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    Posted: 24 September 2007 at 2:41pm
This change of direction became a loss to these wack emcee's!that insists that insects carry diesease!under the leaves from the trees that are green!bite,buzz or sting is the attack of the bee!!when i see,my speech is hot flames spit at 100 degrees!it leads back to the stage and make it seem,that Im Muhammid Ali tryna snap yur neck with 1 punch or 1 slit like freddy in ur dream!Im the lean mean money Maka machine...ill set up a scene!make sure ur toasted with the gleme of da beam!lazer cuts yur waist!at this rate...my make(of the gun) bend yur machine gun back to shape!and then send yur body parts to the dump in a crate!you took the wrong turn for this time!ill make sure ull get shot up like the kids in columbine!combine moonshine with lime and smoke rocks thats refined as white powder define:how else you get wacked with symthoms that fuk up ur spine!directions like passin through intersections!my weopen is metal with the lethel button-im steppin'back n fourth though court,and maybech cars exotic-with the peeling still on it-abboard!but without this cord!ima make sure this car is sport!and sell ponic at the store.while using mastercard at a resort!directions you ask for?which way can i go before the tour! ends with a bored! yawn!on the travel bus eatin with more!kids that i dont trust!FUK THEM I THANK YOU FOR UR SUPPORT!
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agreed... NOVICE

lyric is written in verse form... not prose...

MEANING....

it should look like this...

This change of direction became a loss to these wack emcee's!
that insists that insects carry diesease!
under the leaves from the trees that are green!
bite,buzz or sting is the attack of the bee!!
when i see,my speech is hot flames spit at 100 degrees!
it leads back to the stage and make it seem,
that Im Muhammid Ali tryna snap yur neck with 1 punch or 1 slit like freddy in ur dream!
Im the lean mean money Maka machine...ill set up a scene!
make sure ur toasted with the gleme of da beam!
lazer cuts yur waist!at this rate...
my make(of the gun) bend yur machine gun back to shape!
and then send yur body parts to the dump in a crate!
you took the wrong turn for this time!
ill make sure ull get shot up like the kids in columbine!
combine moonshine with lime and smoke rocks thats refined as white powder define:
how else you get wacked with symthoms that fuk up ur spine!
directions like passin through intersections!
my weopen is metal with the lethel button-im steppin' back n fourth though court,
and maybech cars exotic-with the peeling still on it-abboard!
but without this cord!ima make sure this car is sport!
and sell ponic at the store.while using mastercard at a resort!
directions you ask for?which way can i go before the tour!
 ends with a bored! yawn!on the travel bus eatin with more!
kids that i dont trust!FUK THEM I THANK YOU FOR UR SUPPORT!



try to write with some sense of structure and flow... meaning... dont just jumble a buncha shit together because it rhymes... make sure it fits




Edited by G-Pfeif - 24 September 2007 at 3:45pm
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 September 2007 at 6:31pm
What he ^ said...
 
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Im the lean mean money Maka machine...
 
 
*wonders... have I ever heard THAT a million times on the radio before?*
Spent six months hurtin' who I shoulda been supportin'/
But I was nervous, I was stupid, I was pushin' for abortion/
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