Open Mic: New Song - "When you Cry"...

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    Posted: 06 July 2008 at 10:52am
Song ill hopefully be recordin', heard the beat, and shit was catchy and seemed easy enough to ride, so ill give it a go, if i can get cool edit to do its job lol, wanted to do a freestyle piece, but this beat would only work for an emotional piece..

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=730316   .....Beat = Be Major - When you cry...

(Hook - Pre recorded on beat)
fear tha thoughts
when you cry
cause you know your wrong
when you cryyyy…
when you feel ya thoughts
when you cry…
cause you…..

when I first saw you, yo I thought it’d be different
tha kissing, tha love, it felt like nothing was missin’
but then everything I done, I hadda get ya permission
cant live without you, girl, but you cant stop me from living
so I said lets take it eassssy, didn’t mean ta upset ya
couldn’t do it face to face, so I wrote you a letter

it said things’ll get better, n’ ill be next to you soon
Can’t compare you to others, you on a different tune
can never stay away, cause you got that smile
that’s got me thinkin’ of aisles and you havin’ my child
ano its been a little while, but the heart grows fonder
goes stronger for you, the one that its fixated on ta..
been thinkin’ of ya, on some lonely nights
should I go home tonight, shit my homies try
to get me to come to my senses, claim you enticing

shit even sometimes, I wonder If im doing tha right thing….

fear tha thoughts
when you cry
cause you know your wrong
when you cryyyy…
when you feel ya thoughts
when you cry…
cause you…..

see the situation escalated to a difficult place
when we first talked I thought that this would be fate
but on that date, it seems two forces at work
one working for love, the other preserving tha hurt
maybe if choices had changed, it would have never be became
something that drained every ounce from ya veins
but we had some good times, yeah that I know
we was cruising in tha beamer, ridin’ it low
our love was blooming, aint no hidin’ it so
and we both puttin’ in tha work , wernt depriving it growth
but then the dedication went and the separation came
never thought we’d part ways, but destinations change
everything stayed the same, but maybe they shoulda moved
could’ve tried harder, theres nothing I wouldn’t do
but I felt the pressure flyin’, so I felt I’d best resign
cause I jus’ wasn’t feelin’ this at the present time.. sorry…



fear tha thoughts
when you cry
cause you know your wrong
when you cryyyy…
when you feel ya thoughts
when you cry…
cause you…..

now hold up, stop, we’ve had our time apart
we all have a voices and mines in my heart
sayin’ we had some good times, I wont say we didn’t have
I aint saying you didn’t love me, cause I was definitely gettin’ that
didn’t feel what it was deemed to be, seemed lik a dream ta me,
cause me n’ you fitted together so seamlessly
but why then, turn, aint even given a chance
I envisaged the dance, givin’ you kisses’ romance
now I don’t want you to cry, it aint me, I do try
cause the last thing that I wanted was to ruin two lifes
but were moving apart, maybe thru from the start
can I stay with you?, even if it aint true to my heart
cruelly bizarre, we were locked in this fatal attraction
two never say I love, thinking’ they would retract it
it just didn’t seem like something id want to say to another
but was it perfect at tha time, if we aint gonna stay wit eachother?
so many questions I wonder, would they ever be answered
n’ if I ever got the chance would I take em or pass em’


fear tha thoughts
when you cry
cause you know your wrong
when you cryyyy…
when you feel ya thoughts
when you cry…
cause you…..


yo it aint about that and it aint about this
it aint about tha sad times, or that first kiss
its about could I love you, for then and forever
but it aint jus’ up to me, I cant say the chances are never
so we’ll just have to see how it goes, hopefully it all’ll work
can our lives ever be the same, when we fall in love?…
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problem one - 3rd verse 18 lines instead of 16, first bar of third line should be changed to "and it just so happens that mine in my heart" to help ouy flow..

yeah.. lol
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 06 July 2008 at 12:19pm
Woods, this was hot....flowed good through out and was a nice switch up from the normal shit you do.

see the situation escalated to a difficult place
when we first talked I thought that this would be fate
but on that date, it seems two forces at work
one working for love, the other preserving tha hurt

^Dope

Great drop woods...i thought it was a real cool read.

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kay B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 06 July 2008 at 3:39pm
Dope....Would love to hear this on audio so make sure ur ass actually gets round to doing it and doesn't just sit watching weezy on youtube lol nah...this was dope content made it a great read and had alot of emotion in it and had a great feeling...flow was perfect, alot of quote ables so wont point them out just overall a great drop
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thanks guys.. props
 
and audio wise.. lol, it should get done, if i can get cool edit to work... but dont be expecting it to be good lol..
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We never do LOL

p.s  get on msn ffs, when i dont wanna speak to u you bug me, when i do your never on! FIX UP!
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