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Rameez
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Topic: Street Life - FT ChainPosted: 09 August 2008 at 4:38pm |
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Rameez... eyo I'm walkin on the street and looking under ma feat {words from Chain} The epitome of watch and learn, always was the quiet one A sponge of street knowledge that was trained to acquire funds A lion’s son, lost in a labyrinth Flossing while sharing his…oxygen with viper lungs Parentless addicts that were careless made the riots fun Rebellious till the end, Friends with the fellas in the pens that will fire guns I only tried it once I aimed it at the sky, playing with that 9 Claiming I was wise, but now I’m driving drunk I liked to wreak havoc, my nigga had a weed habbit Couldn’t see past it and I supplied the blunts Had a nice little plant, had a nice little plan So I became the man, all them heads used to buy it from But wells run dry and ummm… I emptied out some thee bags, and sold it like lah to cunts Party till the light comes and wake up when the moon’s lit At the pub pointing at its craters with my pool stick Counting ‘em in deep thought, my cranium is wounded My sanity is hurt by this mania of goon shit Lost too many friendships, regardless of the outcome I’m partying without them ‘cause arguments will sound dumb I’m severing them ties, I’m not bothering to smile once Targeting the foul ones, I offer them the cow dung 1 |
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Posted: 09 August 2008 at 7:31pm |
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dis is on sum real shit
my fav part is N ppl with wealth jus party a lot and have alcoholic breath So when they are driving they’re life is always close to death Looking all over the globe its jus filled with infected bodies Coz every1 got so much hate they can kill to make a blood sea dis shit is true and da type shit i would lisen 2 u got dis on audio |
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Rameez
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Posted: 10 August 2008 at 1:24am |
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thanks for the feed guy.. I'll feed on ya piece soon.. no its not in audio.. but maybe soon..
uppin for more feeds please. if yer reading this peep, even a short comment would be nice.. thank u Edited by Rameez - 10 August 2008 at 1:25am |
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Posted: 10 August 2008 at 8:11am |
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i liked the second verse thought it flowed nice overall a good drop
my fav part was
I liked to wreak havoc, my nigga had a weed habbit Couldn’t see past it and I supplied the blunts Had a nice little plant, had a nice little plan So I became the man, all them heads used to buy it from But wells run dry and ummm… I emptied out some thee bags, and sold it like lah to cunts |
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Posted: 10 August 2008 at 9:28am |
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Rameez - one of the better drops I've ever seen from you. Impressive. I felt where you was coming from, and you got the message across.
Chain - as usual, crazy flow. The opening 4 lines " The epitome of watch and learn, always was the quiet one A sponge of street knowledge that was trained to acquire funds A lion’s son, lost in a labyrinth Just - wow. Not exactly brilliant lyrically, but the delivery and flow is perfect. I like the short third line that leads into the rhyme on the fourth matching with 1 and 2. That reads dope, and should this ever become audio, it always sounds cool when spit in that manner. Wouldn't put you two together to do a collab, but you definitely pulled it off. Chain's flow was dope throughout, following on from what I've mentioned above, and Ram definitely improved. Props. |
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Posted: 10 August 2008 at 9:59am |
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Gotta agree with the others..I was suprised with Rameez' verse..pretty good man, you've been uppin your game alot lately, keep it up. Chain..sick as usual. Rhymes were all over the place
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I-SEE-GRIPS
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Posted: 12 August 2008 at 4:39pm |
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Counting ‘em in deep thought, my cranium is wounded My sanity is hurt by this mania of goon shit Feeling those clever multi's that spit above prob my fav Ram
Easy Tiger, Fuck I couldnt even read your shit 2/3 months ago an now I am actualy feeling your drop man.
I aint saying its some Great thing but I will say at times you were painting a good picture with words an thats elevation man
Good
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Posted: 12 August 2008 at 7:28pm |
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I concur with I See Grips...
Nice verses from both of you. I enjoyed the read. |
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Rameez
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Posted: 13 August 2008 at 11:02pm |
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thanks again for the feed back guys.. and I'll bring much better verses than this.. so stick around.. and expect the best for the best
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Posted: 13 August 2008 at 11:08pm |
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Chain as usual dope as hell..not much else to say
Ram congrats on upping your game as said above |
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Posted: 15 August 2008 at 6:53pm |
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Like gun fights n police, boyfriend or girl friend cheats
Coming for a person who got tattoos n looks like freak and a lady who jus earning to show of her looks n physique I’m lookin at a road that is never straight but turns And where ever it leads to u’ll always hate n burn yo, u really stepped it up alot! u really brought it, the meaning of the verse, the flow, the bar structure, all dope
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Rameez
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Posted: 15 August 2008 at 8:51pm |
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thanks chain you were also good.. u had nice rhyming and sick flow..
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Posted: 16 August 2008 at 6:00am |
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Overall: rameez came nice, alot of good points but some bad ones too, chain came nice too
Thoughts: Rameez had some good lines and some solid points, but some times the simplicity goes too far ie "things dont look pretty" etc, a couple of times an off line was thrown in which threw off the verse, tho alot of positives, some cool multis, some nice flow and a number of nice lines that made the reader think. Chain felt like he was just going with the flow on this piece, he really got into the essence of street life which i liked, ram was talking about it from an outsiders perspective, chain went and spit it from the center of the problem, flow and rhymescheme where hot, content wasnt what it usually is imo, have seen better, but still cool. Things for next time: Chain, just do your thing, you know whats up. Ram, you eleveated alot here, and i feel the main problem now is the language barrier, the way you say things ie... "person with alcholic breath" etc, is not a phrase or how we would phrase something in our language, so it comes off as awkward / child like, if you can get rid of these you will start to elevate tons and get good feed, id also work on more experiences multis at this point, i think you are at that stage. Nice work, good collab. |
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Rameez
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Posted: 16 August 2008 at 5:58pm |
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thanks alot woody that was the feed I was looking for.. and u really gave me a good advise..
I guess I need to review more and more b4 I spit.. thanks again 1 |
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