Open Mic: The World Bleeds

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   Lyrics for my next audio, due up next week or so (as soon as I'm free)

yo i'm seein this, they try t'say i'm just a theorist
believin it's, conspiracy'n lies that they be feedin kids
it's evilness... how can we ever be free of this?
deceivin shit, ya beg fa truth'n they jus plead the fifth
we need t'split, from this chain of disdain
words of hatred'n pain t'raise the flames in ya brain
yo it's fake it's a game, a fabrication of fantasy
immasculatin classes t'wrack the nations with apathy
disastrous'ly, it seems that people'll follow it
it blows the world apart like endin beef with a hollow tip
so we're here, stood starin in the face of apocolypse
down to them'n the whole world'd be a great big necropolis
we may put a stop to it, but yo it's a maybe
it's the peeps who run the world who's stealin hope from our babies
i hope that i'm crazy and that this isn't true
but will ya just ignore this? coz the victim is you..
the world bleeds, they tryna leave us down on our knees
dreams're bein crushed between a mountain of schemes
the world bleeds, yo our hope receeds
a plague upon reality, a growin disease x 2
enter the hypocrits, leaders? fuck them i'm sick of this
degenerate regime who's layin waste to our innocence
belligerance, not gonna take it, it's war son
raining fire and brimstone, neolithic abortion
and they wonder how a guy could be blackened inside?
i got memories of hardships in the back of my mind
master of rhyme, a new prophet in the age of consumer
it's a game'n we're the pawns'n every race is a loser
disintegrate the veil of lies with light so that you can see
epitaph for society, i'm writing the eulogy
confusin me? nah i know i'll never be free
from perversions in the shadows only heaven can see
aint no beggin from me, i'll force a change on my own
you'll pay the price fa tryna stake a claim on my soul
yo if pain is ya goal, ask and you will recieve
we'll see if you can stand some real abuse as you bleed..
the world bleeds, they tryna leave us down on our knees
dreams're bein crushed between a mountain of schemes
the world bleeds, yo our hope receeds
a plague upon reality, a growin disease x 2

it's a crying shame, how many peeps'll fight'n die in pain
times've changed, a hero's fated for a life of strain
who likes a game where every one who plays loses?
where the one who makes rules is the one who makes nooses 
so we can hang ourselves with a rope of patriotism
it's bringin nations division, it's us who's placed in the schism
no use creatin a vision built on justice'n peace
when the powers're devouring hope'n crushing the weak 
how're we supposed to trust that life is sacred and pure
when the hatred is sure, to bring a waste to it all?
we still takin the fall, for the mistakes of our leaders
the greatest of men? or just the greatest deceivers?
i'm so sick of machinations you can keep the intrigue
inciting guys t'rise up, put an end t'each of ya schemes
defeating ya dreams of placid, hopeless, mindless contingents
a stringent rhyme, inflict ya minds, my fights too persistent

the world bleeds, they tryna leave us down on our knees
dreams're bein crushed between a mountain of schemes
the world bleeds, yo our hope receeds
a plague upon reality, a growin disease x 2

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SwordedStylez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4922 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN	Post Options Post Reply Quote SwordedStylez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: The World Bleeds Posted: 18 August 2008 at 2:34am
	Lyrics for my next audio, due up next week or so (as soon as I'm free) yo i'm seein this, they try t'say i'm just a theorist believin it's, conspiracy'n lies that they be feedin kids it's evilness... how can we ever be free of this? deceivin shit, ya beg fa truth'n they jus plead the fifth we need t'split, from this chain of disdain words of hatred'n pain t'raise the flames in ya brain yo it's fake it's a game, a fabrication of fantasy immasculatin classes t'wrack the nations with apathy disastrous'ly, it seems that people'll follow it it blows the world apart like endin beef with a hollow tip so we're here, stood starin in the face of apocolypse down to them'n the whole world'd be a great big necropolis we may put a stop to it, but yo it's a maybe it's the peeps who run the world who's stealin hope from our babies i hope that i'm crazy and that this isn't true but will ya just ignore this? coz the victim is you.. the world bleeds, they tryna leave us down on our knees dreams're bein crushed between a mountain of schemes the world bleeds, yo our hope receeds a plague upon reality, a growin disease x 2 enter the hypocrits, leaders? fuck them i'm sick of this degenerate regime who's layin waste to our innocence belligerance, not gonna take it, it's war son raining fire and brimstone, neolithic abortion and they wonder how a guy could be blackened inside? i got memories of hardships in the back of my mind master of rhyme, a new prophet in the age of consumer it's a game'n we're the pawns'n every race is a loser disintegrate the veil of lies with light so that you can see epitaph for society, i'm writing the eulogy confusin me? nah i know i'll never be free from perversions in the shadows only heaven can see aint no beggin from me, i'll force a change on my own you'll pay the price fa tryna stake a claim on my soul yo if pain is ya goal, ask and you will recieve we'll see if you can stand some real abuse as you bleed.. the world bleeds, they tryna leave us down on our knees dreams're bein crushed between a mountain of schemes the world bleeds, yo our hope receeds a plague upon reality, a growin disease x 2 it's a crying shame, how many peeps'll fight'n die in pain times've changed, a hero's fated for a life of strain who likes a game where every one who plays loses? where the one who makes rules is the one who makes nooses so we can hang ourselves with a rope of patriotism it's bringin nations division, it's us who's placed in the schism no use creatin a vision built on justice'n peace when the powers're devouring hope'n crushing the weak how're we supposed to trust that life is sacred and pure when the hatred is sure, to bring a waste to it all? we still takin the fall, for the mistakes of our leaders the greatest of men? or just the greatest deceivers? i'm so sick of machinations you can keep the intrigue inciting guys t'rise up, put an end t'each of ya schemes defeating ya dreams of placid, hopeless, mindless contingents a stringent rhyme, inflict ya minds, my fights too persistent the world bleeds, they tryna leave us down on our knees dreams're bein crushed between a mountain of schemes the world bleeds, yo our hope receeds a plague upon reality, a growin disease x 2
	Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's)

SwordedStylez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4922 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN	Post Options Post Reply Quote SwordedStylez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 20 August 2008 at 2:54am
	bump
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Matt The Ripper Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 19 March 2008 Location: Cultus Lake, BC Status: Offline Points: 4042 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 25-40-2 Form: WLLLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote Matt The Ripper Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 20 August 2008 at 3:42am
	It's lookin' real good, yo!

mcwoods Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 04 December 2006 Status: Offline Points: 4204 Crew: XFade: Phoenix Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 42-51-0 Form: LLLLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote mcwoods Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 20 August 2008 at 6:15am
	Okay - first thought... real good Verse one - message was tight, flow was hot, vocab was well done, rhyming was cool too , seemed like a nice intro into the song, hollow tips line was hot, "but yo its a maybe", could maybe changed to "But you know its a maybe", as yo sounded a little off too me, ending line is nice and powerful... hook- is good, message gets across, flow sounds good to me, but im not sure how your gonna say the words, so its hard to tell, but it does what a hook does, is catchy enough verse 2 - it gets better from here , starts off with nice flow, nice rhyming and nice points, blackened inside bar, and age of consumer bar where both hot, rhyming a slight bit of, society - euology, maybe thats just my accent, good job in that verse verse 3 - opening bar is cool, next bar, your repeating the same "everyone loses" like the race in the second verse, which threw me off a bit, tho the nooses line is hot, then the rest of it is just nice rhyming, nice mutlis and cool lines, cant fault it really... overall - its not my type of thing, but i can respect the talent it takes to make a song like this, flow rhyming and message where all done well, should be a good audio good job..

SwordedStylez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4922 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN	Post Options Post Reply Quote SwordedStylez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 20 August 2008 at 9:16am
	good looks on the feed woods, although society isn't meant to rhyme with eulody. the rhyme is "you can see" and "eulogy" ;)
	Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's)

SwordedStylez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4922 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN	Post Options Post Reply Quote SwordedStylez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 August 2008 at 1:55am
	bump
	Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's)

SwordedStylez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 16 August 2007 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 4922 Audio Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-0-1 Form: WWWN	Post Options Post Reply Quote SwordedStylez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 25 August 2008 at 11:11am
	Bump. Again.
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Rameez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 31 July 2007 Location: Brampton, CDN Status: Offline Points: 3922 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 22-40-4 Form: NWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Rameez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 25 August 2008 at 12:31pm
	really nice start in the beginning, I like the flow and good use ov multis, the content was decent.. but it was a good way of starting the verse... then hook rolls over the tongue, nicely done 2nd verse.. again nice flow some nice line that can be quotable, nice vocab.. and last verse had some hot lines.. u end ya verse nicely, this is a good verse for audio.. keep it up SS.. can u give lil feed on ma verse..thx http://lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=16061