Text Battle Archive: [T]Joffy428 VS stalin

Stalin you look like NOT a stallion more like. A fake medallion that i bet a fake bullet Goes through like its nothin lifes hard for a stupid Person who never knew that.

But forget you like your X did She will never forgive u how U turned FAG! When she heard u BRAG! HOW U GOT IT BAD! WHEN U DID HARDCORE TWEAKERPORN! She was so mad to feel unlucky so she got revenged and did a bukakke!now she feels all lucky AND not yucky

Battle me u wished you battled last years version wouldve been easier story is cut short when i erase U with an eraser There can only be one KILLER- WHEN u nightmared sumthin like dog eat dog or killed or be killed! But Beware stay still AND get drilled another funeral TO get Billed

But Thats just Money make money to get poonanie is what they say is SO AS I WALK THROUGH THAT VALLEY I SAY IS that ur auntie? no way! is that your mom! Your grandma? Looks familliar i swear i seen em with my uncle Before si mr. Pogi a.k.a handsome uncle Joffer.

Not a good battle tbh

Joff you need to dumb it down bro. Be more creative/harsh/wittier man. You pretty much made up a bunch of shit and attempted to rhyme it all(kind of). Just mostly generic/kindergarten disses not trying to be a dick head but you need to work some things out bro


Stalin idk if you read his verse and just keyed something up but this verse was light. You did enough though to win. Had actual punches, allot of filler but your verse was more tuned thanks Joffs


V/Stalin

Joffy - your verse was quite simple. You had frequent rhymes, but your disses were basic and you didn't really attempt any punchlines. In a short battle a lack of punchlines will hurt you and make your verse less impactful. I think you're quite reliant on your rhymes to create your rhythm, so if you reduced the amount of rhyming you'd be writing more prose like, so you have a challenge of how to improve your flow so you don't need to rhyme so frequently and then you can have more flexibility to think about how to land harder disses/punches. For what it's worth I'd consider moving to a shorter line format, as I think over the longer term that would help you improve your rhythm.

Overall it was an ok verse, that didn't do a great deal of damage to opponent.

Stalin - your verse was fine, clearly used your experience here. Implicitly your style was a lot more refined than your opponent, much more complexity but equally much more control so it felt effortless. I liked the orphaned child one. Couple of the others were quite simple, but you didn't really need to stretch and I think you knew it. A simple punchline with complex rhymes and smooth flow is better than what you were up against. I would've liked to seen a bit more attitude and disdain coming through from you, you could've played up your reputation relative to him more for my liking...it wasn't necessary to win, of course, but I think if you're going to battle then it's worth pushing yourself to be more creative in terms of battle approach than you were. You have that in your locker, I would've liked to have seen it.

Overall it was a solid enough verse that more than did the job required in this one.

Vote = Stalin for a more sophisticated and clinical battle verse.

3-0 KO to Stalin.