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    Posted: 13 March 2007 at 8:03pm
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-The Palestinians (used to) blow up buses in Israel
-UN- United Nations- America always ignores it before going to war
-His email's spongebob something
-That split U is from the Greek alphabet



Salut...

You just got to look at this kid to know he fails with cusses
His shit's more unpopular than Arabs on Israeli buses
Can't take this dude serious...you'll be sonning, you say?
You just got to look at his open-mics to see he's running away
All LA figures you're wack, son,
My hits couldn't bypass UN if they were American military action
He'll delay to look cool, but when I spray this rook falls
UN couldn't kick it with me if we were playing football
Dude, even when I can't be bothered, my slapping torments
Only time you'll press vinyl is when you packing a tent
This stupid wack thinks he'll dent? When he gets smacked, he'll repent
After this he's gonna wish he gave up rapping for Lent...

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I don't know why UN's steppin' when he knew that I key best
'Cos he's the worst fuckin' member in a crew full of rejects
I'm chewing this G's text, I mean you can tell he can't flow
When you see his shameful record with 6 L's in a row
This ain't the Spanish inquisition but I'll burn ya alive
I got him stallin' in this battle like he's learning to drive
It's a shame, dude...your crew's like 'UN wack? He sure isn't',
Remove the blinkers...U's skill's decreasin' like Iraqi tourism
I attack and cause schisms, literally split your soul in two
It's clear why your email's 'spongebob', 'cos I'm putting holes in you
Kid, D control your crew...your whole squad's fighting is weak
'Cos I stay splitting U as if I'm writing in Greek
I'll give this tyke a defeat when I strike him with heat
Have him bouncing from this clash like I set light to his feet
Dude must have a deathwish, dunno why he thought he's winning
Only time he'll see 4 (wins)'s when my hits distort his vision
Rain down low-blows on this kid until his groin is hurting
'Cos UN ain't been clowned this bad since he went to join the circus...



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* Sparta backwards equals "at raps"..Sparta sucks..sucks at raps..
** spartan men had to escape the dormitory at night to have sex with their wife's and were punished if caught.
***Spartans threw unfit childern or those not able to fight off that mountain...
****In the what are you listening too thread he was listening to avenged sevenfold..."City of Evil" is their CD and "betrayed", "trashed and scattered" are songs on that CD...
Anything else just ask....
Good drop Sparta...
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Stop! what you trying to pull that drop was bull
At first I thought it was another one of your topicals
You can't kiss the win cause your punches would miss again
Must have been "just for fun" but ain't spartans about discipline?
Dope? if he kissed my pen then he might pack words
Why Sparta and suck go together even if Sparta is backwards*
Your topicals make me think you a nerd whose out of luck
Stay in your rock, i'll punish you when you try to fuck**
Competition, face it sparta sucks n' doesn't pass a threat
Why keep rappin? when you so good at typin the alphabet!
Only thing you beat me at is typing fast, but try to move me
Cause no one's seen a big hit from Sparta till the 300 movie
After this you'll regret that key and the mention of my crew
How V full of rejects when Point is above you?
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Talking about my email, so what? i ain't acting hard
I'll be spongebob while you "sleepin in dirt" like Patrick Star
I'll top this prick cause like the rabbit you can't take my "trix/tricks"
Pickin a good verse from you is like grabbin olives with chopsticks
I run around you leaving you spinning in curves
And lately, the only thing Sparta touch is Iranian nerves
This kid is a perv making kids cry for help less he try himself
This verse is like me throwing you off Mt. Taygetus myself!***
Just add another loss i mean this kid came out talking bout lent
And to run over Sparta's tracks" is like "retards in cross country events"!
I ain't content till i leave Sparta tattered in "city of evil" to be shattered
Should feel "betrayed" since his songs left him "trashed and scattered"****
Plus who has ever heard of tours in Iraq? stuff like that hurt ya
And you won't handle the "title/tidal" like poor surfers
A whore with no ammunition, save all that whining for politicians
Like 911 you suspected to be a big controlled demolition!
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This Is Tighter Than I Thought It Would Be...Ill Do A Big Explained Vote Tomorow
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Sparta - Opener Was Good, Strong Punch. Next Bar Was Good. Next Bar Was Played, But I Like What You Did With It...Made It More Original. Next Bar, Werent Really Feeling It.Next Bar Was Average, Multies Seemed A Tad Forced.Next Bar Started Off Poor, 'This Stupid Wack' Makes No Sense To Me. I See What Your Sayin, Just Didnt Word It Right. In The End, The Lent Punch Was Nice, But Not Really Personal. Crew Full Of Rejects Thing Was A Nice Play, Fuck You For Usin It Tho Lol.Next Bar Was Ok, Had No Real Punch Tho.Next Bar, Werent Really Feelin It.Next Punch Was Nice. LMAO @ Spongebob Punch, That Was Hard Hitting. Ur Best Bar So Far ; I Was Expectin Lots Of Hard Hits Like That, But You Seem To Have Came Kinda Weaker In This Battle Compared To Your Usual Standards. Next Bar, Didnt Get The 'D Control Your Crew' Thing...Unless D = Dynasty. Anyway, Nice Punch With The Greek Writin. Didnt Like The Next Bar. Next Bar Was Ok. Closer Was Nice. Overall, Not As Good As I Thought It Would Be, But You Had A Couple Of Shots That Stood Out To Me, Like The Spongebob And Writin In Greek One. Nice Flow, Some Good Multies, Not As Personal As Most Of Your Other Verses. Could Have Came Harder. 7.5/10

UNLM - Werent Feelin The Opener. You Need To Come Out Of The Blocks With A Strong Punch To Set The Mood For The Rest Of The Verse, But You Didnt Do That :(. Next Bar, Nothin Special.As For The Next Bar, The Setup Line Was Weak, Somethin You Need To Work On Like I Said, But The Concept Of The Punch Was Nice, Jus Maybe Needed To Be Worded Better.Next Bar Was Dope, Again Could Have Been Worded Better, Like 'Dejavu for you coz ya get punished for tryin to fuck' Or Somethin,But Still A Pretty Nice Punch. Next Bar Was Ok, Would Have Been Good If You Had MAde A Punch Out Of It Rather Than Stating That He Is Jus Good At Typin The Alphabet. Next Bar Was A Strong Hit, Really Feelin That Bar. LMAO @ The Next Bar. Type Of Bar I Try To Come With, To Clown People. This Was A Really Strong Flip And VERY Effective. Same With The Next Bar...That Was Killer. Again, You Flipped His Bar And Clowned Him. Dope. Next 3 Bars were Good, Lol @ Retards. Next Bar Was Pretty Good, Nice Personal coz He Likes Avenged Sevenfold.Next Bar, Ok Punch. Didnt Like The Closer. Its Always Nice To Close On A Strong Punch To Seal It Off, But You Came A Bit Loose In The Last Few Bars. Overall, This Was Amazin From Your Standards, MUCH Harder Than I THought You Would Have Came. You Definately Put Alot Of Work Into This, Done Your Research Too, And I Was REALLY Impressed With This. Patrick Star And The Bar About Me Were Dope...Like I Said Your Setups And And Flow Could Do With A Little Boost, But Overall This Was Dope. 8.5/10

As A Battle This Was Very Tight, Both Had A Couple Of Very Strong Punches, But I Feel UNLM Took This From My Point Of View. Probably Coz His Style Reminds Me Of Mine, Therefore Its Obvious Ima Like It. Tho I Have To Admit, If He Didnt Make Some Of Them Strong Flips, And This Was A Blind Drop Battle, There Probably Would Have Been A Different  Ending. Nevertheless, He Took The Advantage Of Dropping Second And Done Exceptionally Well With It. Very Impressed. Props To Sparta Too, This Was A Very Good Battle. Lol @ Me Waffling On...Ill Stop Now.

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iight here's the breakdown:

Sparta: lol, opener was dope in all aspects, great opener. 2nd bar again was good, flow, punch, personal all relevant and nice. next bar was heat, another good bar. wasn't really feeling the 4th bar, although the flow and play were nice, just seemed a little played. still decent though. again, wasn't feeling the next bar, either. it seemed forced, and the flow was off a little. way to pick it back up on the 6th bar, though. good flow helped by multi's and a decent play, good bar. 7th bar was a hard punch that landed nicely, i liked the directness and aggression here. more of the same on the next bar, just another clowning punch that hit, well done. 9th bar wasn't much of a punch, more filler than anything. the play was ok, but really irrelevant. 10th bar was similar to the last, not much of a punch. the flow is good and the play is iight, but you gotta keep hitting him. lol @ spongebob play, actually worked nicely, i liked this bar. DAMN, writing in greek play is fucking killer, setup and flow were both nice too, great bar. 12th bar has good flow and the multi's are nice, but that's about it here. next bar was ok, kind of a reach to make the play work, but it was ok. to be honest, i wasn't feeling the closer very much. i see what you're trying to get at and it DOES kind of work, but i just didn't feel it. overall, was a good verse with more highlights than downsides, a couple of really killer bars, but did have some filler bars and miss-worked ideas.

U.N.L.M.: lol, decent flip on your opener. not much of a hit, but it worked ok for what it's worth. the setup on the 2nd bar was horrible, but the punchline was ok. punch wasn't hard, though. again, the 3rd bar's setup was horrible and even a little forced, but the punchline was ok. could've been a great punch/ flip but you didn't use it effectively enough. 4th bar was garbage, regardless of however you try to explain it, didn't like it. 5th bar was ok, could've been used better but still sort of worked. ha, nice 6th bar, though, good job. flow was nice enough and the play worked, good job. 7th bar, good flip, that's about it. next bar was Dope, good flip and play, landed here. 9th bar was ok, play was nice and somewhat relevant but didn't hurt him much if at all. damn, next bar works well, good punch. lol @ the mt. taygetus play, good idea that could have been great but only worked a little bit. 12th bar was a decent flip at best, with a mediocre play. was kind of a clever idea the way you put the songs into the 13th bar to flip as a diss, but it wasn't much of a hit. next bar was iight, cool play, but the setup was pretty weak, especially for a flip. wasn't feeling your closer, either. should've been worked better into a killer punch but the way you worded it just didn't work for me. overall it was a decent verse, had a couple of really nice bars, but had a lot more downside to your verse than Sparta did.

my vote goes to Sparta

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Sparta � nice verse, opener was alrite, good multis but didn�t hit too big IMO, liked the next bar, good hit, mulits nice aswell. Next bar was alrite. Sort of like the first few decent shot, but nothing spectacular. Next bar wasn�t feeling it, wordplay was alrite but the hit wasn�t good. Next 2 bars were alrite, decent flow and rhyming but no real good shots. LOL at crew full of rejects line, that�s a good personal. Next bar had potential, but didn�t hit hard as I thought it would. Multis are well used throughout this piece, liked the learning to drive line, think ive seen some variation of it before tho. Nice rhyming and hit in Iraqi tourism line. Liked the spongebob line, good personal, and well worded. Wow at � I stay splitting u� line , that� was sweet. Next line had good multis, but no real hit. Next bar was ok, liked the closer aswell.

 

Overall , multis used nicely, flow was decent, a lot of creativity, maybe slightly inconsistent, some real hard shots, I spliiting u and spongebob, then some weak ones aswell.

 

UNLM- nice opener, flow slightly off, but was decent shot. Next line was another ok shot. Next line was average, not a big fan of reverse name plays, but that�s just me. Lol, next line about Spartans was alrite, nothing special, but flows good. Next line was a good shot, but could have been worded better, to make it really personal. LOL!, at 300 lol, was waiting for this, nicely worded this time, flow was good and hit hard, coz he has been on bit of losing streak. Next bar was nice flip, firstly I thought it wasn�t, but 2nd time I laughed. Flow was good in first section. Patrick star was nice, good shot. Olive with chopsticks was alrite. Spartan lines maybe getting overused, wih Iranian nerves, this in another battle with less Sparta shots wud hit nicely, but more and more Spartan shots makes them hit slightly less IMO. Next line was alrite, more Spartan tho, maybe mix it up abit. Next line was alrite. Trashes scattered lin was good� flowed nicely. Tidal line was ok, nothing major. Closer was dope, good flow and great hit.

 

Overall- flow was great, lots of punches, good solid personals, a lot of nameplays, verging on too much IMO, but a great battle verse. Lines lik the closer and 300 were sick.

 

Im struggling to pick here, spartas was more creative with good multis, slighty inconsistent however. And UNLM�s was great, , more perosnals, harder personals, but overused Spartan lines. Think flow was a tie.

 

Really close, but verse I enjoyed more was UNLM, so ill give him my vote, but on another day reading this,vote could have went to Sparta, im expecting this to b a 5-4 battle , nice verses.

 

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Cause no one's seen a big hit from Sparta till the 300 movie
 
^^...i used that already....the same way...basically
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Yeah, and the sparta/at raps was used by Ikon...oh well
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cuz the last time sparta won a battle..wuz in the 300 movie!!
 
My line was about Sparta being a big hit...as in the movie being a big hit on screen selling lots of tickets and crap...so it's a little different IMO...Just clearing that up.....it would have been nice if you voted Cry
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im gonna vote..
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Sp�rta... attempts at multies improved the flow... but did not result in effective disses...  Personals were good... but generic punches could have been harder...
 
UNLM... rhymes were inconsistent...  Some wordplay was played but worded differently...  Most flips were good... though some just referenced your opponent's verse...
 
Vote: Sp�rta...
 
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Thanks for that vote...2-2..uppin for more votes

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Nice battle to read...

Sparta- came nice as usual, but you used many generic lines though which left you open to still lose the battle though they did all land... The nameplays were dope... the personal hits were good, but werent great... could have used them better imo... For example, the runaway line could've been worded better to me... A solid drop overall nontheless

UNLM surprised me here... The flips were killer, and the verse was more personal than sparta's. In a battle like this, I felt the personals gave you the edge in this battle. Your wordplays werent as strong as sparta's, but they werent much weaker (on a overall perspective). The Patrick and the Point Blank line = how flips should be done. Made me actually laugh...

Good battle... sparta came at his "B+" grade mode to me, and UNLM hit 'em wit' a "A-". Shit was close, but my personal preference is dope used personals, which makes for a more direct verse...

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p.s. yes, I did use the sparta/ atraps line before... Only thing I really wasn't feelin' about unlm's verse, but it was used a lil differently so it wasnt enough to ruin the rest of a good verse...
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I read these verses a couple times.. I honestly had trouble deciding... Sparta you came with hard hits but they were generic, you had a dope flow through out the choris wich i was fealing, mixed up the rhyme scheme to wich was dope. The Multis were good and on point. Some good punches but there were few personal punches ( wich imo hit A LOT hard ) Like the runaway punch was a good 1...
 
UNLM ... Surpised me... I didn't think you had it in you. You had a couple good personals ( Linked ones ) You must've done your home work or googled Spartin times cuz you new a lot about this ( or you passed grade 10 social studies wich is spartin time ) and those were very effective. You could have had more multies and your flow was iffy
 
Vote UNLM I think he took it with personal punches. Although sparta you did come hard but I think you could of thrown more personals in there ( wich i know your capable of for suuure )
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4-2.....more votes? Hug
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