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    Posted: 09 December 2007 at 3:43pm

"Some say that a lie kills, yet sometimes the truth alone is punishme
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...Insight...

Situations where truths never spread, it's no surprise that we ask
President bush for the REAL reason, our solders died in iraq
Countless attempts at expressing wishes, that the silence is broken
But no reply is given, it's clear only the violence has spoken
Truth becomes Punishment, never wanna put em down
Like when ya twenty stone girl, questions if she's lookin' round
Debates whether she's covering up the camel toe in new spedo's
Aint gun say shit, you aint gettin another girl you NEED those!
Why's daddy leaving us, why's that man got a shovel as he uses dirt
The conclusions clear, an old urban legend that the truth'll hurt...

...My story...

For years iv searched for the truth, for the reasons you left
But for years i was lied, truth was hidden i believed your the best
Deceived like the rest, mother didn't wana hurt a child
But the difference between past events and todays versions wild
Up until the age of fifteen i believe you'd walked for the best of us
Never discovered the truth till i witnessed scars on her chest from cuts
Questioned how they was made, i forced a reply
Explained she was showered with boiling water...didn't want a daughter thats why
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You found out she was pregnant and tried to force the abortion

Than the truth was revealed, you didn't walk you was pushed
And that you swing fists so hard...everytime you'd talk she would shush
The 'perfect' father id once believed i had was only a vision
The feelings for you i once had vanished, i was lonely n missing
Hard to accept you wasn't a man despite the cheers
Still tryna fight my fears, which on my pillows id write in tears 24
Each drop spelling out the words "revenge is the key" fight back
I learnt you'd steal my baby food money, to feed habits n buy crack
Why that? I search from answers but you never write back
So now ill bite back, take this dynamite of emotions and ignite that
Though i put the facts of what you done strangely to use
I now forever live in fear ill turn out the same, thanks to the truth

...Always thought i wanted to know...truth's punishment..

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 December 2007 at 6:07pm

Dope verse...flow was good throughout...story was nicely discribed...overall was a deep verse wit good emotion...keep up man

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very nice verse kay- flowed very well and also had good emotion.

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shit, the emotion was greatly expressed...lyrical point of view, it was written very well and the details and storytellin was on point...very enjoyable read...u never cease to express yaself deeply in these kinda pieces, and readin them really catches my attention alot...can catch some real inspiration from ya writin man...nice shit...
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Props, thanks guys
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