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    Posted: 18 May 2014 at 9:45pm
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Teacher, Present date:

I traveled to teach a lesson to a man at the request of a friend
Disguised behind a shamans mask I had a test for this man
Skepticism vanished and I handed sedatives digested by him
Then met him at the crest of his REM sleep to suppress who I am
Dissected his perspectives and I left him re-invented
And sent a piece of me in the tea that I fed him so I'm deep in his thoughts
When his dream was conjured I talked, reached him via ominous stream of consciousness
His familiar fear was obvious, regardless hes peering onwards, mirrored confidence
My thought pattern walked through his skull, lessons spawned and truth taught 
Until he said, 'I think I know who you are', we both nod and move on.


Student, March 3rd, 2003:

He was three of many things, a Shaman, Medium, and alchemist
And asked me to complete a secret deed which he can help me with
I agreed, at first thought no, but something deep within me shouted yes
A voice within me pleads to be released from all these hellish tests
As he unlatched a metal chest I'd said I smelled the scent of tree bark
With a mortar, pestle, sat and squeezed it till it crumbed into wee parts
Which was thumbed to steep in water of a freshly boiled tea pot
Once I drank a cup he had me lay and fall asleep, calm but feeling nauseous
Queezy thoughts proceed to darkness, breathing equilibrium resolved to equal parts
Eyes open, realness bursts in this pristine garden fabled as Edens purchase
Within I see the work of evil serpents, the demon snake spiral upwards into DNA
Eyes of the snake became two stars, all other light was beamed away
As constellations teamed I laid awake while sleeping and was deep in space
Galactic scenes were made, it showed me endings and I'd seen creation
Saw the head of a large entity spawn which alarmed me
Saw the legs and the arms meet, saw him setup and harden
Saw eruptions in sequence, a rhythm fades into harmony
Our Big Bang was just a thump inside this deities heartbeat
Eyes were bordering my face, he motioned planets to spin
I felt his force of palpitations as the panic sets in
The man then sat in my head and said he'd planned that we met
Laughing, he then expands my understanding which is half of the battle
Grasp of universal actions advancing from a fraction to fractal
As he faded to the blackness of shadows he asked one last action
He whispers one last task and passed the baton and was gone
I said "I think I know who you are", we both nod and move on.
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WHEW.. what the flyin fuck did you smoke to write this piece? Jesus man, the imagery in this piece is what ever artist strives to perfect. The complexity, the intelligent content. An imaginative creation that as a reader you get grabbed into the writing. Fuck the flow, despite it being very good, had some hiccups but who doesn't. I actually enjoyed some ending rhymes, in essence, not rhyming or not rhyming fully. This was just wonderfully constructed and I probably sound like a huge dick rider, but I feel like this is where credit is deserved. The ending was tied in very well. My favorite bar was the relation to the Big Bang to his heartbeat. That bar really was an eye popping to me. What a great read Nigma, this shit is definitely being slept on. Man... 9.3/10
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Damn Nigma, this was crack...
 
This piece was complex from start to finish. As always your imagery was there, but the storytelling was worded so nicely. The rhyme schemes was done effortlessly and gave for an ejoyable read. You're really able to bring solid content to all your topical verses.
 
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Point Blank Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 May 2014 at 2:00am
I love reading your pieces cos the rhymeschemes are always so unpredictable. Some of your concepts are crazy and so well worded. This was a very enjoyable read man, keep it up
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Smoothtung Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 22 May 2014 at 3:18pm
Nigma, my man, what the fuck did you just write? This is the dopest story line I've read in quite some time. Recently your vocabulary has been on a different level, do you sleep with a thesaurus? This was masterfully arranged too, i love your off-rhymes man, love em. This is mad slept on, one my favorite pieces since i been back.
Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Pompus Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 22 May 2014 at 9:26pm
i can't say fire, i think that would take away from this as i don't see a freestyle here, lovely is the word, i knew where you where going with it by the first half, but it took away nothing from it, great journey of images very cool and controlled, both spoken and read with a sense of reflection and melancholy, the only part i can say i didn't agree with in slight is the usage of the word "wee", though aiding in rhyme, it's part of old English, and given there is no other appearance of it, it appears out of place thus cluing it was used specifically for rhyme, get me? in modern era it's used in sarcasm, taunts, or very poor impersonations of the Irish and Scottish, given the tone of this piece, again, slightly out place. with that said, its only due to the standard set by everything else around it that it stands out, seriously, great work, a pleasure to read, thank you
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Great shit. Story telling was on point. Loved the concept as well was very creative. Keep em coming.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote CHAIN Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 May 2014 at 7:59pm
Lol, this was fire, the closer is classic.
I thought you were talking about the devil at first...I dunno.
Something about the story was creepy, ha.

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