Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 10 January 2014 at 1:17pm |
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J-Scott
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Joined: 11 December 2013 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 302 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-1 Form: LLLWNW |
Posted: 10 January 2014 at 1:37pm |
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Point blank:
Bar 1 was pretty clever, I feel like the punch couldve came out harder with a better flip on his name but not bad Bar 2 this seemed more less a statement than a punch. Set up line was nice just feel the punch could be reworded a bit to make nice. Good personal @ the crew though. Bar 3 this was pretty sick nice execution here solid hit. Bar 4 felt your set up line couldve been polished out better but again your punch was nice here. Bar 5 kinda forced. The concept is very good. But the wording couldve been a lot better to make the hit more solid. Bar 6 lol I liked this line good hit on the punch Overall most of your punches landed with a good bit of effect. I felt some couldve been ampd up to do harder damage but the personals/nameplays you got in kinda saved you in some areas where the punch didnt land ashard. Floss: Bar 1 I waa actually feelin this cool opener referring his initial to the periodic table. Bar 2 eh not to much feelin this bar bro, the personal couldve been really sick just felt to forced in. Threw the effectiveness off a bit. Bar 3 this was a cool line not a bad flip on em. Bar 4 lol I get where you was aimin this one but the hit was not very strong Bar 5 nah execution killed this 1 a bit for me. Bar 6 lol I like this nice lil name flip. Overall your verse had some nice hits in it and I think you even had the punch of the battle with your opener barIimo. But point blank just finished with consistancy didnt have the harder hits but ge didnt have as many misses either Gotta say PB took this for having more of the punches Good battle fellas Accept or disAllow on yall |
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The Law
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God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 ![]() Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
Posted: 10 January 2014 at 9:25pm |
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1-0 Point Blank.
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levy420
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Joined: 22 May 2013 Location: San Antonio TX Status: Offline Points: 3443 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 39-33-4 Form: LWWLLN |
Posted: 10 January 2014 at 9:46pm |
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Point, I liked ur verse opener hit hard for me second bari got the feeling u was shaking off some rust wording was off didn't land much bar 3 was statementishy to me the set up was nice but punch kinda threw it off
Bar 4 my favorite line from u in this battle good solid word play flow an solid punch landed as well Bar5 decent little jab here nothing to major Bar6 good closer a lil stretched on the punch Floss Bar 1decent opener not much of a punch good jab though Bar2i seen what u was goin for but the wording threw off the punch more of a statement Bar 3 best bar so far flow was smooth an landed a solid punch Bar 4 didn't like the bar at all didn't work for me to actually do damage to ur opponent Bar 5 to me this was the hardest hitting punch in the battle Bar 6 solid closer This was a good battle definatly felt as if point was shaking off some rust cuz he wasn't as fluent with his verse as it normally is that took away from his punches a bit Floss did good an came consistant enough to edge it in my eyes with the bettr closer an the hardest punch in the battle propps to both stay up Mvgt floss |
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U.N.L.M.
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Joined: 19 December 2006 Location: USA Status: Offline Points: 1955 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 23-15-0 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 11 January 2014 at 1:54am |
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PB: Opener was pretty clean, enjoyed the play...2nd bar I thought was pretty strong as well, nice...3rd bar was probably your best bar, nicely worked...4th bar was alright - I thought the "erasin' F" concept is a bit stretched as you can't really erase your grade? Your weakest bar IMO...5th bar was cool, decent personal attached to it as well...closer was a cool idea, although i don't think the wording is up to bar with the "hit the rock bottom"...still a good personal and finish...Overall: I thought it was a pretty polished verse...other than the erasin' F concept, I thought all your bars were working to some degree.
Floss: Opener was a bit weak for me...granted, I've seen a lot of PB/lead plays but I just think you really didn't do anything aggressive with this one here...2nd bar was a bit long winded with no real venom IMO (setup was hilarious though, well done )...3rd bar was a cool idea with the "brownie point"...Thought it worked but, again, your lines are longer for no real reason IMO...4th bar was pretty weak IMO, you're better than that...5th bar was probably your best bar because of how direct it was (and aggressive), nicely done...closer was a bit simple and not really that strong...The PB/peanut butter thing is not anything new and again the concept was simple but the line was long unnecessarily...Overall: A solid verse as well, thought you tried to stuff too much into it...most of your setups contained clever puns on his name but they were not really doing anything in terms of punches (or even setting up your punches)...also, the long lines can work if you have a heavy/complicated concept...Arthur uses longer lines and typically has some type of wordplay mixed in with a decent concept...Most of your bars here, though, would benefit from cleaner, straight to the point wording IMO...For example (the hunger one)...would've been fine just using that second line as the setup and punch instead of cramming it all in one to add a non-connected setup"How's he third with Point spread over and under cryin' to his mother Cause to me PB is just Peanut and Butter, easily defeated by HUNGER. To me, it makes your bars read more to the point (thus, direct) and aggressive and seem less fillerish...again, that's personal preference and I'm just showing you that to explain why I thought some of your punches felt a bit long-winded or less effective with the longer lines...Anyway, it was still a good verse with some decent concepts....I just thought Point's verse was a bit more well-written and consistent. V/Point Blank
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H4ZE
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Joined: 13 July 2013 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1859 Crew: eNtiTy Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-6-0 Form: WWLLLL |
Posted: 11 January 2014 at 7:21am |
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PB:
Bar 1-haha pretty clever punch, Bar 2-I like this one to, felt like it wasnt as strong as the first though Bar 3-pretty sick punch here,the best in your drop in my opinion Bar 4-set up line couldve been batter but the punch was dope Bar 5-haha,I like this one,wording could been better but other than thay sick punch Bar 6-nice closer,lol Floss: Bar 1-nice opener, I was feelin this Bar 2-decent,but the wording threw it off Bar 3-haha nice punch on this one,probably the best in ur drop Bar 4-eh, couldve used better wording,punch was decent Bar 5-again the wording couldve been better the bad wording makes your flow choppy Bar 6-lol nice name flip,awesome closer This is a close battle but I have to go with PointBlank on this one he had more hard hitting pun hes and better set up lines and flow so mvgt PointBlank
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The Law
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Posted: 11 January 2014 at 12:27pm |
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3-1 Point Blank
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DressToKill
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Posted: 11 January 2014 at 1:23pm |
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Point - not the strongest verse but you punched thoroughly throughout. I liked how you flipped the butcher line on him, that was just proof that you're dangerous with the smallest amounts of personals. Some of the plays seemed fillerish, like you were struggling for some solid personals but the concepts were creative and executed nicely none the less. I'm sure this is just you getting re loaded into battling again, good job
Floss - you really didn't take the most effective approach that you could of with the personals. I didn't really see any of points more embarrassing moments on LA as of late which there were a few. I seen that you tried wordplay but the thing is these plays have been done on point years ago, the PB / lead thing especially. I see that you put forward a good effort but you didn't bring the killer material my dude . Stay up Vote PB |
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The original comeback kid
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 11 January 2014 at 7:28pm |
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I'm going hard in the first bringing harm to this jerk As my 'bars are at work' putting 'Floss on the shelf' like a pharmacy clerk! "Nice play with the shelf thing and its a tidy looking bar all around.....Good start" He had to tag with Law cos everyone in his own crew is a sucker He couldn't even teach em to handle beef so he recruited a Butcher! "Thats pretty skillfull getting a good shot at him out of nothing....Nice creativity" Watch my punches diminish his as I'm coming with viciousness You suck as a lyricist so "you ain't seeing that cash, Flo" like struggling businesses! "Again its very creative here a good play on the cash thing" It won't be a close shave when I introduce his face to a blade Cos this lames getting slayed, as PB's 'erasing F' like kids ashamed of their grades! "Maybe a bit repetetive with the F type nameplays now I would prefer to see some attempts at personnals......That said it still comes off as a decent hit" I bring danger and flames, and this faggots my newest victim Half my crew have ripped him, now "P's putting Flo underground" like a sewage system! "See feed back above" With nukes I'll hit him! F ain't ready for this hell that I'm raisin' He'll be on the deck and in pain when I make him 'hit the Rock Bottom' like in his wrestling trainin'! "Not a great closer./.it was an attempt to get personnal but could have been done better" A few hiccups but mostly a solid verse............Very creative but slightly repetetive I enjoyed thi verse overall........Good shitt ....................................////////////////////////........................../ You askin why avoid em? Cause if you beat his ass you already know he Point'in! (Snitch) Hit PB and destroy em! I'm bustin lead like chemists snap pencils for enjoyment. (PB=Lead) "Just not clear where you was coming from here..........Not enough sting an a bit awkward" Point proven that you ain't on topic! Last post I read you was fuckin watchin The Hobbit, Fill in the Blank is taggin wit gin and tonic, Sparta left cuz P wanted him in his cockpit, "Nah Sparta who..........Before my time and yours? Hobbit thing at least you tried to get personal........But the homo thing was meh" Flows got you stuffed up stop, it ain't Congestion, execution so on point! He left wit a Blank Expression! Just staring into his own reflection, he tryin to get a 'brownie Point' ended up smoked like resin! "I see where you wanted this to go.......Got to try be more to the point cos this looks dragged out and that takes away any sting this might have had" PinPoint em like a session of Call of Duty GHOST, He got a Blanket obsession so I put em to sleep wit scopes! P tryin to say he shoot and throw 'bows, bitch you only shootin Blanks on cheap hoes. "Not bad man you getting in with this one......Would have liked to see it tightend up a bit but still its hit" Dude overexposed like the Harlem Shake, Ask him his real name and he 'drawin a Blank', (?????) You sayin 'mate' like a wannabe Manc, how you 'pose to make a comeback battlin Shank? "Very good shit here Flo you have redeemed yourself homie....It's a very" tight bar and a really good hit......Wish you had have brought some more of this ish" How's he third rank if this Point spread over and under, I'll be bettin high that P lookin for lovers, Flossaurus already eatin your mother! Too me PB is just Peanut and Butter, easily defeated by HUNGER. "Not feeling the mother thing........the whole bar feels a bit awkward.....Not the best way to close up" So one or two good hits including the bar of the battle imo with the shan thing but also alot of room for improvement with some ugly looking filler problems.......Just need to refine your game a bit and you will be a force to be reckoned with.............. Point was able to use his experience here his verse was consistent with the hitting almost no wasted bars there.Flo def threw a few away and wasnt able to deliver a smooth read like Point was something which I feel is important. Flo wasnt too far away from making this a close battle but as it is I got to go with Point Blank Vote= PB Good battle lads |
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The Law
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Posted: 12 January 2014 at 12:52am |
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5-1
Point Blank Advances to The Quarter Finals
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