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Slip
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Topic: Thought you were better than that, Stalin?Posted: 10 January 2023 at 3:49am |
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I see how your so proud this of place, your biggest accomplishment
Wearing it on your chest like a badge got your wife left in astonishment a legend in her eyes since you picked her off the street Stalin loves saving life’s homeless bitches gotta eat A nice fixer upper, putting lipstick on a pig This dipshit thinks his lyrics really made a dig You didn’t even scratch the surface I mentioned you for a reason But this worthless trash you coming back with stop me from believin That Stalin the type of lyricist that could write something actually worth reading I poked the bear but he’s dead and gone a clone of his former self a joke compared to his younger years I can tell by his mental health The way he struggles to string his words together with a rhythm The way it stings to know I’m right so much clever when I’m spittin The way I bring the facts to light and keep on givin generous Emcee these punches on a mission Open hand slap this bitch into submission Have’ em tappin on the mat in the fetal position So keep them fangs tucked before I snap em and crack em And make you prove them dentistry skills while you re attach’em Edited by Slip - 10 January 2023 at 4:11am |
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See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so warn the mother fucking people |
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JBrenn
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Posted: 10 January 2023 at 8:25pm |
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The last two line were your best stuff here.... the rest is just made up personals that just lack conviction...
again the drop feels rushed or forced. flow is good again but you just are missing a real punch line or a real personal.... plus its annoy as shit that you drop this shit twice... just make your own post or leave some real feed back. dont just spam the site it makes other members not want to post or respect your drops just some advice take it or leave it i dont care
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Slip
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Posted: 10 January 2023 at 9:07pm |
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This was my feedback to the shots Stalin was throwin, 2 verses that have to do with each other only makes sense to post together so readers get the full story and I posted here just to keep track of my writtens
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See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego
inner demon violent beast so warn the mother fucking people |
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Stalin
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Posted: 11 January 2023 at 5:35am |
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You been here almost 10 years and cant even put a multi syllable rhyme scheme together????
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+Sick-Witted+
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rhetorical
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Posted: 11 January 2023 at 8:18pm |
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No one gives a shit except Some kids that just got into sex on the Internet So you want the chatroom or the house in Malibu? Em, your emphasis is on the wrong syl-la-la-ble
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