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direct1
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Joined: 29 March 2008 Location: north wales Status: Offline Points: 486 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-3-0 Form: LLLWW |
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Topic: quick 12 linesPosted: 29 March 2008 at 11:30am |
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i spit molten words that occurred from earths surface,
strong like a rock reflect ya atttacks with due purpose to throw em back on a track coz the fact is youz worthless i merc dis, den im snatched up like ya girls purse is, this thirst is like a hurst is to you, spit words dat a heard and deficate ya crew, some times i rhyme sloppy coz im jus dottin, not stoppin for nuffin i jus keep jottin, but nows da end of my few bars sit up in my dudes yard sippin on a few jars, thinkin of my next task leavin ya with huge scars as u garsp watchin life jus flew past!
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...Wicked Wit Wordplay... Joined: 08 March 2005 Location: Chicago Status: Offline Points: 6441 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-4-2 Form: WNNWWW |
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Posted: 29 March 2008 at 12:06pm |
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Pretty basic and simple. You did have a pretty decent flow tho but the content really needs working. Im gonna have to see some consistancy before giving you a higher rank.
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Posted: 29 March 2008 at 3:42pm |
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yeh man dats cool i fully understand what ya mean now i got time to sort my stuff out and get back at u!
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