Open Mic: Illiads - Catherine meets "The Dragon"

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Boss gave me orders
Catherine Miller is a "hot" informant 
She worked for Don as a performer
broke honor and needs the torture
For a Quarter Mill her life will end in Horror 
She resides near the Mexican border 
Drives a yellow Camaro like the one in transformers 
Out-ran the enforcers with over four hundred horses
 my GPS recorder reports her residing in Loredo 
she's dating a guy named Pedro
I spy as the days go
Her shameful dates go on as i visualize her betrayal 
to the Don that paid this hoe 99k of dope 
to do lines off his table
Her death will be finalized and painful 
 got my sights on a time to rock the cradle
Bright sights pointed at her Navel 
She turns around and smiles while acting playful 
Flips me the bird and i realized i braked code
I take a shot at the right precise angle 
Miss the angel but got her pops between the nasals
Her face filled with pain leaves me feeling graceful
Trigger finger stabled, im aiming above her stomach
Silencer fitted the bullet muffled in public
She drops like a puppet while her muscles plummet 
She struggles but another one hits her nugget 
Her cousin comes in the picture while my gun plays trumpet
I hit him in the lungs quick
Pumping rounds in the house with this long range musket
Her mom hits the ground and daughter takes jumping   
I yell to the little girl to "get the fuck down pumpkin"
She takes one to the crown like a dumb kid 
Her body hits the ground like crumbs from a crumpet 
What the fuck kid, Catherine was the only needed target 
Fuck it, The Don just wants to see the carcass 
get out the car nd get pics of her brains blown apart (egh)
in this market you need to be heartless
4 family members lay dead near the apartment 
I wrap them up in some carpet
Catherine for me was the hardest hit
Stupid bitch was retarded, her family lay dead leaking 
these conceded twits received her mistreatment
I bet you wonder how i can even sleep (shit)
i leap into bed, put on CNN and see what i did
Headline news, "5 dead in the streets with kids"
"The Dragon strikes and EL Diablo creeping IN" 
"The team of sin is leading in homicides and violence"
"Their frightening tactics remind me of Nihilists"
"You cross Illiads or you form a tight alliance"
Its headlines like these that help me sleep in complete silence

I read between the lines with bliss


Edited by daydizzle89 - 05 January 2017 at 6:46pm

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daydizzle89 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote daydizzle89 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Illiads - Catherine meets "The Dragon" Posted: 05 January 2017 at 6:26pm
	Boss gave me orders Catherine Miller is a "hot" informant She worked for Don as a performer broke honor and needs the torture For a Quarter Mill her life will end in Horror She resides near the Mexican border Drives a yellow Camaro like the one in transformers Out-ran the enforcers with over four hundred horses my GPS recorder reports her residing in Loredo she's dating a guy named Pedro I spy as the days go Her shameful dates go on as i visualize her betrayal to the Don that paid this hoe 99k of dope to do lines off his table Her death will be finalized and painful got my sights on a time to rock the cradle Bright sights pointed at her Navel She turns around and smiles while acting playful Flips me the bird and i realized i braked code I take a shot at the right precise angle Miss the angel but got her pops between the nasals Her face filled with pain leaves me feeling graceful Trigger finger stabled, im aiming above her stomach Silencer fitted the bullet muffled in public She drops like a puppet while her muscles plummet She struggles but another one hits her nugget Her cousin comes in the picture while my gun plays trumpet I hit him in the lungs quick Pumping rounds in the house with this long range musket Her mom hits the ground and daughter takes jumping I yell to the little girl to "get the fuck down pumpkin" She takes one to the crown like a dumb kid Her body hits the ground like crumbs from a crumpet What the fuck kid, Catherine was the only needed target Fuck it, The Don just wants to see the carcass get out the car nd get pics of her brains blown apart (egh) in this market you need to be heartless 4 family members lay dead near the apartment I wrap them up in some carpet Catherine for me was the hardest hit Stupid bitch was retarded, her family lay dead leaking these conceded twits received her mistreatment I bet you wonder how i can even sleep (shit) i leap into bed, put on CNN and see what i did Headline news, "5 dead in the streets with kids" "The Dragon strikes and EL Diablo creeping IN" "The team of sin is leading in homicides and violence" "Their frightening tactics remind me of Nihilists" "You cross Illiads or you form a tight alliance" Its headlines like these that help me sleep in complete silence I read between the lines with bliss Edited by daydizzle89 - 05 January 2017 at 6:46pm

rhetorical Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 14 February 2014 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 809 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-0 Form: WWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote rhetorical Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 05 January 2017 at 7:03pm
	Very cool journey into the mind of a hitman. I know im jumping around a bit here, but the end really illustrates the lack of empathy and compassion one would need to just take a human life while no guilt remains on the conscious. A straight forward story, but well developed and easily paced. . The flow really picked up around this section "Her face filled with pain leaves me feeling graceful Trigger finger stabled, im aiming above her stomach Silencer fitted the bullet muffled in public She drops like a puppet while her muscles plummet She struggles but another one hits her nugget Her cousin comes in the picture while my gun plays trumpet I hit him in the lungs quick" It was pretty much rapid fire from that point. Played out like a crime drama short, I just let the words run the images in my head as i read on. . . overall, this was well executed my man. Good ish . . enjoyable read


daydizzle89 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote daydizzle89 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 12 January 2017 at 3:10pm
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	Whoa! This was crazy. I felt like I was in the mind of or looking through the eyes of a real life sicario in a Mexican cartel. Real Las Zetas kind of shit. I dug the entire narrative and the twisted angle you wrote it from. The sadistic, yet at the same time, indifferent nature of the hitman seemed really authentic and psychopathic. In fact, he reminded me of a documentary I saw not too long ago on teenage assassins work for the drug gangs in Mexico, thus I was immediately able to register all the imagery and perspective you created and identify with actual real-life people. Also, your flow was dialed in all the way and both your wording and vocabulary were truly top shelf. I thoroughly enjoyed this joint, Dizz. It was cinematic as fuck, bruh. Peace...