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    Posted: 10 January 2023 at 3:49am
I see how your so proud this of place, your biggest accomplishment
Wearing it on your chest like a badge got your wife left in astonishment
a legend in her eyes since you picked her off the street
Stalin loves saving life’s homeless bitches gotta eat
A nice fixer upper, putting lipstick on a pig
This dipshit thinks his lyrics really made a dig
You didn’t even scratch the surface I mentioned you for a reason
But this worthless trash you coming back with stop me from believin
That Stalin the type of lyricist that could write something actually worth reading
I poked the bear but he’s dead and gone a clone of his former self
a joke compared to his younger years I can tell by his mental health
The way he struggles to string his words together with a rhythm
The way it stings to know I’m right so much clever when I’m spittin
The way I bring the facts to light and keep on givin
generous Emcee these punches on a mission
Open hand slap this bitch into submission
Have’ em tappin on the mat in the fetal position
So keep them fangs tucked before I snap em and crack em
And make you prove them dentistry skills while you re attach’em

Edited by Slip - 10 January 2023 at 4:11am
See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so
warn the mother fucking people
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote JBrenn Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 10 January 2023 at 8:25pm
The last two line were your best stuff here.... the rest is just made up personals that just lack conviction...

again the drop feels rushed or forced.

flow is good again but you just are missing a real punch line or a real personal....

plus its annoy as shit that you drop this shit twice... just make your own post or leave some real feed back. dont just spam the site it makes other members not want to post or respect your drops just some advice take it or leave it i dont care
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This was my feedback to the shots Stalin was throwin, 2 verses that have to do with each other only makes sense to post together so readers get the full story and I posted here just to keep track of my writtens
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inner demon violent beast so
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You been here almost 10 years and cant even put a multi syllable rhyme scheme together????
+Sick-Witted+
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No one gives a shit except
Some kids that just got into sex on the Internet
So you want the chatroom or the house in Malibu?
Em, your emphasis is on the wrong syl-la-la-ble


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