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Matt The Ripper 
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 Topic: Lyricism 101Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:10am |
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Well I don't know... fuck it... lol I can't use SoundClick... this is the first track I just threw together with this program WavePadSound... obviously amateur quality... as I started with Eminem saying, "I'm the Devil" (from the beginning of the American Psycho track), then I have it cut into that song, "If you don't know me by now..." I wanted to then throw in a clip of Jay Z saying, "Allow me to re-introduce myself" and then back to Em saying, "I'm the Devil." It's all rough copy/paste work, but it's whatever, right now. I was just havin' fun with all the effects, too, which will be obvious... but it is what it is... The beat I used was Immortal Technique's "Dance With The Devil" Lyricist_Inc_Diss_Audio01.mp3 - 2.56MB Wanna read along? I wear my fitted cap off to the side, real low You try that word play, It ain't the kind we feel, though! I'll drop a few bars that'll have ya crew praisin', 'real dope' You wannabe lyricists stink, tell me, where'd the skill go?? Ya collab's are gettin' stale, I stay fresh, rip an' serve ill flows You better than me, yet?? Nahh man, The answer's still no!! I will blow ya mind, like I planted a bomb inside ya head You could've kept it real for Hip-Hop, but you lied instead! I'll rhyme 'again' wit' 'n' then', n' then rhyme again n' again, 'cause once I begin, ain't no tellin' when the rhymes'll end! Each line'll blend into the next line, people checkout how I text mine Ya bars are still simple stupid, the fuck do you know 'bout a complex rhyme?! I'm Tech N9ne meets Immortal Technique, motherfucker, you text weak This ain't a diss, It's a fact that you won't be any better next week! Motherfucker, I already got 'em lined up waitin' for my next piece Fuck Aminal man, I'm a real beast, a cannibal man, he'll be my next feast! Come test me, I'm ready! Ask Buck', "How Many MC's Must Get Dissed?!" I party like a rockstar, now get this... y'all ain't even been on a guest list! Now ya know who not to mess with, I'm more aggressive n' impressive than you Y'all got no skill in this rap game, What I possess is the proof! I'm excessive with truth, so you can trust me when I say y'all got no talent 'cause none of you is ill, y'all have jus' been straight up mentally challenged! Edited by Matt The Ripper - 30 July 2009 at 10:15am |
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:22am |
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Wow. I'm sorry. About 6 bars though I had to turn it off. First off, you sound like a robot. A quiet robot. The flow was basically off, and just talking. Your bars are crazy long.
You should shorten your bars to fit the beat. Get Adobe. I'll give you some tips on cleaning your vocals up if you do. I dunno if you put that robot effect on there or you actually sound like that. But that needs to go. Next time you record something, attack the mic like its the people you're dissin'. Put a little passion and emotion into it. |
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:24am |
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Matt ima be brutally honest as its the only way to help you improve.
You're presence mixed wit that beat nearly made me fall asleep. Just all seemed so dull. And the weird effects all the way through just made it nearly unlistenable. Lyrics were cool and all but as an audio peice this just wasn't working for me. I'd suggest to stop fucking around with effects, try and be more confident when ya spitting and turn ya vocals up a little.
Keep at it dude.
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:34am |
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Yeah, I just found this program, so I was just messin' around with the effects, just managed to have typed about half of that piece up before I found it, so I figured i'd use it.
Oh well. Appreciate the feedback. And I can't use Adobe, either. I tried it awhile back and the time expired on it... i'm sure there's some crack that would allow me to keep using it, but i'm not very handy when it comes to that side of using the computer. I don't know where to look, etc. Oh well... maybe there's something other than Adobe I can find. |
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:40am |
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I have a crack for Adobe.
Download it free at www.adobe.com and the get at me.
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:40am |
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a'ite werent much ofa diss an ya did wat alot of peps do wen they start on audio-mess around on tha effects an sum how even wen its wack it sounds cool to yu cos ya did it i know this cos i did tha same many times b4 i relised wat i was doin was ba but in all fairness if ya ty hard to find a low an find a beat b4 writing to it then ya should get there
this is lyricist inc we dnt get dropped by theses typa drops keep trying Peace |
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 10:50am |
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lol Rap... alright, man... I guess I better up my game, then. heh.
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Posted: 30 July 2009 at 9:23pm |
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yeah man, this was just bad, on some extra level shit. The effects were reallly off putting, and as other mentioned, you just gotta get some confidence and hit that mic. I had some similar issues when I first started audio. Keep at it though man, it can only get better from here.
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 I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
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Matt The Ripper
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 1:47am |
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lol thanks for all the input... I knew this was going to be a bit much for everyone... good shit
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 2:18am |
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Sounds too monotone. Lyrics are okay, but you need much better delivery...
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 2:24am |
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I wasn't focussed on the delivery, just found this program and wanted to play around with it.
I'll stop fuckin' wit' the effects now and get real serious like all y'all cats... chill. |
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 2:36am |
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okay lyrics i guess
but why are you talking to the mic and in such a nerdy voice? |
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 2:39am |
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Why are you such a nerd, period?
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 12:24pm |
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Dude, don't put ya shit up here if you can't take the critism. You don't have to snap back at everybody for giving honest feed.
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 12:43pm |
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I thanked everyone for their input. Even you, Calego!
The previous comment I was attacking was just a blatant and unneccessary attack. I don't have to take that. Even you would snap back.... and you have ("Why can't you just give me good feedback only?!") |
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 1:04pm |
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When you're not quoting I'd suggest not to use quotation marks. And yet again an "unneccassary attack" for something negative aimed towards you. Your attitude as of late is wearing pretty thin with me and I pressume other aswell. You were never my favourite person but atleast you didn't try to be a prick with very post back then. |
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 1:07pm |
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I feel the same way about you, man. So give it a break.
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Posted: 31 July 2009 at 1:12pm |
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Lol you attacked me... dont get it twisted. I was just pointing out if you dont like negative critism dont post. You felt the need to try and be smart, doesnt suit you. I've also offered to help you get Audition aswell so I dont see where your problem with me comes from.
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Posted: 02 August 2009 at 9:14pm |
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Lol @ (straight up mentally challenged) how did you think that was good or even ok ?
Let's get one thing clear that shit there despite the name could never be a Lyricist Inc Diss
However
I feel props are in order here as this is clearly ya first attempt and everyone has to start from the beginning (thank fuck I did not put my very first tracks up on here)
TBH
I think there was enough promise shown to believe you could be quite good at this once you pick up a few basics (hit me up mate with any questions! If I can help I will)
I reckon
this bad track has been a learning curve for you and you will learn well and come back with a much better drop soon (dont give up)
Peace
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