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Smoothtung 
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 Topic: Beantown bagpipesPosted: 16 April 2013 at 3:54pm |
 I represent my city with the REST of the Commonwealth. And YES I have a bomb to drop myself. This is real love reaching out to my family.. Find me in the streets cuz, Boylston and Ann street. I saw a guy cry as he stopped and folded at a mans feet.. Pray for Boston, shed a tear for Martin. And pay Revere a visit on your way to the Garden. And NEVER forget a New York September.. Redsox and Yankee fans unite as two forts remember. Two lords in embers.. due force will be rendered. But who's the source of course and who's corpse should be blendered! I cant shake the feel of a false flag.. Fake? Real? I can't make a deal with my mind who to jaw at. Fall back? Never til I know who the fucker is. And God have me find that the fault was the Governments.. But back to the innocent people attacked right? Listen to the Beantown bagpipes.. We love you. Edited by Smoothtung - 16 April 2013 at 4:08pm |
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 5:36pm |
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Though you never even had the chance to witness it |
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Kiki Spirez
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 5:38pm |
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This was beautiful man.
The 'folded at a mans feet' bar was great imagery and flowed so nice. This was short and sweet, but for some concepts, less is more. Praying for everyone involved and affected by this. Keep up dude.
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 5:59pm |
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Thats dope what can i do to get a battle here?
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 6:52pm |
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Thanks Kiki, I was born and raised in Boston shit really hit home for me
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J504
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 7:13pm |
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This was nice overall, the imagery was nice and te emotion behind this felt real. Only critique I have is the wording coulda bee better in a few places for me. Still, really nice read right here. Stay up.
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 7:18pm |
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This was a nice drop Smooth! I feel the emotion and aggression all the way throughout. You really hit concrete on this one!
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 9:15pm |
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I like what Kiki said sometimes less is more...That def is the situation with this...Imagery is just great smooth..but you knew that already..The mans feet line was dope i really enjoyed that
"Pray for Boston, shed a tear for Martin. And pay Revere a visit on your way to the Garden. And NEVER forget a New York September.. Redsox and Yankee fans unite as two forts remember. Two lords in embers.. due force will be rendered. But who's the source of course and who's corpse should be blendered! "--- I see your familiar with the Boston area too...shit was crazy yesterday...I like how you mentioned NY and the yankees...dope shit smooth Beantown Bagpipes all day everyday my dude... |
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SwedishDope
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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 10:10pm |
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Sharp as always smooth, picks up the subject an' rides, cold as ice,
Love that u, even when it's your own town, u can still see clearly, doesn't let the chock, drama or fear cloud ur open mind. /clapclap |
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As I like to say, no such thing as "can't get no better, baadiing!" Gain no fame to stay the same!
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 17 April 2013 at 1:08am |
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Thanks so much guys I had to keep it simple here with everything, there were points when I wanted to go off on some cool rhyming bars but sometimes an event like this just calls for simplicity, like Kiki and exo said. Much love to all of you.
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Kosmosis
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Posted: 17 April 2013 at 1:57am |
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Redsox and Yankee fans unite as two forts remember.
Two lords in embers.. due force will be rendered. dope line. I am a sox fan as my father was as his father was before him and so on....so yeah, this was an excellent way to describe the vibe of the situation.
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Posted: 18 April 2013 at 6:27am |
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this was a good verse. tastefully executed.i feel you about wanting to go overboard with rhymes, this was a nice middle ground
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far as I know we've been blacklist, for as long as the Earth rotate on a twenty-three degree axis
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Posted: 18 April 2013 at 12:45pm |
thanks broseph
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Posted: 18 April 2013 at 1:55pm |
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This was dope smooth! You had some cool rhyme schemes and you flow was nice too.
I was feelin the opening barz:
I bet you expected i would rep Boston, well..
I represent my city with the REST of the Commonwealth. And YES I have a bomb to drop myself. This is real love reaching out to my family.. Find me in the streets cuz, Boylston and Ann street. I saw a guy cry as he stopped and folded at a mans feet.. |
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Posted: 20 April 2013 at 11:35am |
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Man, even though there is no beat, I still was moving my head to it. Nice flow, and great story. Had me sad but happy cause of your lyrics of how it represented Boston. Keep it up man.
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Posted: 20 April 2013 at 4:28pm |
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And NEVER forget a New York September..
Redsox and Yankee fans unite as two forts remember. Two lords in embers.. due force will be rendered. But who's the source of course and who's corpse should be blendered! ^^^^^^^^^^ that was genius !!  Loved this drop Smooth. I'm starting to really enjoy your stuff yano. The imagery you created with the 'mans feet' bar too was sheer brilliance. Shows how a simple use of particular words can contribute to painting such a vivid picture. Great drop !! |
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Posted: 20 April 2013 at 5:57pm |
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Thanks for the good looks Tre, Hood and Manc. Much love
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Posted: 21 April 2013 at 2:56pm |
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That was a crazy episode.
The martin line. So sad I saw a picture of the little lad Damn that's evil. I feel yo pain brother. I guess this some therapy for you. Good job |
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Posted: 15 April 2014 at 9:56pm |
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bump for the anniversary. 617 strong. Red sox nation unite.
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Posted: 15 April 2014 at 10:00pm |
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Yes dude! This peice is fire
Emotional day today glad you an Exo did something |
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