Open Mic: "Man Dime vs Fat Swine"--Duzt & DTK |
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Exoduzt 
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 Topic: "Man Dime vs Fat Swine"--Duzt & DTKPosted: 27 February 2014 at 9:49pm |
 DTK: I arise with the crack of dawn, envisioning my potential Hit the iron building a back of brawn, exhibiting the grind of metal Filing down my sculptured frame to display the detailed aesthetics Zeus's son, the inhuman one.. Like the sculptures of he-males in Venice Manly men, I walk amongst you mortals in my tank tops swollen Veins, quads bulging..looking like a dang rock posin Do my cardio to shred fat and keep the body percentage low Wearing sweat pants every fuckin day cuz I can't fit into denim clothes I eat every two hours to stay anabolic, my motivation directs my purpose Reap the rewards as I inspect my gains, posing in every reflective surface Eat, sleep, train...eat, rest, repeat.. Repetition, perfect existence, to interconnect the beast Push through mental battle to exhibit a desired goal Release the anger from daily existence through an iron pole Alcohol isn't an option on the weekends, must respect my diet Keeps body replenished with the necessities and leave the rest to science In the end it's all you, stay true and keep the credit Discipline and self betterment, that's the key to aesthetics! Duzt: Extra butter and parmesan as the fats just engross my noodles... a box of Twinkies and Yodels and of course a few Toaster Stroodles!... Heart burn constantly when it comes to my my chest I knew it was on fire... whats a diet? T.V's on and my ass is glued to my recliner!... so be quiet! acne on my neck roll looking like mosquito bumps... Mustard stains on T shirts not to mention all the Dorito crumbs... Cheetos and burritos YUM! If your healthy than I cant stand you... Your just jealous that you cant play with my man boobs... Chinese buffets are the best cus it's all I can eat for free... High fives to Mcdonalds fries as they add to my obesity!... I love Kit Kats and Snickers, Milky Ways and Zingers... three Musketears a couple beers it's whats for dinner!... A couple meatballs with cheese and a porter house steak for me... No eggs. I'll take the french toast and a glass of bacon grease... with a straw. shit I'm not a beast i jus' like the sound of it slurppin... you only live once so I'm gonna make sure that it's worth it... People say I'm gonna die soon and I should act my age tho... my heart jus' stopped....nah its back... now pass the mashed potatoes!... |
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Brotha Goose
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Posted: 28 February 2014 at 1:41am |
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Lmao off at this whole concept! DTK with a much more serious approach, but
at the same time I could sense an underlying humor....thats really cool bro. Sculptures in Venice....rock posin....can't fit into denim clothes (lmao) I thought those lines were funny af. Exo....straight clown'n the whole way through my dude, had me laughin my ass off! Mosquito bumps... cheetos and burritos YUM....can't play with my man boobs.... Glass of bacon grease..... shit was just comical! Really liked the way y'all approached this, both of yur POV:a were executed smooth and with yur own different styles. Really liked this one fam... keep'em come'n just include me next time damn it! Great drop fellas |
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Posted: 28 February 2014 at 4:44am |
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Super Dope shit here.
I had a lol's Smooth verse from DTK, "Do my cardio to shred fat and keep the body percentage low Wearing sweat pants every fuckin day cuz I can't fit into denim clothes"Eat sleep line was a nice touch, and the way you ended it in the last few bars.. Exo had a flawless verse from start to finish. That whole thing is quotable so there is no reason to even pick out lines or anything. It was definitely as flawless as a flawless verse can get haha. This was a sick collab though in a humorous way. You guys did your thing, and wrote well enough to have a dope verse and stay on topic, and still give the readers the humor you were looking to give them.   Comedy Central. |
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JBrenn
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Posted: 28 February 2014 at 7:58am |
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this is something it takes extra creativity... yes it was fucking hilarious but the raw lyricism here from bothe emcees was dope!!!
I enjoyed the whole thing...
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 28 February 2014 at 3:50pm |
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thanks fellas
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 01 March 2014 at 3:50am |
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anyone else?
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Titu
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Posted: 02 March 2014 at 10:20pm |
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Lmao... That was some next level shit.
DTK- lol Dang rock posin/Denim clothes... Dope. An lmao @ this bar. Its so true haha I eat every two hours to stay anabolic, my motivation directs my purpose Reap the rewards as I inspect my gains, posing in every reflective surface I also like iron pole and science bars. Exo- Lol opener was sick as fuck. so be quiet! acne on my neck roll looking like mosquito bumps... Mustard stains on T shirts not to mention all the Dorito crumbs... Haha ^^ i can picture that. Awesome. Lmao @ man boobs bar. Zingers/ greese/ .. Both of them bars had me lol. And a dope closer haha.. Both of the verses were pure entertainment. Dope concept and nicely executed verses from both of you. You guys didnt let my interest stumble.. Good shit haha |
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 04 March 2014 at 2:42pm |
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good looks Titty flakes
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Posted: 04 March 2014 at 2:45pm |
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lmao @ sweat pants line
rest was cool
keep that pen moving!
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Posted: 04 March 2014 at 9:23pm |
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lmfao, this had mad humour ya'll are cray
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Posted: 05 March 2014 at 2:53am |
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That was cool funny concept and well executed on both verses
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Posted: 05 March 2014 at 2:38pm |
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Very strange topic but I thought this worked quite well with the two opposing verses. Exo's closer made me laugh haha, nice work
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Posted: 05 March 2014 at 3:20pm |
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Real dope guys, kinda sore I wasn't invited but this was nasty. DTK went with the lavish vocab and word play, classic dtk and I think he writes his best stuff in that area. Loved it.
Exo stayed true to his grimy mufuck'n style right here, loved every word. Every bar connected aha every one. Like dtk, exo is another writer who sticks to what he does best. These guys just keep getting better at what they do. Stay up.
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Though you never even had the chance to witness it |
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DressToKill
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Posted: 05 March 2014 at 4:10pm |
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Thanks to everyone for reading/feeding this!
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The original comeback kid
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Posted: 06 March 2014 at 1:53am |
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First off, I love when people nail a concept within their collab...I thought having each other portray both extremes of taking care of your body was a great idea...
I thought Dress' verse was smooth while being true to its source...Basically, a perfect motivational guide to being the strongest/best you can be....I thought you killed it...The ending was easily my favorite
Push through mental battle to exhibit a desired goal Release the anger from daily existence through an iron pole Alcohol isn't an option on the weekends, must respect my diet Keeps body replenished with the necessities and leave the rest to science In the end it's all you, stay true and keep the credit Discipline and self betterment, that's the key to aesthetics! Should hang that up on a poster...Might go lift something heavy now haha... Exo: Nailed your concept as well...Just the total opposite of the discipline Dress portrayed in his verse. I really liked how the tone and feel of your verse seemed overindulgent...in the sense that you dropped so many references to junk food/candy/etc...It was great...Plus, the humor added a lot to your verse to propel it to a much more enjoyable level...Closer was a perfect ender...Well done. |
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Posted: 06 March 2014 at 2:14am |
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crazy concept, this was a good read. loved the flow and keep this up guys!
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~Insight The Inspired~
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 06 March 2014 at 3:02pm |
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thanks for the replies fellas
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Posted: 06 March 2014 at 8:56pm |
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yoooo...this was real nice. LOL @ the concept
I thought it was extra extra creative and both of ya'll hit the nail on the head lyrically. DTK I thought your vocab and flow really gave your verse a freshness. The ending to your verse was real dope. Exo yours was solid too man, the whole verse bar by bar kept me reading. Original concept and you both pulled it off strong.
well done.
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