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Freeda5thDawg
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Topic: Three 16'sPosted: 07 January 2008 at 3:03pm |
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Let us begin – Another moment giving something potent- -
Dump opponents under oceans from the flows I’ve sunken boats with- - The tongue enrolled with lungs exploding tons of soldiers- - It’s been blunted, soaked in blood and holds a gun component- - It’s bucked with force or swung a sword or struck with storms and… Busted more than any nut to torture any fuck who’s blowing- - A gust combusting torches – A lust to crush your skulls in- - I’m such a fucking torque to rush disgusting torrents…flushing your shit- - It’s also done the justice to adjust a crushed emotion- - The plush of gold I brush ya soul with dusts it gorgeous- - It comes in doses of a Dutch I rolled with love so smoke it… With a bud or homie, someone lonely, trust it’s worth it- - I hope it…shows you such devotion of condolence- - Cause son, I wrote this when the sun arose above the roses- - The young and hopeless will become the chosen ones to hold this… One love the Lord gives cause it’s in us to corrupt as poets- - My words can piece a broken heart – If need be, shatter it- - The catalysts that brings peace or leave seeds scattered in… The deep sea – Drowning with the reefs, knees paddling… To seek streams out but found the links clinked at the kicks- - My teeth leaks hazardous disease cleaved at the lips- - The gaseous laxative attack defeats weak kats to bits- - ...Crash between the mean streets fast with this… Spat rap - That consists of green leave cannabis- - The beam squeezed magnum spits obscene heat rapidness- - Crack and split the back and let the spleens bleed mad liquids- - Fuck the passionate theatric scenes – Please, lather it… With cree-py madness from the qui-ja’s additives- - The maddest kid, that insists you keep me out of this- - A dream team’s masochist who deep-ly acts as if… This ink re-captures pasts of each G at the tip- - As it stabs a gift like that of bee stings atcha grip- - On second thought - I ain't said enough to get the point across- - Ya joints is soft - Hoisted with the poisoned dropped- - I moist it off - One day they'll appoint a boss... Who knows the cause - When they flipped the game - Like the coin was tossed- - Salty acts - With the wackest flavors put the soy in sauce- - It's all ya fault how underground is seeing that the soil's clogged- - I ain't the boy that falls - I charge with gruesome acts and burn- - The dude who adds the hurt in ruthless massacres- - And now that rap has turned into the wrong direction- - I guard the lessons for the legends in this long depression- - The godly sessions in the palm with pen encrypted detriments- - Equipped with weapons within every lyric excrement- - A villainous intent defends my wicked temperament- - As sentences descend in cinders, penmanship is excellent- - Spitting pestilence in this edition - End existence, exit clips… Enters in intestines in the sense of mental hits– - Come test my shit... |
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 07 January 2008 at 3:12pm |
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Naaaasttty piece freeda, sick with the multies (as always) vocabulary used is extensive. Great read. probably one'a my favs now. shits painted a picture. Opener was siick. the end of 1st verse was crazy good. keep it up I'll be waitin to read the next one!
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dalinquent
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Posted: 07 January 2008 at 3:43pm |
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yo, i must agree...The flow was near flawless throughout this joint...3 of the dopest 16s i've read in a while...keep it up
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 07 January 2008 at 3:58pm |
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thanks alot u both...really much appreciated...
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DressToKill
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Posted: 07 January 2008 at 5:02pm |
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Definently really hot..Multies were flying right out there with your vocab..kinda stunning actually you really portrayed your talent well here Free..Nice Man |
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The original comeback kid
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Fatal
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Posted: 07 January 2008 at 7:06pm |
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...Dopeness....
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Posted: 07 January 2008 at 9:30pm |
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Not much I can say that hasn't already been said, flow was dope and so was the content.
Here are my favorite bars, one from each verse I hope it…shows you such devotion of condolence- - Cause son, I wrote this when the sun arose above the roses- - This ink re-captures pasts of each G at the tip- - As it stabs a gift like that of bee stings atcha grip- - And now that rap has turned into the wrong direction- - I guard the lessons for the legends in this long depression- - |
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Posted: 12 January 2008 at 9:29pm |
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hmm, enjoyed it and didnt enjoy it, i know it "flows well", but i found it hard to say, like i couldnt imagine anyone rapping it yano, more like poetry, i appreciate the skill its takes to rhyme and multi rhyme and make it sound good, some lines didnt make a whole lotta sense to me but i suppose they dont have to, nice piece overall.
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 13 January 2008 at 5:12pm |
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which lines aint make sense, cuz i never settle for that kinda content...and yes it can be rapped....thanks for the feed everyone...
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Posted: 14 January 2008 at 9:36pm |
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yo bro....shit was ill..of course u kno this. Good shit
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