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-Que- 
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 Topic: Blunt Force Trauma!!!!Posted: 26 May 2013 at 4:01am |
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You Tailor made to be played! Thats what "the Game" defines
BUT!!! Ain't no "Van Gogh's or Rembrandts" displayed in yo "Frame" of mind just An artist sculptin garbage wit tin cans.....a waste of time You came to dig the archives niggah...I came to rhyme!! BARZZZ!!! Rippin up the common men, Knighthoods gettin bombed again One sided war as if the Romans met the Romulans!! Quantum Zen switches to Quantum sin to stomp again.... My hungry Intellect envelopes your brain to trap your conscience in!!! My MMA .....exclamay ...melee...pave the way Now you BG suckahs reformat what you crave to say!! LeRROOOYYY!!! I'm the master!!Youz a pupil made of paper machee... Brute force kicks make ya trachea spray!!!! No ESCAPE!!! Imma copyright my songs again Cuz BG's peekin thoo windows, a copy pastin peepin Tom again! Bologna Boy! Don't getcha click fucked up....Tell'em you aint the Genius! Youz nervous penis!!...approach me ..I fill the scene with..... Piles of bastards limbs and nerves still makin muscles twitch!! Bloody mouths mumblin muffled shit! Teeth commin out with bubbled spit!!! Double fisted Combos.... shuffle lips , you suffer Crits! Deadly BARRRZZZZZZzz!!!!! Thats how I fuckin hustle BITCH! Call it heinous! Give a Pro ...Cons... that'll cripple Genghis! Shoot holes in The Most wanted that made the Game Famous!! I know .....he breaths ......and eats thru the same anus! Gallagher of vocals....Banana beating to entertain us!! Let meeee.... Git in his Mix!!! Shit in his Kix.... Stir trouble!! Drenchin piss on his cinnamon stix Blow Bubbles of.... Spit on his cheese and Ritz THEN!! Drip ball sweat in his dip he'll serve to his chick!! EEEeeeewwwww!!!! You fuckin Hate me?!? Well then.....Come on Cleatus!! Put on ya Klump suit and Rep like Reince Priebus! I'll bring the "L"'s to your username like signal repeaters gotcha crew holdin vigils for underachievers!! and I....See! You diggin for personals like artifacts! Tryin ta summon the punches but your Ark is cracked! I see you've hidden ya yellow streak, punk, but the Mark is back! You say they bumpin BG on yah block? What Markets that? You wave around quotes like they're magical canes! Still...L.I.'s pickin off your click from a tactical range! Head shots ....meltin thoo your skull and gelatinous brain! Funny Boy.... Mics aint gonna help you get untrapped in the flames! You burn like infections from ya brauds pussy Talkin shit!........ But I never let a fraud push me!! The "Oracle" might give'em all cookies!!! But I got the "ONE" hitter quitter jab for All Rookies!!! |
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Kiki Spirez
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Posted: 26 May 2013 at 9:38am |
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This was some fire. The kind of diss that you don't even quote bars/plays to show someone how vicious it was, you just push the screen to their faces and make them read it. You always come with that aggression man, and this was no exception!
You came to dig the archives niggah...I came to rhyme!! - This had me laughin' to start with  Although if I had to pick my highlight, this shit was on it- I'll bring the "L"'s to your username like signal repeaters gotcha crew holdin vigils for underachievers!! and I....See! You diggin for personals like artifacts! Tryin ta summon the punches but your Ark is cracked! I see you've hidden ya yellow streak, punk, but the Mark is back! You say they bumpin BG on yah block? What Markets that? Murder, but I know you have more, and could make it even more disgusting if you had to. Keep up my man. |
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fuckoff
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Posted: 26 May 2013 at 4:30pm |
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few mismatched multis threw me a lil flow wise, wasnt a fan of the piles down to eeww section, flow was cool n that buti dunno was just a little random haha but thats ya style i guess, would be nice on the mic with the right delivery no doubt. props tho, cool diss.
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Vib.Klean
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Posted: 26 May 2013 at 4:54pm |
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i liked your style here, nice disses in there good use of multis and your vocab was on point. pretty good shit man.
Git in his Mix!!! Shit in his Kix.... Stir trouble!! Drenchin piss on his cinnamon stix Blow Bubbles of.... Spit on his cheese and Ritz THEN!! Drip ball sweat in his dip he'll serve to his chick!! nice flow there |
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Posted: 27 May 2013 at 1:18am |
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I have to say this is one of the better disses that I've read in a while and the flow was just mean in some parts...You already know I'm a huge fan of your style....It's just that raw in your face shit....this whole piece was just full of aggression..You had some serious lines in here but this part made me laugh out loud tho...
"Git in his Mix!!! Shit in his Kix.... Stir trouble!! Drenchin piss on his cinnamon stix Blow Bubbles of.... Spit on his cheese and Ritz THEN!! Drip ball sweat in his dip he'll serve to his chick!!"--- haha this was funny as hell overall this was a a dope piece you just had a mix of everything....This was dope Que |
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IZIAH
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Posted: 27 May 2013 at 2:38am |
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ahh, well yah dissin my crew there Que. so fuck you!
and vib, i know yah tellin tha truth but he dissin our leader and crew. we gotta react bro.
and here we go, now i've got beef. (i havent had beef since i joined) LOL!!!
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~Insight The Inspired~
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J504
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 4:04pm |
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Holy shit lol
This was some lethal shit right here. Of course the scripting is on point as always but the creativity of the punches and the multies was just whole next level. Sick shit right here, brother! |
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 5:03pm |
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Que is my main monster
Make this an li fact Opening just sounds like it means business straight off Dig the archives/I came to rhyme..damn str8 Romans meet romulans was an accurate comparison imo Shitt eat and breathe thru tha sane anus....oh dear ha ha another accurate comparison |
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CHAIN
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 5:04pm |
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Beast shit, I ‘copped‘ this the day it ‘came out‘ but Ive been slackin on my feed game.
I don't even care about the diss, its the barz, lol @Iziah; that's the wrong way to go, smh. You‘re a good dude but no. lol |
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IZIAH
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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 5:08pm |
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lol chain. i know what yah mean.
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Split Eight
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Posted: 30 May 2013 at 8:43am |
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The flow in the first section was unreal dude. Nice to see you writing again, you kinda dropped off he net for a bit. Might come back to quote but this girl thinks I borrowed her phone to call my parents and leave a message (laptops fucked long story)
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far as I know we've been blacklist, for as long as the Earth rotate on a twenty-three degree axis
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Neek
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Posted: 30 May 2013 at 12:48pm |
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hola amigo, hope life is treating you well.
I enjoyed this piece and not because it was a "diss". you have a very extensive use of your exquisite vocabularly...so bravo for that sir. generally, I find most open mics use alot of crutch words, such as "dope"... "shit"... things of this nature. and even when you use these crutch words you make sure you intertwine them with something else to carry the flow and negate the predictability of it. such as this section here: Piles of bastards limbs and nerves still makin muscles twitch!! Bloody mouths mumblin muffled shit! Teeth commin out with bubbled spit!!! Double fisted Combos.... shuffle lips , you suffer Crits! it flows well and doesn't rely on the 'crutch' words to create the flow, which I truly appreciate. I would have to say my favorite line is this: You say they bumpin BG on yah block? What Markets that? I personally love lines of simplicity, the setup was nice as well... the hide/yellow/mark.. I "see" what you did there. but this was definitely my favorite line. overall, I enjoyed it. keep doing your thing and helping other cats out with your honest feedback/critique. |
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