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Topic: Fuck vs kleanPosted: 02 May 2013 at 1:05am |
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favourite sport
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Vib.Klean
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Posted: 02 May 2013 at 1:09am |
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fuckoff
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Posted: 02 May 2013 at 2:52am |
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*PAST ONE.. PAST TWO, HE TAKES ON KLEAN..
HE SHOOTS..... ITS IN.. AMAZING... WHAT A TALENT* *THIS BOYS GUNNA BE A STAR, AND HE KNOWS IT* billy big baller, hot shotter, rockin with high rollers an wags used to roll with ballers, shottin rock up on corners of the av' used to, drop for these raw thugs, proper mean cunts he'd seen mugs, gettin lost on the block - he ain gunna be one, he trained hard, found his skill, his touch, n pace, plus he loved the game man, he aint never feel that same rush made a scene on the green, yeah, he was real dope the controll.. youd lose the ball, watchin his feet roll n he'd keep goin, from youth to first team, hes gon be great. lifes good. till the vermin start to emerge from the estate n these peeps on the pipe, always want their piece of the pie draggin at the heels of this kid who dared reach for the sky rose from the dirt, to the fans, he was god when wearin that shirt but is he really earning that merc? he ain gotta care in the world, man are suffering- he fucks his way thru the slutty wag clubbin ring the thugs give him a choice, lose or theyll cut thru his fuckin shins day of the big game, he hears the crowd, shoutin his name he looks down when hes playin, keeps missin his runs soon the crowds gettin nasty screamin 'wake up you cunt' next game he got benched. then in the reserves, he rotted shame all that talent.. had to go and get spotted... |
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Vib.Klean
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 2:24am |
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Fuck off, wit the fastball, you can't even reach it,
heaters too fast, leave you speechless, as a fetus He can't even keep up with the change-up cuz, he been snitchin on his team like Canseco does With chicks he always stayed on 2nd base,since second grade named himself fuckoff,and was steroid-injected with aids Still set in his ways,he knew he was destined to play take success to his grave,and be the best at this game, (expo)) -Fast forward 5 years in his major league debut- *don't ask me....somehow he makes it*(Plot Twist) -Drafted to oakland A's as utility man- *Round 62 2013* Curveball sweeps in at the steepest diamaters. -swing and miss(strike 2)-pitcher laughs like he is a scavenger Fastball zones in at the speed of an acura. He grips his bat hard, but he is an amateur..., -Swings and misses-(strike 3)(umpire tells him to get the fuc*k out of here, he argues with umpire and umpire winds up kicking his ass, then a bench clearing incident occurs in which barry bonds comes out of nowhere and continuously tea bags him until he admits to being involved with Balco) At baseball, he's the weakest of characters, But he wants to hit for averages, and wave at the cameras But billy beane was his manager,said this lame had no stamina through,5 innings, he told him "fuck off", and wasn't standin up. The coaches,wanted to pop fuck,-"this guy should win a oscar" Broke all his bones while divin for a pop up ... But people still love him, This wasn't to tarnish the fact that his fans show admiration by screaming his name in all his at- bats |
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TheSoulDrivenMind
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 2:40am |
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klean took it.
fuck off, i liked your cause you chose basketball. the intro kind of killed it to be honest. the concept was good. but you should have spent more time making the flow better and the rhymes were real off and it was choppy. klean it was ok. you were a seed. now your more like a blooming flower. good shit tho. keep writing. props
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TheSoulDrivenMind
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 2:40am |
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vote :Klean
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TeQuiLaSunRiSe
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 3:28am |
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vote - fuckoff
he had the better rhymes, flow, and creativity vib, you actually had a nice punchline with canseco, but your issue was you were turning it into a battle verse when it was a topical. also, the way you are wording your lines is almost like you have little grasp on the english language bro.
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POP POPPITY WHAT, I Know Yall Aint Poppin At Us
Cuz One or Two Punches Will Leave You TALKIN LIKE SEAN CONNERY DOES
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BIG GAME
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 6:55am |
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Fuck Off,
You had nice flow and rhyming and your story was appealing though for me, it fell apart at the last couple of bars. Vib, You had some funny stuff in there and some nice little plays but I didn't like how ya stopped and started talking twice in the midst of shit. Plus your verse was more of a battle verse than a topical. Overall, Vib your shit was cool in areas (Canseco) and funny in others but it wasn't good on a topical level. V:Fuckoff |
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BIG GAME
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 6:56am |
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Soul, if that is a hate vote because of y'alls little beef right now, that shit aint cool.
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Vib.Klean
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:55am |
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yo big....let him vote man. He liked mine more, and gave an explanation just like you guys did.
i know the topic was "favorite sport", and that was my topic th roughout the battle. no where did i read in any rules th at i couldn't flip that concept and use it to DISS him at the same time. It is still a topical none the less. |
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Trizzy Tre
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 2:02pm |
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Fuckoff - your storyline was cool and your flow was nice, you kept on topic and was able to pull the reader in with the way you were wording your verse. You schemes were solid. klean - honestly this is probably the best I seen from you. I think you had a few decent barz but you were def turning this into a battle verse dissing him then a topical. I do agree with that. As I was reading your verse of thought "oh not a bad punchline" but realized this was a topical. You gotta stick to what the battle is about and stay on topic. If you were looking to just battle up str8 up then you should have done that.
with that being said....
vote - fuck off
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L.S.D
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 4:02pm |
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Klean:
Your verse was kinda good,problem is you attacked your opponent,I did like how you used the nameplay it was dope. Fuckoff: Your verse had good rhymes,and the story was great though but it kinda collapsed at the end Vote:Fuckoff |
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 4:24pm |
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Fuckoff took this with a stronger verse lyrically, conceptually, and structurally in my opinion.
Vib, i think your story-line details halfway through really messed things up for me.. and at times you were actually complimenting fuckoff.. i don't know what the thought process was there but that last bar was kind of wack to me. I'm just being honest, truth is i think you can write.. and i liked that Canseco bar but over-all as a piece this wasn't the strongest I've seen from you. my vote? fuckoff ..and he can go right ahead and do that too
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fuckoff
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 10:54pm |
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vibe your a bigger pussy than i thought. i dont like you anyway - reason i called you out. coz your a bitch. but BEGGING to count a blantant hate vote. lol. do you really think his opinion is valid and neutral when 5 respected members vote the other way?
billy big baller, hot shotter, rockin with high rollers an wags used to roll with ballers, shottin rock up on corners of the av' used to, drop for these raw thugs, proper mean cunts he'd seen mugs, gettin lost on the block - he ain gunna be one, he trained hard, found his skill, his touch, n pace, plus he loved the game man, he aint never feel that same rush made a scene on the green, yeah, he was real dope the controll.. youd lose the ball, watchin his feet roll n he'd keep goin, from youth to first team, hes gon be great. lifes good. till the vermin start to emerge from the estate n these peeps on the pipe, always want their piece of the pie draggin at the heels of this kid who dared reach for the sky rose from the dirt, to the fans, he was god when wearin that shirt but is he really earning that merc? he ain gotta care in the world, man are suffering- he fucks his way thru the slutty wag clubbin ring the thugs give him a choice, lose or theyll cut thru his fuckin shins day of the big game, he hears the crowd, shoutin his name he looks down when hes playin, keeps missin his runs soon the crowds gettin nasty screamin 'wake up you cunt' next game he got benched. then in the reserves, he rotted shame all that talent.. had to go and get spotted... you didnt read. if you think this didnt flow. your mad. ill drop it audio. tell me it didnt flow PUSSY. the fuck do you know. jack. fucking. shit. vibrator.. your wack. believe it. embrace it cunt. coz you are what you are. if you wnna step to me again youll pick up anuvva L. now do one. and just so you know. stay they fuck away from my battles. both you pussy cunts. cause you know fuck all. ive seen your votes vibe. you regurgitate the same shit everyone says. because deep down. you know your fuck all. soul. you gotta problem, drop in our battle pussy and you can catch a loss too. instead of hate voting on all my battles GET FUCKED. fuckin kids man |
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Vib.Klean
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:01pm |
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fuck -off you are such a fucking noob. you fucking won because I didn't "follow the guidelines". my verse killed yours, your shit read like a dyslexic kid wrote it it and NO, you don't know the definition of flow if you think yours was better than mine. Up your writing skills and stop hopping on the vet's dicks. make your own decision and stop going by based on what "respected" people think. Oh yeah, and if you wanna get murked in a text battle, i'm for it, you better make sure you have some better rhymes than the ones i've read from you though. I hate when unskilled lyricists try to act like they have the essence down packed. I hope those votes made you sleep good homie. Cuz from me to you, you got murked.
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TeQuiLaSunRiSe
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:05pm |
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and you were telling Big Game he was being a bitch about losing?
Fucking Hypocrite
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POP POPPITY WHAT, I Know Yall Aint Poppin At Us
Cuz One or Two Punches Will Leave You TALKIN LIKE SEAN CONNERY DOES
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:07pm |
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set it up. noob arse cunt. check your battle score mate. know your place ![]() |
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Vib.Klean
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:10pm |
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tequila hop off Big games nuts,you just mad i spit out the worm that lives within you. set up the battle fuck face, and spare me tequilas swayed vote already.
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:16pm |
![]() fuckin troll. fuck outta here. call me out if you want another L bitch 5-1 FUCK OFF.
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TeQuiLaSunRiSe
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Posted: 03 May 2013 at 11:18pm |
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im not on anybody's nuts you severely retarded goon. go elevate yourself before talkin shit.
And go pick up a dictionary while you're at it you little cunt.
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POP POPPITY WHAT, I Know Yall Aint Poppin At Us
Cuz One or Two Punches Will Leave You TALKIN LIKE SEAN CONNERY DOES
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