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Brotha Goose 
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 Topic: Elevations from RevelationsPosted: 12 January 2014 at 4:24am |
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Fuck that, ima fade me a nation Struck back, for the alienation No patience, for my bravado? Fake shit, go Facebook Geraldo Sure follow, all the directios False inspection gives me erections And my perspective lives for directives Screw the collective! Im sculpt'n shivs for all non believers The Pulpit fibs, Jesus like, "Leave it to Beaver?" Yeezus scream'n out... "She's a deceiver!" Nah dawg, she's just a Kim Watch the frog play'n Kar-dash-ian! And I lash at friends.... But in the morning, we be boys again Dudes poised, can't tell Boyz 2 Men Im annoyed, you could times it by ten I got rhymes to lend...ya I'm pack'n plenty I drop funnies, got dudes Buggin like Bunnies See Goose crew, we out make'n money While these dummies drunk play'n rummy Im on the road like, 24/7... Whore house in Texas, bet im in heaven I roll an eleven, cuz shit be a crap shoot Foo's with poop chutes lookin to cap you Ima attack truth, but who's gonna listen I got tracks in booths, so who's look'n to diss Syn?! Edited by Brotha Goose - 12 January 2014 at 4:51am |
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Brotha Goose
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Posted: 13 January 2014 at 5:11pm |
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People stay starve'n a Brotha
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J-Scott
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Posted: 13 January 2014 at 5:20pm |
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This was tight, flowed nicely. Felt like it should be audio soon? Would like to see how you spit this. Definitely used your multis here good detail. Nice work brotha
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J-Scott
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Posted: 13 January 2014 at 5:28pm |
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RedNosePit
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Posted: 14 January 2014 at 9:16am |
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This was good. Flow is on point. Vocabulary isn't too flashy but I am actually one who doesn't mind that.
A few good multi's thrown in which undoubtedly helped flow, along with those short bars. This does seem possibly audio oriented but either way this seems to fall a bit short. Your line count is fine but with the shorter bars I guess it just leaves us hungry for more. I do think the last couple drops you've done barely scratch the surface of your capabilities as a writer... Not to say they are weak...because that's not what I'm saying.. But it'll be interesting to see you unleash one day and just go ham. I'll definitely peep it. If you ever wanna collab I'm just a pm away G. Stay up. 1. |
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Manc
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Posted: 14 January 2014 at 9:22am |
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Annnnnd another one lol
See, this is the kinda shit where you can see the 'audio head' in you showing through. Definitely one for the booth bro. I loved your choppy rhyme scheme ere - gave it a WuTang type'a feel. And that last bar was fire!!! Definitely feelin' this one |
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Titu
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Posted: 14 January 2014 at 11:26am |
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Dam that was good, don.
Flow was smooth for me. It was a nice read overall. I loved that No patience, for my bravado? Fake shit, go Facebook Geraldo Sure follow, all the directios False inspection gives me erections Yo Closer was also dope. Stay blessed my man.. |
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 14 January 2014 at 12:26pm |
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And my perspective lives for directives
Screw the collective! Im sculpt'n shivs for all non believers The Pulpit fibs, Jesus like, "Leave it to Beaver?" Yeezus scream'n out... "She's a deceiver!"and.. "Im on the road like, 24/7... Whore house in Texas, bet im in heaven I roll an eleven, cuz shit be a crap shoot Foo's with poop chutes lookin to cap you" those were hot man. plus the 'boyz 2 men' bar was tight as well. another great piece man, when I check the OM forum you're name is sitting up there near the top of my must read list. |
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Though you never even had the chance to witness it |
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Brotha Goose
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Posted: 14 January 2014 at 6:30pm |
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Appreciate that fam
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Posted: 14 January 2014 at 6:56pm |
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Good hit goose, like the intensity would make a good audio
Haven't peeped your tracks but this was a good read... Keep'm coming |
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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