Battles under Review: hollow vs Mackie (3format-rounds)

---REGULAR BATTLE---

* = sect >> sector >> division >> group, SO D's sects/Dalinquent's groups.  AND E-sex/Essex (location)
 ** = all of these are related to the Profound Diss.  The beat he used is a beat Eminem used to diss Benzino.  The diss was called "Final Nail in the Coffin."
*** = Already beat the leader of his little group.  Now, he's next.
**** = FX is a television channel which has a show called The Shield.  Not sure how pupular it is in UK.  It's about a cop, Vick Mackie who uses... "questionable" methods to do his job.  Shield is slang for a police badge.

You pathetic as fuck, no wonder you STICK wit' D's sects/*
You an "internet pussy" that loves gettin' dick from E-sex/*
It's sad, the truest shit you ever wrote, it's in Flash's sig/
An' this verse'll seal ya fate, somethin' like a casket lid/**
The "Final Nail in the Coffin," it's time to go down, bitch/**
Six feet deep jus like ya did in ya fuckin' ProFound diss/**
You REALLY be suckin' a Hollow-dick after you swallow a litre/
Straight from my nuts like you was playin' "Follow the Leader"/***
Fuck what "caused" it, now you feel the FX, dude/
An' this ain't the barn, Mackie, not even a Shield'll protect YOU/****

---HORRORCORE---

I hide razors under my skin to make incisions in ya throat/
an punctures in ya stomach to stick my dick up in 'em both/
New meanin' to deep throat.  I hope he doesn't puke, 'cause/
I'ma wipe it in his mouth, so he can drink the mucus/
'Castrate him'.  Take a meat cleaver an maneuver through 'her'/
Inject him wit' cancer, jus' to cut open an' remove the tumor/
Leave ya covered in band-aids an' bandaged abrasions/
Cut ya hands an' feet off an' ask for a standing ovation/
Use a "pencil from my pocket," to fill you wit' "lead from my hip"/
Sew ya mouth fuckin' shut, an' MAKE you beg me to quit/

---TOPIC: Internet---

Who woulda thought the devil would defile this industry/
What's become a pedophiles playground an' a childs worst enemy/
It sickens me. Statistically, chances are one in a hundred thousand/
So I never gave it thought, until the police come to my house an'/
Tell me I gotta identify a body that they think's my little girl/
Suddenly the room swirls, my whole world begins to twist an' twirl/
My stomach sinks, heart skips a beat, I'm on my knees beggin' God/
"Jesus, please I'll do anything you ask, if I'm able to say it's not!"/
They pull the cover back at the hospital.  "Oh My GOD!" an' I cried/
How in the Hell do I tell my brother that his daughter jus' died?/

Battle

Hollow - First bar was really weak and MASSIVLY forced the play and didnt hit atall, it wasnt a pesonal atall imo didnt hit, Second bar was ok again no real hard punch though more of a filler punch and coulda of been used against anyone if re-worded, Next bar was again OK nothing special, Next bar was nice...nice play and good punch picked up here,  Closer was shit. You had one bar i liked the rest either didnt hit, or seemed like filler.

Mackie - Told ya on msn i wasnt really feeling the opener i can see what you was aiming to do but it didnt come off as a hard punch imo could of been used alot better, Next bar was nice made me laugh and it hit, Lol at next bar, mainly for the fact EVERYONE confuses him for dal...made me laugh nice hit, End rhyme of the next bar didnt come off perfect for me, so kinda messed with the flow hit was ok...nothing special, lol closer was funny, Overall not a brilliant verse but had a few nice hits

Vote - Mackie took this imo, hollow had one punch i liked where as mackie had three he threw and landed more MACKIE GMV

Horrocore

Hollow - Started off nicely but lacked detail which id like to read in a first bar to get me gripped, wasnt bad just lacked description nice idea and nice rhyming though, Second bar was ok though cause and mucus dont really rhyme, the end rhyme seemed forced imo, The first line of the next bar made no sense since you said castrate HIM manover through HER....which sex is he...she... it? Kinda seemed forced to rhyme with tumor imo, Next two bars were nice but nothing special overall was an ok verse but not much HORROR....lacked description to capture my mind imo.

Mackie - Nice opener got straight into the idea of the verse and had nice description from the off, Next bar was dope flow was perfect (which is strange for you) and again had dope description, next bar was nice again flow was abit off towards the end though which kinda messed with it, Dont like how u used defence twice at the end of the next bar but other than trhat it was decent, Last bar was ok, nicely worked but could of been better, Overall a nice verse seen betetr from you but description was there.

Vote - Mackie gets my vote i enjoyed reading his verse more and it had more descrition and captured my mind of the 'horror' situation more.  

Topical

Hollow - Well firstly im really confused as the topic was INTERNET and you wrote about peadophiles and your brothers daughter getting killed, now im guessing the peado thing is the link to the internet...This was a nice read but imo you didnt go deep enough into the actual topic you had 3/4 lines relating to it and than went off about your brothers daughter....You didnt seem to concentrate on the topic at hand too much and swayed off....Kinda lost it for ya

Mackie - First bar was kinda lame for me dont like how you used the word networks twice and also the end rhymes seemed off and forced, again same with the next bar it was OK but nothing special made me smile i guess, Wasnt feeling the next bar, flow was all over the place, next bar was cool, last bar was probably your best one actually made me laugh....Kept on topic which hollow failed to do but wasnt the best verse iv ever read.

Vote - Mackie...Since he stayed on topic throughout hollow started off dope and than somehow drifted onto a completly diffrent topic outside of the internet and that lost it for him imo....Its hard to explain because Hollow had the better verse but like i said drifted off topic if he had stay on about the internet he'd of taken this EASILY.

Mackie wins all 3.....1-0 mackie

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Edited by 2smooth - 10 October 2007 at 11:16am

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