Battles under Review: Io oniel Vs Abmeht El Aifam

12 bars
due within 24hours
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His face aint elliptical, the right-sides' got bumps, the lefts' got Madia's bum humps
his been mastubatin for several weeks, he tuned in on youtube and saw a link of squirting chicks and went like "damn i hate freaks"
i'll vise-grip your neck usin one hand with the other, continuously uppercutin this idler, ti'll his head pops up like a champaigne bottle cap, i should say fuck rap, this bitch is on his p.c, wide smile with a 2chains cap, Io aka supernatural, in secs a punch will come outa ya screen right at ya and leave ya teath gapped
his gettin kicked&elbowed, he'l get tossed&boxed in gravel road
im white & his black with Pappa Docks mode, havent went hard on him, already he looks chocked
its an ethnic tension, only way to solve it is by giving this polotical muslim fag a suspension, Obama feels no emotion for khats wearing skirts on a battle occasion
Abmeht fried coke thinkin it was a way of doing meth, how can you mix acids when you don know math? Stupid people seem to rule the earth
im an extreterrestrial, a cyclops aka mean ugly individual
ima play with his corpses beyond the galaxy thus to eyes of god it'l be live and visual
shuve him in a coffin with blades on the sides, shake it until blood splashes,laugh as he screams but he wont be heard like a clowns mimes
evil khat with a dagger on killing sprees
hold you up side down and shuve it up ya throat then twist it and watch as pieces of inner organs fall
flinstone here and ima throw his head with igneus rock, he wont have the chance to live at all.
He says his a Chuck Norris product on this battle but to Io the fag is touchable
spin kick him but this guy is hard headed,a wanna be Swatzineger spartan, so I gave him prepella kicks like a spasmotic rifle, too bad the impact shatter an eyeball, now I got a one eyed nikka as a rival....aint that a bitch?
I got a nice technique, and ima bully this textual rapper and leave each thumb with a sticth
queen elizabeth could rap better than him, know what? Fuck him, faggot go back to mixin meat with cream claimin you're cool and cookin. Fuck. Your shit'll never be seen as dope. If that happens, it will be fraud like Mr.Bean is famous for bein a pope.
Hang you without usin a rope, this khat changed from being robust to bein cowardous, hack his a human antillope....

Ai tsek im blank.

LO OLNIEL- Ok your structure is seriously fucked up . I wanna say that the rhyming was off but the structure was so fucking bad i don't know what was even supposed to rhhyme withh what, go read the tutorials they helped me get better and hopefully they help yyou i dont know where you were going with it you went from concept to concept chopy with no metaphors or clever refeerence. shit was a mess dawg. lol
AL- you have very good struicture and very good kknack and making things rhyme and flow . I liked this one

but this was a landslide MVGT -AL

Moving to under review - things I need to look at here. Don't jump to conclusions. Just having to check a web of shit.