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    Posted: 29 January 2006 at 1:16pm
its a game a chance an its got me doubtin,
got myself climbing these steps like mountains,
on a paper chase, im silent and im still doubtin,
signed up for a poker match n made it an outin, 
even before i reach the landin, covered in sin,
wish i could discard fear, take it on the chin,
still climbing, rehearse my game pullin casual grins,
shits in deep, herd theyre the type to pull violins... 

how many more steps to the 66th floor then to the 6th door?
all this jus to pay debts, no time to think jus more steps more steps,

thought i was the type to 'just' deal with things,
needed more money so i pawned mothers rings,
theyre waitin, sitting round table like others kings,
jus one match, no strings, if i fuck this up ill be pickin up my wings
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 January 2006 at 1:27pm

Kinda deep... 666 bit was smart... Thing is, these ranks are primarily for separatin' the battle ranks... so though this is a big step in the right direction I'ma have to say NOV for now

Uppin' on Ice an' ILLA

. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 January 2006 at 1:40pm
U already know I ranked him ama...its on Illa
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 January 2006 at 6:03pm

Mackie... you're a Novice...  Nice flow and rhyme-scheme... but simple rhymes... and you have a problem sticking to a topic...  You need to focus your writing...  Be more complex...  Make your imagery deeper... punchlines harder... or rhymes longer and more original...

Adios...

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 January 2006 at 6:23pm
I actually told him to write the verse like that...that was the topic
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 January 2006 at 12:15pm

Hmm too simple for me...

Im wid O.. Novice

 

 



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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 January 2006 at 12:19pm
Novice it is..

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