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The 2020 Tournament
Round Two: Text (standard rules)
spume corrupt vs CHAIN
Verses are to be 8 bars or 16 lines in length.
Battlers have 14 days from now to write their bars.
If there are no decisive votes on the battle after 7 days once the verse is posted, then I will vote in an unbiased manner and decide on the winner to continue to the next round.
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*been bullying your ass*

I'd be weaker than you if I was Daz but fuck...
You're Dogg Food out the gate 'cause you are THAT corrupt.

*Smack you up!*

You're just a dick rider, we done peeped your name
'cause Spume means "froth or foam that you see on Waves".

*Facts!*

How you leading L.I when Manc is your God?
...
It's like the 'Gades giving Big Game a managing job!

It was a bad omen when Manc found Corrupt
You only gained the reigns once they were out of 'Luck'.

*Lucky D!*

Clicked on your crew's page, is the skill there now?
...
You're stuck on 'Remembering the Spine' like you're wheelchair bound.

If the back bone's gone then how's anyone there to ride?
Or step? I guess your crew is now a 'pair of lies'.

*Take a stand!*

Back to the wheelchair 'cause I'ma put you down
...And rolling like that is why you get 'pushed' around.

Been writing all these years... still you are trash
And I'ma stand on that shit like stomping stilts in yo' ass!

Body!

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Without the centred text, ad lib cringe of desperation...Trash


What’s good with ya ex crew dude? U slipping on shit cos it slowly died
Fire U up with the real Sick Witted spit then re-connect you 2 Homicide
You ain’t that bonafide, bossed when I show what a joke this bitch is
Ya’ll see me dragging Chain across the floor like I’m a ghost of Christmas
20 plus years fake braggadocio, plain this over boarders rap life is shit
When I drown out CHAIN, that’s just another time that he’s cap sizing big
Fake baller banged out and damaged, I’ve been a bomber from the start
Final whistle, defeated, he can’t take this beating like Maradona’s heart
H.games died looking sunfin lame, you starved bringing dead food to a crew
Repping no shows bro! Rui didn’t bring an N but still I’ll RuiN the dude
U drop Fred Perry polo Om’s fucking homo just stay in ya small lane man
Get blocked, couldn’t handle these rocks with a hammer and a full chain gang
Fuck you An a kin member, ya whole family beaten till they slide of the walls
Left wing pussy, catch a Dave Prowse clout and go out wrong side of the force
Consigned to a corpse, this joint bodies you with the venom that I’m smoking
Corrupt Flipping the whole chain of command like The democrats are voting

Murder

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Ey str8 up this was a fucking dope ass battle good job to both of you guys fuck yeea

Sooo...

Chain i think the adlib add ins between bars were a good choice because it made your piece have some uniqueness witch made it stand out and also out emphasis on your punches which obviously is what you wanna do. Your personals in here were dope af the way you incorporated them in with some sick metas... You str8 bodied him in my opinion. You used your words well and the punches were delivered clearly and cleverly. Awesome job.

SPUME- i also think that your verse was dope af but it was also very different. Your emotions were more palable by way of ur delivery and your piece had that grungy raw fuck you to it and i liked the vibe ... That vibe also gives your punches more power so it worked in your advantage.

Over all i think both verses were awesome but i think that because of better harder hitting punches that were more personal and clearly delivered

MVGT - CHAIN
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CHAIN

I'd be weaker than you if I was Daz but fuck...
You're Dogg Food out the gate 'cause you are THAT corrupt.

(Lively bar here, start as you mean to go along eh, this was direct and gritty, i
also liked the personal)

You're just a dick rider, we done peeped your name
'cause Spume means "froth or foam that you see on Waves".

(Nice bar clean and tidy all round really, not venomous but it landed, I actually
thought the punch was slightly forced though, when pairing *dick with foam/
froth and ride/wave", but for me the personal within was were the meat resides,
it was cool direct and blunted, by that (blunted) I'mean no fuss or mess or cra-
mming the bar with unnecessary words, which is why it seemed heavy in landing)

How you leading L.I when Manc is your God?
...
It's like the 'Gades giving Big Game a managing job!

It was a bad omen when Manc found Corrupt
You only gained the reigns once they were out of 'Luck'.

(Ok nice shot via the crew angle,.I enjoysd the the first 2 lines.more so than the
2 that followed, as you seem to be attacking the traits that should be admirable,
loyalty/duty/pride as he's keeping/kept LI going when all but himself was left, I
get it though, but attacking someone for having any qualities is like Trump and
the Mcain saga, you may think im being on the bias side but it isnt that, thing is
because it lacks wit or aggression, it felt redundant & sort of counter effective,
but with that typed battles are battles and no-one has to be politically correct so
overal yeah it was still cool)

Clicked on your crew's page, is the skill there now?
...
You're stuck on 'Remembering the Spine' like you're wheelchair bound.

If the back bone's gone then how's anyone there to ride?
Or step? I guess your crew is now a 'pair of lies'.

(Now this was heavy, even though there's a subliminal in it making its way in my
direction (thanks for highlighting that ego trip of yours..lol), but yeah this was a
couple of good shots there, landed too, see I'm not bias)

Back to the wheelchair 'cause I'ma put you down
...And rolling like that is why you get 'pushed' around.

Been writing all these years... still you are trash
And I'ma stand on that shit like stomping stilts in yo' ass!

(Clever bar, attacking on many fronts with the entendres slant, standing/shit and
stilts/ass, and the wheel chair bar had humour and cool wordplay, the concept has
been played out a bit read kind of old but it worked, as it was worded nice)




Spume


What’s good with ya ex crew dude? U slipping on shit cos it slowly died
Fire U up with the real Sick Witted spit then re-connect you 2 Homicide

(firstly I liked the inclusion of older members aliases, it was a cool inclusion to
form them into a punch, good start)

You ain’t that bonafide, bossed when I show what a joke this bitch is
Ya’ll see me dragging Chain across the floor like I’m a ghost of Christmas

(Liked the simile used here it made me smile, it was a nice personal/punch,
plus the dragging part gave this some grit, cool shot)

20 plus years fake braggadocio, plain this over boarders rap life is shit
When I drown out CHAIN, that’s just another time that he’s cap sizing big

(this bar was ok light but ok, it has merit I mean I get the jist of him being
above his station or out his depth against you, and how he'll never obtain
anything now, I mean it wasn't bad,)

Fake baller banged out and damaged, I’ve been a bomber from the start
Final whistle, defeated, he can’t take this beating like Maradona’s heart

(I liked this one for the simile used more than anything, as it's current witty
and cold, semi generic and loose but I did like it, sort of a self hype bar too)

H.games died looking sunfin lame, you starved bringing dead food to a crew
Repping no shows bro! Rui didn’t bring an N but still I’ll RuiN the dude

(Nice play on words and again aliases, not a heavy bar as per say, but it was
relevant and had a flair about it, it also had some grit too)

U drop Fred Perry polo Om’s fucking homo just stay in ya small lane man
Get blocked, couldn’t handle these rocks with a hammer and a full chain gang

(Nice attack on all fronts here including his OM and alias, and the punch was
heavy too, and to be honest I thought it was detailed with imagery via the w/play
which in turn added weight to a solid punch)

Fuck you An a kin member, ya whole family beaten till they slide of the walls
Left wing pussy, catch a Dave Prowse clout and go out wrong side of the force

(Hmm, I'll type now the w/play was cool, but the concept was decrepit and tired, so
many Star Wars bars been used over the yrs, gave this a stale vibe)

Consigned to a corpse, this joint bodies you with the venom that I’m smoking
Corrupt Flipping the whole chain of command like The democrats are voting

(Nice parting shot this, current personal and packing some clout, landed too
airport style..lol, and just what the DR ordered after the bar prior this)


Overall DRAW, I would if I could call it that way, this battle is so close kind of
perplexing to vote on really, both dropped solid verses, verses that needed to
be read a few a times to catch the little things/subliminas, obviously no love
lost between the 2, and that's thing, there is nothing but 1 thing that honestly
separates you both, and that's grit/attacking, and this is lame to call a battle
on that really, but I do like me some grit when reading battles, I feel Spume
had more emotion etched into his bars, whilst CHAIN had clever side swipes
and wording, he also had the better flow, then Spume had more aggression,
so now it's preference time...

Vote..Spume.

Good show guys ,real good...peace.

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Chain//

Opener was jokes. The wordplay was clever and a clean personal punch to get things rolling.

The wordplay in your second was some clever shit, but I just wasn’t feeling man.

Simple and effective third and fourth.

Started getting more heavy with punches in the fifth. Execution of the Punchline was clean.

Sixth bar felt a bit lightweight to be honest.

Seventh was heavy though, great set up for a jokes punchline.

Closer wasn’t your best work either, the set up had potential but the punchline wasn’t the best.

Overall// To be completely honest, after seeing your slugfest with Neek earlier in the year I was expecting a lot more. Seemed to not have your foot on the gas in this one.

Spume//

Aggression was rife in your opener, multies made it flow slick too and nice personal punch aswell. Nice work.

Keeping in tone, enjoying the aggressive approach and the Chain/Xmas punch was solid.

Third was stretched and a swing and a miss for me.

Maradona punch was jokes. Set up was aaight but didn’t really see the necessity for bomber in there.

Rui play didn’t work, forced.

Wasn’t feeling your fifth bar either.

The Dave Prowse bar had something in it but not set up and executed cleanly enough imo.

Enjoyed the flow and punch in your closer.

Overall// You started off heavyy man but as it went on dropped wayy off.

Vote - CHAIN

After reading the Spumes opening two bars I thought he had this in the bag but he fell well off after that with the Maradona bar the only really connected afterwards. CHAIN had better consistently imo.
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Chain:


I'd be weaker than you if I was Daz but fuck...
You're Dogg Food out the gate 'cause you are THAT corrupt.
Okay start with a decent flip.

You're just a dick rider, we done peeped your name
'cause Spume means "froth or foam that you see on Waves".
See you point but kinda reaching here.

How you leading L.I when Manc is your God?
...
It's like the 'Gades giving Big Game a managing job!
Witty enough, not super hard but aight.

It was a bad omen when Manc found Corrupt
You only gained the reigns once they were out of 'Luck'.
Slightly better crew related diss

Clicked on your crew's page, is the skill there now?
...
You're stuck on 'Remembering the Spine' like you're wheelchair bound.
Best so far, hardcore and effective.

If the back bone's gone then how's anyone there to ride?
Or step? I guess your crew is now a 'pair of lies'.
Decent follow up..


Back to the wheelchair 'cause I'ma put you down
...And rolling like that is why you get 'pushed' around.
Seen the wheelchair\pushed around play before, still nicely flipped

Been writing all these years... still you are trash
And I'ma stand on that shit like stomping stilts in yo' ass!
Erm, I guess you figured you killed him at this point.



Spume:

What’s good with ya ex crew dude? U slipping on shit cos it slowly died
Fire U up with the real Sick Witted spit then re-connect you 2 Homicide
Okay intro to your verse, coulda played more cleverly perhaps

You ain’t that bonafide, bossed when I show what a joke this bitch is
Ya’ll see me dragging Chain across the floor like I’m a ghost of Christmas
I liked this personal, timely and hardhitting

20 plus years fake braggadocio, plain this over boarders rap life is shit
When I drown out CHAIN, that’s just another time that he’s cap sizing big
Okay, tho Ill Scriptz did something similar

Fake baller banged out and damaged, I’ve been a bomber from the start
Final whistle, defeated, he can’t take this beating like Maradona’s heart
Cool bar, not more to say really'

H.games died looking sunfin lame, you starved bringing dead food to a crew
Repping no shows bro! Rui didn’t bring an N but still I’ll RuiN the dude
Chain = Rui? Either way its an aight letter play

U drop Fred Perry polo Om’s fucking homo just stay in ya small lane man
Get blocked, couldn’t handle these rocks with a hammer and a full chain gang
Not too advanced but I liked it still, funny.

Fuck you An a kin member, ya whole family beaten till they slide of the walls
Left wing pussy, catch a Dave Prowse clout and go out wrong side of the force
Nah, felt this was a bit convoluted.

Consigned to a corpse, this joint bodies you with the venom that I’m smoking
Corrupt Flipping the whole chain of command like The democrats are voting
It's a nice play but the chain play is getting worned out at this point


Nice battle overall, and as even as it gets. Chain had the arrogant playfulness and some strong hits, and read like an OM diss with following threads and such. While a murderous motivated Spume  more traditional with straight punches. I dunno, reading again I think Spume barely edged this with being more varied in his angles, close call tho.

Vote "froth or foam that you see on Waves".


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Ayo this battle been flames, it's the corrupt vs the chained, the spume vs the train, kinda verse that I concur cause flume on the brain, so lets dissect it:

CHAIN

I read this verse a few times so took a holiday to re-read it and that last bar again, like every time I read it be like is that a tribute to Ice Cube's foot in yo ass line or is it a personal or is it just you stomping stilts in someones ass. I'mma go out on a limb and say nearly over half your verse was about his crew and that for me it felt like your verse got weaker in punches as it read through, like out the gate I liked that corrupt and the froth/foam thing was clever. Likewise Big Game a managing job/out of luck/wheelchair bound were aiit but like linguistically you were lacking some aggression. You put him down and stomped stilts in his ass (not sure why) but that was the only kinda brutality or physicality in the bars. There were personals and while they might have emotionally hurt, and there was some nameplay which was clever, aggression/effort felt to me like they could have been more present as elements even if stylistically and thematically it worked perfectly as a verse, you could've brought more to the table, whether it was by way of that or more inner rhymes/creative concepts linking the verse in the grouped areas instead of having those adlibs running around it.

spume you got a chance to fire back after seeing what you were up against so in a way you have an inside advantage or something. The democrats voting/flip the chain of command was a cool finisher off the bat. Chain across the floor and Ruin the dude worked sweet as wordplay/imagery/nameplay/personal elements comedically for me. Though a lot of your verse was directed towards a crew there was some brutal imagery in there that came across as more aggressive like can't take this beating like Maradona's heart/reconnect you to Homicide/wrong side of the force/consigned to a corpse they were all pretty sweet to read through as elements where it felt like there was something personal to this battle taken on from the opener from CHAIN.

Re-reading it again I can see that CHAIN while quite personal in a direct way emotionally but his verse is shaped like a V in that the bars get weaker as it reads through compared to the blockstyle long-line verse that spume brought to this battle. spumes verse read solidly with something hitting as a punch in every bar whereas CHAIN started with a few jabs that really felt disconnected with the stilts line for me I just couldn't see that verse hitting harder for me on this occasion but props to both, both battles were a good read and this one took maybe the most contemplation of the verses in the tournament so far but yeah MVGT

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