Open Mic: Street Life - FT Chain

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    Posted: 09 August 2008 at 4:38pm

Rameez...


eyo

I'm walkin on the street and looking under ma feat
A blood on the concrete… fresh from the slice of meat
But it can be more extreme when there’s a war scheme
Where 1 screams as blasted ammunition burnin the blood stream
These tragedies are repeated, when political issues rises
ppl are left with poverty and the disease increases
And we see ppl suffering in they’re broken houses
So as the body dies then the hungry mouse lives (eating bodies)
And I ain’t talking abt ghetto or suburb area
I’m talking abt country where it’s easy to get malaria
Where roads are dusty and ppl walkin thirsty coz water’s dirty
Also Plants becomes rusty and everything jus don’t look pretty
And I’m walkin through ghettos where bums makin a problem
Coz all they do is find rich ppls and Robe them
N ppl with wealth jus party a lot and have alcoholic breath
So when they are driving they’re life is always close to death
Looking all over the globe its jus filled with infected bodies
Coz every1 got so much hate they can kill to make a blood sea
Even if we make a poor life rich
It’s like we jus cure another bitch
And I seen dumb MC, jus repeating same shit about streets
Like gun fights n police, boyfriend or girl friend cheats
Coming for a person who got tattoos n looks like freak
and a lady who jus earning to show of her looks n physique
I’m lookin at a road that is never straight but turns
And where ever it leads to u’ll always hate n burn



{words from Chain}


The epitome of watch and learn, always was the quiet one

A sponge of street knowledge that was trained to acquire funds

A lion’s son, lost in a labyrinth

Flossing while sharing his…oxygen with viper lungs

Parentless addicts that were careless made the riots fun

Rebellious till the end,

Friends with the fellas in the pens that will fire guns

I only tried it once

I aimed it at the sky, playing with that 9

Claiming I was wise, but now I’m driving drunk

I liked to wreak havoc, my nigga had a weed habbit

Couldn’t see past it  and I supplied the blunts

Had a nice little plant, had a nice little plan

So I became the man, all them heads used to buy it from

But wells run dry and ummm…

I emptied out some thee bags, and sold it like lah to cunts

Party till the light comes and wake up when the moon’s lit

At the pub pointing at its craters with my pool stick

Counting ‘em in deep thought, my cranium is wounded

My sanity is hurt by this mania of goon shit

Lost too many friendships, regardless of the outcome

I’m partying without them ‘cause arguments will sound dumb

I’m severing them ties, I’m not bothering to smile once

Targeting the foul ones, I offer them the cow dung

Can’t take them serious like officers without guns

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dis is on sum real shit

my fav part is

N ppl with wealth jus party a lot and have alcoholic breath
So when they are driving they’re life is always close to death
Looking all over the globe its jus filled with infected bodies
Coz every1 got so much hate they can kill to make a blood sea

dis shit is true and da type shit i would lisen 2

u got dis on audio
LOVE ME OR HATE ME-ITS UR CHOICE
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thanks for the feed guy.. I'll feed on ya piece soon.. no its not in audio.. but maybe soon..
uppin for more feeds please. if yer reading this peep, even a short comment would be nice..

thank u


Edited by Rameez - 10 August 2008 at 1:25am
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i liked the second verse thought it flowed nice overall a good drop
 
my fav part was
 

I liked to wreak havoc, my nigga had a weed habbit

Couldn’t see past it  and I supplied the blunts

Had a nice little plant, had a nice little plan

So I became the man, all them heads used to buy it from

But wells run dry and ummm…

I emptied out some thee bags, and sold it like lah to cunts

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Rameez - one of the better drops I've ever seen from you. Impressive. I felt where you was coming from, and you got the message across.

Chain - as usual, crazy flow. The opening 4 lines

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The epitome of watch and learn, always was the quiet one

A sponge of street knowledge that was trained to acquire funds

A lion’s son, lost in a labyrinth

Flossing while sharing his…oxygen with viper lungs"

Just - wow. Not exactly brilliant lyrically, but the delivery and flow is perfect. I like the short third line that leads into the rhyme on the fourth matching with 1 and 2. That reads dope, and should this ever become audio, it always sounds cool when spit in that manner.

Wouldn't put you two together to do a collab, but you definitely pulled it off. Chain's flow was dope throughout, following on from what I've mentioned above, and Ram definitely improved.

Props.






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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Point Blank Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 August 2008 at 9:59am
Gotta agree with the others..I was suprised with Rameez' verse..pretty good man, you've been uppin your game alot lately, keep it up. Chain..sick as usual. Rhymes were all over the place
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Counting ‘em in deep thought, my cranium is wounded

My sanity is hurt by this mania of goon shit

 

Chain

Feeling those clever multi's that spit above prob my fav

Ram
 
Easy Tiger, Fuck I couldnt even read your shit 2/3 months ago an now I am actualy feeling your drop man.
I aint saying its some Great thing but I will say at times you were painting a good picture with words an thats elevation man
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I concur with I See Grips...

Nice verses from both of you. I enjoyed the read.


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thanks again for the feed back guys.. and I'll bring much better verses than this.. so stick around.. and expect the best for the best 
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Chain as usual dope as hell..not much else to say

Ram congrats on upping your game as said above
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Like gun fights n police, boyfriend or girl friend cheats
Coming for a person who got tattoos n looks like freak
and a lady who jus earning to show of her looks n physique
I’m lookin at a road that is never straight but turns
And where ever it leads to u’ll always hate n burn
 
 
yo, u really stepped it up alot!  u really brought it, the meaning of the verse, the flow, the bar structure, all dope
 
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thanks chain you were also good.. u had nice rhyming and sick flow.. 
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Overall: rameez came nice, alot of good points but some bad ones too, chain came nice too

Thoughts: Rameez had some good lines and some solid points, but some times the simplicity goes too far ie "things dont look pretty" etc, a couple of times an off line was thrown in which threw off the verse, tho alot of positives, some cool multis, some nice flow and a number of nice lines that made the reader think.
Chain felt like he was just going with the flow on this piece, he really got into the essence of street life which i liked, ram was talking about it from an outsiders perspective, chain went and spit it from the center of the problem, flow and rhymescheme where hot, content wasnt what it usually is imo, have seen better, but still cool.

Things for next time: Chain, just do your thing, you know whats up. Ram, you eleveated alot here, and i feel the main problem now is the language barrier, the way you say things ie... "person with alcholic breath" etc, is not a phrase or how we would phrase something in our language, so it comes off as awkward / child like, if you can get rid of these you will start to elevate tons and get good feed, id also work on more experiences multis at this point, i think you are at that stage.

Nice work, good collab.
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thanks alot woody that was the feed I was looking for.. and u really gave me a good advise..
I guess I need to review more and more b4 I spit.. thanks again

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