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Freeda5thDawg
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Topic: What I've Come To See (Simple 3 16's)Posted: 14 July 2008 at 11:17pm |
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When the time comes...I’ll be the face of the streets
Making it cease from breaking to pieces racing for cheese Shaking the knees of every racists who labeled me weak I don’t play to proceed with the name of a G who’s aiming his heat The gauges that shriek deep in the brains in the seed... Of the maiden who seeks some faith from this pain that she bleeds Waiting to be placed in the grave cause it lays us in peace The only way to be free...Is either me or being named the deceased Every day of the week...Another fate will complete... The space of the waves in the sea as one escapes and recedes They say to praise where He sees the waste that we breathe But lately it seems, he turned away, we burned the grace that he breeds Learned to blaze in this weed - Gurgle cases to drink... The hurt away, then its leak the nerves will crave in the peak... Of dirt engraved in their veins cause it takes them to dreams The age doesn’t mean a thing ...That kid had caine when he sneezed Damn... It’s not the plan of the Lord - We’re always damned when we’re born Handed a sword for the land that we formed is branded with war I can’t stand it no more - I’m stranded in a planet with scorn Granted with more than cannons to damage the granite of poor Sand in the storms - Cause a man panicked and forced His clan to deport from their fam and disband in a hoard And damn it, it’s torn and banished the grands from before Now we’re standing on gore - As we dance with the horns Planted in the dampest of floors - Anxious for more Tanks are rambling forward, trampling the plants and the doors Of a home with the mother holding her son closely and hugs Mostly his blood soaking the gun he chose as the one I know they’re poking the fun - At them hopeless like bums Rolling as drunk soldiers, soulless holding doses of drugs And notes I flow are only closer to none... It’s like the rope is groping my throat as I choke when I’m hung Thrown in the slums... How many more times must I mention pain- - Or the pensions in this endless game meant to slay... Many saved from the end of the days where they enter gates Drenched in flames - When it was clear that the friends were fake And yeah I said it cause my eyes were clear to the struggle Fighting tears when a scuffle decided where you will rustle Beside a peer as his blood is lying near you and rubble Dyed his gear with the color the sky is clear with and covered We’re blind in fear and the troubles that stumbles into these steps A bunch of misfits who’ve bled for one who’s big and misled We’ve come from infants to men - Going on fifteen I know I’m wrong - Been flowing long since these... Pipsqueaks, showed me wrong with weed, chrome, and bonds with G’s And still my soul is strong...the golden charm IS Free A poet harmed, hit, treated so bizarre with ease Until the moment dawn hits deep, I hold the God in me You’ll all be gone quickly... ... |
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 11:19pm |
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dis sum hot shit. kan we battle
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 11:20pm |
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Posted: 15 July 2008 at 12:19am |
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First verse was tight, flow and rhymes were blazing all throughout..fav. quote from it:
Of the maiden who seeks some faith from this pain that she bleeds Waiting to be placed in the grave cause it lays us in peace Second verse was my favorite of the three and i just thought it was fire..Just liked the message of the second verse and the opening and closing lines were tight..my fav. quote from 2nd verse: It’s not the plan of the Lord - We’re always damned when we’re born Handed a sword for the land that we formed is branded with war third verse was my least favorite but it was still nice..It still had that real content like the other two verse but seemed to let up at the end a bit...anyway, fav. quote: We’re blind in fear and the troubles that stumbles into these steps A bunch of misfits who’ve bled for one who’s big and misled Nice to see ya dropping again, was very dope indeed |
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Posted: 15 July 2008 at 1:22am |
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thanks man...
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