Open Mic: Colostomy Bags and Four Leaf Clovers

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    Posted: 16 February 2014 at 12:46am
Striking others with these Viking fists,
Im Odins cousin draped in lightning mist.
Im a Norse God
and im flying home,
Born in Prauge,
but this tiger roams.
Chomp'n at the bit and arthritis bones,
Sail'n midget fits,
like a pirate gnome!
I come and I go,
the wind in winter,
Spend'n summers alone,
but its been December.
I remember Novembers,
and the sun in Autumn,
Letters ive rendered,
you must not of got'em.
Ive come close,
but still a joke im Loki,
With hopes to choke on pills,
When die'n low key!
If Spring would hold me,
id be OK,
Things told to fold me,
put'n A's to May!
Since its not today,
lets carry on with whispers,
Full Monty Burns,
siloquis and a smitten Smithers!
The flowers wither,
when its my time to bloom,
And the Jameson triggers,
drink'n nine to noon.
I fine tune,
to develop my psyche,
And grind tooth,
as it tries to bite me!
Its kinda frightening,
a rumble with the king of Valhalla,
Its a morning night thing,
like Muslims when they sing to Allah!
I Jihad in Impalas,
its a new day in age,
Drop'n more worth than dollars,
printed on the same page!
I switch blade,
and hammer like Thor,
Total Recall,
Quaid scatter'n whores!
And ive been here before,
same trip but different shrooms,
Head sinking to floor,
as I envision shift'n rooms.
The devils grip consumes,
think the levels have risen,
I slip to trip papoose,
life that a mother has given!
Stuck in a prison,
watch the prism shake,
A grizzly grimace
as I witness ingrates
Instagram my take,
its picture perfect,
A candid fake,
the canidates are Earth rich!



Edited by Brotha Goose - 16 February 2014 at 1:21am
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Yo, Goosey

I really thought the approach you took covering the seasons/gods was really cool. You had some really nice imagery in this piece, especially in your opening bars. You did stumble with the flow a bit but I found with these short bars styles it's born to happen a little bit. Overall this was a really nice drop, enjoyable read fam.
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Thx bro.....key'd this while at the hospital....still got my finger lol #insidejoke
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LMAO! you stupid goose!!! glad to see you still can type! this was a very cool approach to the seasons gods as DTK said... good drop brothA!
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My thumbs still work bro.....lol....thx for the feed
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Lol damn good shit,goosey.
DOPE concept and really nice execution. This short line scheme really suits you. Very entertaining read,brotha.
As DTK said, opening bars were the best.
Props dawg.
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Thx my dude
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Originally posted by Brotha Goose Brotha Goose wrote:

the whole thing



it's ill how you mixed all those running themes/concepts together.
There was a lot going on in a good way
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I liked the scheme you brought to this. Similar to your usual style but something was a bit different.  I think you just stepped it up lyrically.  I loved how yo brought this whole rhyme together.  you killed it with the scheme and the run on rhyme scheme so to speak..  good shit goosey

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I wish I wrote that opening pair...hideously sick!

Lol @ Stan reference...lol @ Loki

Quaid scattering whores....legend!

Overall, this was a good drop...can tell it's a bit of a throwaway to burn time, but I liked some of your metaphors and shit in there. Was good, tone was like a calm Que....which was coolio!!

Weren't you the guy who came here with really long lines? Now look at you...#evolution
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shhhiiit. howd i miss this? shit was so damn sick. like cuba said- fucking evolution! lol, keep it up man.
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