Open Mic: Cosmic War

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   *funny story. This actually started as a freestyle on another board but then i got into it lmao. let me now what yall think. oh and all feeds will be return

Cosmic War
Thumbs up for waking. The sun halts for no mages
summon the Great Old Ones; fallen stars of the ages****
darkness enthrall the faces. 
Shocking; the dawn of ape-shit
Chthulu warring with Angels, their swords forged from the stars
divine enchantment from God, for piercing through Azathoth*
who's hide was made from the Laws of physics...
he resides in the space before time: The Changeless Void
he dreamt reality! Existence is but his makeshift toys
He's Azathoth
his minions, auteur of cosmic art
his palace, a formless mass floating beyond the void
around him were mindless dancers that were spawned from noises
that he uttered...
before Jehovah command "LET THERE BE LIGHT"
"That voice..." thought, Azathoth, from the glaring-less night
the timeless space; The place from where he stared at the sight
"Who dare challenge my reign? Speak now or forever bear the might
of my Many-Angled Ones, on standby, prepared for the fight!!"**
"YOU ARE ALL THERE IS. BUT I AM ONE ABOVE EVEN YOU.
YOU MAY IMAGINED IT ALL, BUT IT WAS I WHO IMAGINED YOU.
STAND DOWN."
Infuriated, Azathoth summoned the Many-Angled Ones, 
Powerful, blasphemous entities that inhabits the Land of None,
a 9th dimension; A realm of hyper reality
their frames, a frightening mass of deep
patterns and twisted forms
it shattered our physics walls, that governed the script of God.

"The Word"
He was cloaked in crimson robe.
Focused. His mission told.
created when the first imperative's spoke.
he was The Word of God.***
An anthropomorphic facade
God commanded a cleansing 
So now His Word shall be bond.

*Azathoth is a surpreme omnipotent entity from the Chthulu Mythos created by H.P. Lovecraft. http://lovecraft.wikia.com/wiki/Azathoth
**Many-Angled Ones are Lovecraftian based creatures from Marvel Comics. http://marvel.com/universe/Many-Angled_Ones_(Cancerverse)
***The Word is the manifestation of the first word of God in DC/Vertigo Comics
****The Great Old Ones are very powerful cosmic entities from Chthulu Mythos

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Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2227 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Cosmic War Posted: 14 October 2016 at 2:11am
	funny story. This actually started as a freestyle on another board but then i got into it lmao. let me now what yall think. oh and all feeds will be return Cosmic War* Thumbs up for waking. The sun halts for no mages summon the Great Old Ones; fallen stars of the ages** darkness enthrall the faces. Shocking; the dawn of ape-shit Chthulu warring with Angels, their swords forged from the stars divine enchantment from God*, for piercing through Azathoth who's hide was made from the Laws of physics... he resides in the space before time: The Changeless Void he dreamt reality! Existence is but his makeshift toys He's Azathoth his minions, auteur of cosmic art his palace, a formless mass floating beyond the void around him were mindless dancers that were spawned from noises that he uttered... before Jehovah command "LET THERE BE LIGHT" "That voice..." thought, Azathoth, from the glaring-less night the timeless space; The place from where he stared at the sight "Who dare challenge my reign? Speak now or forever bear the might of my Many-Angled Ones, on standby, prepared for the fight!!" "YOU ARE ALL THERE IS. BUT I AM ONE ABOVE EVEN YOU. YOU MAY IMAGINED IT ALL, BUT IT WAS I WHO IMAGINED YOU. STAND DOWN." Infuriated, Azathoth summoned the Many-Angled Ones, Powerful, blasphemous entities that inhabits the Land of None, a 9th dimension; A realm of hyper reality their frames, a frightening mass of deep patterns and twisted forms it shattered our physics walls, that governed the script of God. "The Word" He was cloaked in crimson robe. Focused. His mission told. created when the first imperative's spoke. he was The Word of God.* An anthropomorphic facade God commanded a cleansing So now His Word shall be bond. Azathoth is a surpreme omnipotent entity from the Chthulu Mythos created by H.P. Lovecraft. http://lovecraft.wikia.com/wiki/Azathoth Many-Angled Ones are Lovecraftian based creatures from Marvel Comics. http://marvel.com/universe/Many-Angled_Ones_(Cancerverse) The Word is the manifestation of the first word of God in DC/Vertigo Comics **The Great Old Ones are very powerful cosmic entities from Chthulu Mythos


alicewonder Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 09 May 2015 Location: uk Status: Offline Points: 653 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-2 Form: WWLNN	Post Options Post Reply Quote alicewonder Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 14 October 2016 at 11:15pm
	This is definitely an intriguing read. You incorporated several references which might seem slightly abstract at first, but after some re-reading in combination with the additional information you provided, I think this turned out to be quite visual. It's very specific with a rather focal development display, and I'm sure that people who are more familiar with the content on hand can appreciate it even more. It's not like the usual work I've read from you so far, but it's definitely an interesting display of your unconventional schemes, even more so since it's a freestyle. I liked the "makeshift toys" and the scheme of the "shattered our physics walls" part.

D-NoS Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 10 October 2014 Location: UK-Wales Status: Offline Points: 207 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-6-0 Form: LLLLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote D-NoS Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 15 October 2016 at 2:49pm
	Some deep metaphysical stuff here, I like it. I think it would make an excellent ending to a spooky type of track, or something like that. Good read thanks!
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Rude Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 03 February 2014 Status: Offline Points: 243 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-2-0 Form: LWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote Rude Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 October 2016 at 2:44pm
	You have appealed to my inner comic nerdiness with this one. I'd barely knew of the H.P. Lovecraft stuff, but the Many Angled Ones and The Word, you hooked me right in with. Word usage, schemes and phrasings were all good in here. I can really appreciate that this really felt like reading the text equivalence of a 1-shot cross-over comic with all of these characters. You had some great imagery within this as well. I liked it.

SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1389 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 October 2016 at 3:14pm
	Lol before I read your footnotes at the bottom of the verse I thought to myself, this dude has been reading a lot Marvel comics. Personally, I've always been a big fan of the cosmic and abstract side of both Marvel and DC/Vertigo. So I'm extremely familiar with the characters/concepts mentioned. Thus, I was able to follow the story arch effortlessly. In fact, when it comes to comics, I typically tend to read those that depict the higher entities like the Abstracts or the Endless or cosmic entities or inter-dimensional beings or gods, so this was definitely a well enjoyed read for me. It almost reads like an occult mythology or creation piece, which is something I can get lost in all day. You know...I think you just put me on a spiritual rediscovery mission for today. I think I'm about to light a bowl and just drift off into the ether with meditation music playing in the background. Dope shit, Sammy. I dug it all. Peace!

Kiki Spirez Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 30 December 2008 Location: Chesterfield Status: Offline Points: 4375 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 68-26-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Kiki Spirez Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 October 2016 at 5:04pm
	Drops like this amaze me. I've never been too read up on Gods and Mythology - so it astounds me that topics like this can make an open mic. The fact that you got my attention despite my lack of knowledge spoke volumes. What i can comment on was the rhyming structures and they were top notch. You intertwined internals and half rhymes effortlessly, not limited by an ABAB guideline. Very impressed with this bro.


Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2227 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 October 2016 at 5:37pm
	@Rude, glad u liked it. Yeah i'm trying to merge the Lovecraftian cosmology with Comics as i'm a huge fan of both! @Self yoooo!! I fuckin love cosmics and abstracts in Comics! and i LOOOVE the Endless, man! Neil Gaiman's that nigga! My favorite is Death (DC/Vertigo). I'm gonna try to incorporate her into this story somehow. @kiki thanks, bro. I really appreciate you taking time and effort to drop a feed. I will definitely return the courtesy.


SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1389 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 16 October 2016 at 7:11pm
	Yeah, she has a lot of personality to be the personification of death. Although, from Vertigo, I think my favorite character is Lucy. As for Marvel I like the concept behind characters like Cyttorak and the Celestials. But, yeah, bro...this was dope. I'll drop some feed on your other joint a little later today.